"What are you doing, stepbro?" but with real thoughts and emotions

[MayorReynolds]

I've been kicking this idea around in my head for a while. It's the typical "sis walks in on bro," "bro walks in on sis," or "mom walks in on bro/sis and says 'you're doing that wrong, let a pro show you'" scenario that we've all seen thousands of times on streaming video sites.

However, it gets a thorough literary/erotica story treatment. What's really going on in bro, sis, or mom's head? What thoughts go through their minds as this unfolds? How are they really reacting, internally, to being walked in on in the shower, or seeing mom acting so sensual all of a sudden, or this calamity of being stuck in the dryer escalating in such a fashion?

Video can't get inside the heads of its characters. But stories can.

This could almost come off like a parody of those scenes, while also stretching out into something more...meaningful?

I even thought of a title for it: That Scene, With Feeling.

 

[sirhugs]

and the sequel is "Once More, With Feeling"?

 

[ericrodman101]

I love internal monologue - what are they feeling about what's happening. I try to write like that and worry I include too much of it. But in the end describing sex acts can be repetitive whereas describing what they're thinking means you can go anywhere, in any order, with any amount of craziness you like.

As for what's going on in your head when you're stuck in the dryer, my mind is racing.

 

[FantasySheWrote]

I love the internal monologue and getting into the characters’ heads. It’s one of my primary reasons for writing and lets me explore things and situations that I will never be able to actually participate in.