War of the supernaturals

[Stalzyn]

Hi, everyone.
This is my idea of a story, so far, i haven't been able to actually work on it. yet.

The story setting is in the 21st/22nd century. There is a war fought discretly between a group of human hunters called Examplar Mortis E.M,(latin: meaning pattern of death) and the last generation of supernatural creatures.
It can be worked out that the genes of supernatural creatures were stopped by magic by a hybrid(half-human half-supernatural) thus it couldn't be transferred by birth.
After many generations, now in the 21/22 century, the curse is weekened and the genes of the new generations now appear.
The examplar mortis who was the sole cause of the magic is back to extinguish them.

I am thinking the story should be written in 3 dimensions, that is from the mindset of 3 individuals. One an EM, another the leader of the supernaturals, and the last can be an ordinary human, or fall anywhere.
The story is meant to be broad and a lot of ideas are in my head about it. Please do tell me what you think.

 

[Sean Renaud]

First I hate to correct your spelling, I really do but that one really hurts mah brainz. It's spelled 'weakened' not 'weekened' and if weren't for the fact that mah stupid brainz kept wondering where Bernie was on this weekend it might not have driven me so goddamn batty. But it did so there.

That being said I know this place is technically story ideas and not erotic story ideas so you're not in the 'wrong place' per se but I'm very heavily failing to see where the sex comes in and if it's not supposed to I guess there is nothing wrong with that strictly speaking.

First it seems like you've got some moving pieces that don't really make sense without more bits you haven't explained. You start with the Supernaturals are rare because something magical stopped them from breeding. Except even in settings where there is no particularly good reason for them to be rare (Buffy, Vampire Diaries, hell nearly any vampire fiction) there are so many things keeping them in check that without the supernaturals being the heroes of this story very near extinction despite having integrated with humanity or something similar I think you've got a cog in your machine that doesn't turn anything and should be scrapped.

Is the E.M. supposed to be a good guy? I mean in most stories (again Buffy, Underworld, Van Hellsing, Castlevania, Supernatural etc etc) the hunters are the good guys, the last line between humanity and the monsters that would devour us all and turn the world into a hell dimension just for shits and giggles. In the little you've described here this EM seems more like super powered Hitler about to wrap up the Final Solution. (Take that Godwin's law! Second post, fourth paragraph and it's appropriate too!) I mean why is he back, it seems like neutering them is doing the job just fine and unless a cure of some sort was found at the very least he's just being spiteful more so than constructive unless they've decided "fuck it lets do as much damage as possible on the way out!"

Finally as for the regular human. . .well that almost never ends well. Your world simply isn't well developed enough to even know where a human would stand. IS the Supernatural something that is known about to some degree and how are they viewed as a whole and how strong are they by comparison to the EM. How much damage do they do on average? How much does the EM care about collateral damage?

In the end I know I'm being harsh but this isn't a bad idea as ideas go, it's just currently so under developed that it's hard to get a solid fix on it.

 

[Stalzyn]

Thanks for the correction, everyone needs it. No matter how much they deny it. Now on to the story.
Like i said, this was a rough piece, a summary if you'd like to call it that, not a detailed explanation, and there are so many ideas in my head.
I'll start by saying this was meant first to be an rp, that's why it needed three dimensional writing.
Second, as an rp, or maybe a story, i wanted the writer i.e if its an rp or the reader i.e if its a story, to choose where and who to believe in.
They have the freedom to choose the supernaturals or the e.m as their protagonist/antagonist.
As for the human, he/she is just an unfortunate person trapped between the two rivals. That is he/she knows suspect or knows what's going on.
As for the sex, a twisted thing like a supernatural and a human. A supernatural and an E.M, a mission might link this two.
If you understand this parts, i'll move to the story idea proper.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Okay, I understand it. The problem at this point becomes that writing for an RP is fundamentally different from writing a story. They aren't even really similar animals. In an RP you want to leave the maximum amount of grey area so people can fill in the blanks in a story you kinda want a tighter idea going in cus lets face it it's gonna unravel itself anyway.

