TheNovelist2000
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First off, why am I posting this in Author’s Hangout?
I received an automated rejection slip yesterday, and I believe the issue may stem from this part of the guideline:
• Ravishment/non-consent fantasies in which the “victim” receives no thrill or enjoyment from the acts, or is seriously and/or permanently physically harmed, abused, maimed, or killed.
The story is called The Beauties and the Caged Beast. It’s about a girl named Mira who discovers that her cousin Cher keeps a man named Brucie in a cage in her basement. Initially, Mira believes the arrangement is inhumane and totally wrong, but she gradually grows into her role as his gentle sitter.
The story’s background—how this arrangement came to be—is not yet explored in the first six chapters, but it will be revealed later that Brucie was initially forced to live this way after allegedly raping Cher (or being accused of it). Over time, however, it becomes a consensual dynamic. This is foreshadowed early on when Mira tries to help Brucie escape, only for him to voluntarily return to Cher. Since the story is told entirely from Mira’s POV, she interprets his return as a sign of manipulation rather than genuine consent. In fact, everything is filtered through her perspective, and she initially sees an exaggerated version of what’s really going on—until she begins to care for him herself.
Here are the potential reasons I believe my story was rejected:
I am not sure whether I’m allowed to add a google doc link in this forum. (I’ve seen it in the story feedback forum.) If it is allowed, please let me know. I will tag the link for you guys to get a better picture of my situation.
- I don’t think the story has any editorial issues such as incorrect punctuation or grammar. (So I didn’t post it in the Editor’s Forum.)
- I don’t think the Story Feedback forum is really thriving. (I haven’t seen many replies there.)
- I’ve grown to like the people in Author’s Hangout, who have always been eager to help me at every turn. (Thank you, guys.)
I received an automated rejection slip yesterday, and I believe the issue may stem from this part of the guideline:
• Ravishment/non-consent fantasies in which the “victim” receives no thrill or enjoyment from the acts, or is seriously and/or permanently physically harmed, abused, maimed, or killed.
The story is called The Beauties and the Caged Beast. It’s about a girl named Mira who discovers that her cousin Cher keeps a man named Brucie in a cage in her basement. Initially, Mira believes the arrangement is inhumane and totally wrong, but she gradually grows into her role as his gentle sitter.
The story’s background—how this arrangement came to be—is not yet explored in the first six chapters, but it will be revealed later that Brucie was initially forced to live this way after allegedly raping Cher (or being accused of it). Over time, however, it becomes a consensual dynamic. This is foreshadowed early on when Mira tries to help Brucie escape, only for him to voluntarily return to Cher. Since the story is told entirely from Mira’s POV, she interprets his return as a sign of manipulation rather than genuine consent. In fact, everything is filtered through her perspective, and she initially sees an exaggerated version of what’s really going on—until she begins to care for him herself.
Here are the potential reasons I believe my story was rejected:
- Brucie’s consent is not explicitly stated or shown. From Mira’s perspective, he appears coerced or brainwashed.
- The moderators may view the treatment Brucie receives as abuse, even if he secretly enjoys it. While he is never violently harmed, he is spanked twice—once by Cher with a cane (leaving his bottom red but within common BDSM limits), and once more gently by Mira using a belt.
- The depiction of Brucie being treated like a dog might be considered too extreme. For example:
- He sleeps in a cage, though only at night or when there are guests in the house.
- He is required to relieve himself outdoors or on the floor, consistent with the petplay theme.
- He is occasionally fed scraps rather than full meals, as part of his submissive role.
- It is implied that Cher sometimes withholds food for a limited period (never more than a day), usually as a form of discipline.
- He crawls at all times, never walking upright, in order to fully embody his role as a submissive pet.
- The use of dehumanising language like “rump,” “paws,” or “mutt” may have triggered concerns about bestiality—even though the story is clearly framed as petplay within a BDSM context.
- The use of words like “child” or “schoolgirl” to describe Cher might have been misinterpreted, even though these terms are never used in a sexual context. For example: “I found Cher sitting on the edge of the bed with her legs together like a guilty schoolgirl.”
- The moderators may not have read the story thoroughly. I included a note stating that the story does not involve bestiality, but perhaps they assumed from the summary that it’s about abuse, rather than a consensual, long-term petplay dynamic. I also got the rejection within 24 hours, so may be Laurel didn’t even read it.
- The story contains themes of psychological domination and cuckolding. Later in the narrative, Mira manipulates Cher into financial and emotional dependence—charging her to visit her boyfriend, exploiting her debts, and even enabling her drug use to control her. These developments are intended to serve as a moral arc. Mira will eventually recognise her own cruelty and attempt to rehabilitate Cher, but that comes much later. It’s possible the moderators considered this too abusive or disturbing.
- The narrative is not in Brucie and he doesn’t talk (as per rules of Petplay), so he is often depicted quite passively. One of my own flaws is that I don’t have the ability to flush out his character or his moods through behaviour. He appears to be quite flat although he obviously is very obedient, does not try to struggle or anything and participate willingly in tricks. So, he may come across as a lobotomised, brainless, drone.
- One scene depicts Mira recounting how Cher has told her to never stimulate his caged cock. But that doesn’t mean that he doesn’t get pleasure or a thrill. In one scene, Mira tells him about what her boyfriend does to her, and he leaks a string of precum. That should clarify Laurel that he’s getting sexual pleasure from it even though he is not allowed to cum. And his cock straining against the cage is depicted more than a few times. Maybe a permanent denial is too harsh in Laurel's eyes?
- One scene depicts Mira’s boyfriend, Jason, getting drunk, and what begins as soft domination turns unexpectedly rough. Mira is tied to the kitchen table and only released after halftime. She is spanked like a 1950s housewife by her drunken boyfriend using a belt, made to wear a waistband with a thin strip, and forced to serve him during the game. Later that night, she is essentially raped on her own bed—Jason, too intoxicated to realise what he’s doing, has sex with her while she’s still restrained. She remains tied up until morning. The next day, she breaks up with him, calling him an “asshole.” This scene may have been a major factor in the rejection.
I am not sure whether I’m allowed to add a google doc link in this forum. (I’ve seen it in the story feedback forum.) If it is allowed, please let me know. I will tag the link for you guys to get a better picture of my situation.
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