Well, I made a liar outta myself again

[KillerMuffin]

*squeezes eyes shut tightly and peeks through one of them* I, uh, started writing a story today. It's working out well, I'll probably finish it today. It's a short one. Ah, it's *scrunching to avoid getting whacked* in second person.

Well, I tell most everyone I edit, "Good story, first bit of advice, take it out of second person and whack that puppy into third person. Past tense if you can swing it. You alienate most of your audience in second person."

And here I am, doing a second person story. I can hear it now when I lie to my editor and innocently say, oh no! it's not in second person and she reads it. KM!!!!! BAD MUFFIN *WHACK WHACK WHACK* Don't write in second person, you alienate most of your audience!

Well, we'll see if my attempt at second person POV passes muster with the finest female editor to ever set foot on my stuff. Truth to tell, I kinda like it when she hits me. *grins*

 

[JUDO]

Name?

What's it called, KM? (I know, it ain't posted, but I'm curious).

- Judo

 

[KillerMuffin]

Losing Pieces of You. Actually, I have a clip posted at my website, well, if you can call my community at MSN a website. It's under Scribblings if you click the red house and wanna see it.

 

[Ray Dario]

KM,

Second person is fine if you can pull it off. Tough thing to do though. I have never done it to my satisfaction and I have never seen it here on Lit.

Good luck, I hope it makes it. If any of us here can do it, it is probably you.

Please post a note when it gets posted. I want to look.

Ray

 

[KillerMuffin]

Well it's finished and it's poignant. Or however you spell it. Ever want your editor to come on line so you could bully him/her into looking at your masterpiece immediately?

I'm almost ashamed to admit it, but I'm going to submit it tonight anyway. Whisper may whack the tar outta me for it, but darn it, it's good! Or so I say now fresh from writing. Everyone knows you need a cooling off period.

Okay, I waited 10 seconds.

Dammit, at least this one is finished!!!!!!

 

[JUDO]

Not there?

KM-

Went to your site. Tried to bring up the story and it looks like all your 'Clips from stories' are missing or have been removed?

I went to Scribblings->Clips From Stories->Losing Pieces of You.htm

And I would get a new page popping up that titled 'Please Sign In' and the information on that page said that the page requested was missing. It reccommended that I go back to the home page and try again. I did. Same result.

So, I joined your site (thinking that prehaps I had to in order to have access). I tried again. Same result.

???

- Judo

 

[KillerMuffin]

MSN Communities is down for a while. But it posted.

Losing Pieces of You

 

[Ray Dario]

Success!

She did it!!!

The story was fantastic and she made the "Second Person" perspective work wonderfully. This is a powerful and erotic story and it touched me deeply.

Ray

 

[nitengale]

niten's thoughts...

KM...another well written piece...touching, full of emotion, and thought provoking.

You continue to aspire me to keep going with my own writing, or to follows yours!

 

[cymbidia]

I love the way you write.
You make me want to be a better writer (and not just because you're a hard-ass editor, either).

This story is breathtaking.
Thanks, babes.

 

[SpectreT]

I have always hated reading second person. This one was almost enough to make me revise my opinion. In short, It was an incredible piece, and it needed to be in secon person to work.

Just beautiful.

 

[wild_jay]

KM, this worked very, very well. One of, if not the best, written stories I have had the pleasure to read on this site. Great work, and a must read for anyone inspired to write.

 

[Cockatoo]

Aw, maaaaaan

I read it. I loved it. Really. I wrote to KM and told her so, and that I didn't have the cajones to try one myself.

So, what do I do? I go about making a liar out of myself, too. Damnit. Well, hey, there's no law that says I have to FINISH it and POST it, is there?