 

[Stalzyn]

(side thought) If you and your RPers agree, you can copy and edit your RPed story and submit as a new story. Right?

You are right my good friend. It'll work better as a story, only thing is i can't from the perspective of three characters and still be neutral. I would end up favoring one over the other and that will be choosing for the reader.
But as an rp, the three or so persons write from what they think and believe, portraying their characters in whatever fashion.
Reading a book and commenting at the end like this, "though his method was wrong, i still believe he was a hero." is the force behind the story.
Got it so far?
Maybe after i explain the story you can advice which method is best. k?

 

[Stalzyn]

Here is a link to my idea. From this link you'll travel to another thread of mine where it is better explained
http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=1199627

 

[Sean Renaud]

I'm still with you and yeah as a story you tend to end up picking for the reader but really that's not necessary. There are lots of stories where you don't have to try very hard to see things from the other guy's point of view expecially if you get to see some things from it. A good example would be X-Men First Class expecially watched back to back with X-men from 98. It's very easy to understand why Eric Leshner (however his last name is spelled) a Jewish Holocaust survivor sees his government gearing up to gather his people, brand them so the government can find them and decides "fuck that I've read this book before." Are his methods extreme? Fuck yeah they are but lets not pretend that most of us wouldn't be in his same shoes in that situation.

On the other hand it's easy to understand why Professor X doesn't want to go to all out war with the humans and would prefer peace. Most of us do and he has the benefit of his mother not having been killed by Nazi's of not nearly having been killed himself, etc, etc, etc so he can feel that way because he didn't go through what Mags did.

And us regular humans just don't want to be there when Storm and Magneto tear down half of New York City with lightnight and magnetism and have a hard time really feeling sorry for anybody because I don't you're a Jew and shit sucked but you just buried my family beneath a condo and guess what? My pity for you and your personal plight died with my Grams.

 

[MyRubiLips]

Hi Stalzyn. I see you did start a SRP in that board. Were you looking for ideas to turn this into a "full" story or would you like your thread moved to the "lounge" sub-forum of Sexual Role Play?

 

[Stalzyn]

Hi Stalzyn. I see you did start a SRP in that board. Were you looking for ideas to turn this into a "full" story or would you like your thread moved to the "lounge" sub-forum of Sexual Role Play?

Thanks for checking it out. Thing is i don't really know the use of the lounge (no offence here), i mean, its much like the srp right?
Tell me what the lounge actually is and does, that will help me make a choice.

 

[MyRubiLips]

The way I understand it, The Lounge is kind of a "chat" board that tends to relate to role plays. I believe that hey often have threads like "Role Plays looking for Players", etc. This could be like a "support" thread for your role play.

 

[Stalzyn]

In as much as that'll be a good place for this rp. I just don't want it completely out of this forum, i feel i can get great help besides i still haven't decided whether to make it an rp or a story.
For now its just a story idea.
On second thought, if you move it to the lounge, it'll no longer be here right?

 

[MyRubiLips]

I can leave it here. That's not a problem.

 

[Stalzyn]

I can leave it here. That's not a problem.

Right. So what do you think about it?

 

[Sean Renaud]

The lounge in my limited experience is kinda like the Playground for RPers it's just sort of there because in the SRP and RP you've got two kinds of threads (ideally) the actual thread (IC/In Character) where you role play and nothing else and the OOC (Out of Character) where you discuss where the story is and where it's going but depending on size little lese. Usually people will just chit chat in the OOC because who cares but when you've got a game with 11 players the OOC needs to be damn near as clean as a wiki page because that one guy who was on vaca for two weeks does not want to read about how cute you cat is.

Anyhow. I like this idea and would be more than happy to help flesh it out. I just have a bad habit (as Queen Rubi hallowed be her name) can attest of kinda stealing people's shit without really meaning to and I'm really working on 'this is your idea I'm a wall to bounce ideas off of, not a thug here to tell you how it is. And you can look up and see just how great my 'I'm not a thug' approach looks. I'm pretty sure I'm just downgraded from full on highway robbery to Hamburglering.

 

[Stalzyn]

I must confess to you, i'm not very keen on the idea of someone stealing my ideas (however that sounds) infact, i find it highly offensive.
Here is what i propose, since you're interested in the story, lets work on it together as a group rp. I'm sure they are lot of buddies out there that might just be looking for such a thing.

 

[atariblue]

TL;DR... what if it was played out in a Romeo and Juliet fashion. A human loves a supernatural and vise versa? Then you could incorporate romance and sex into the story.

 

[MyRubiLips]

Right. So what do you think about it?

I'm not typically a fan of Sci-Fi, but I'll give your SRP a read when I have more time.

I must confess to you, i'm not very keen on the idea of someone stealing my ideas (however that sounds) infact, i find it highly offensive.

That's the thing (and beauty) of Story Ideas. It's not really "stealing". Ideas are fair game here. In fact, if ten different authors liked an idea here and wrote up a story we'd have ten different stories with a similar theme.

 

[Stalzyn]

TL;DR... what if it was played out in a Romeo and Juliet fashion. A human loves a supernatural and vise versa? Then you could incorporate romance and sex into the story.

I like your idea friend, how about incorporating your idea into the first. You know, so as not completely eliminate the earlier ideas

 

[Stalzyn]

About the rp

What do you say sean

 

[Sean Renaud]

If we have enough players I have no reason not to entertain the idea but getting dedicated players is a bitch and three quarters.

 

[Stalzyn]

If we have enough players I have no reason not to entertain the idea but getting dedicated players is a bitch and three quarters.

No one ever gets enough players for a starting group rp. We can kick off with what we have and watch it grow or die. That said, there are only two players now apart from me and surprisingly they are both females.
Can you imagine that? I thought guys would be interested in this kind of stuff.

 

[TheMalevolence]

You've already posted this four times on the SRP thread... It's a nice idea, but please, tone it down a bit. Posting it here is accdptable, but it really needs sex to be a crucial plot point, and it seems like you have little interest in writing Erotica. If I'm right, I don't mean to be rude but there are so many other communities that would be more interested.

 

[Stalzyn]

You've already posted this four times on the SRP thread... It's a nice idea, but please, tone it down a bit. Posting it here is accdptable, but it really needs sex to be a crucial plot point, and it seems like you have little interest in writing Erotica. If I'm right, I don't mean to be rude but there are so many other communities that would be more interested.

What you are saying is true, however, stories without much sexual orientation are written in the orp forum. Nevertheless this story does have sex in it but i thought i'll leave that to the writers to decide.
That is, it can be between team mates, enemies or a lone person's fling.
It's a group thread, i shouldn't put something like 'the lead vampire is in love with the huntress' should i?
I mean that'll make the story center on them.
You decide how you want it to be. You want to have sex, do it. You want to be asexual in the story. Do it.
That said, thanks for the concern. I'll tune it down.

 

[TheMalevolence]

What you are saying is true, however, stories without much sexual orientation are written in the orp forum. Nevertheless this story does have sex in it but i thought i'll leave that to the writers to decide.
That is, it can be between team mates, enemies or a lone person's fling.
It's a group thread, i shouldn't put something like 'the lead vampire is in love with the huntress' should i?
I mean that'll make the story center on them.
You decide how you want it to be. You want to have sex, do it. You want to be asexual in the story. Do it.
That said, thanks for the concern. I'll tune it down.

Cheers.

 

[Stalzyn]

As i got the idea, well, I guess i was just too anxious about it. You know. Just anxious to see how things will turn out with other minds involved. Maybe it was a stupid idea. lol