Wanting Some Constructive Feedback

[luvcurious]

Hello!

I've recently posted two stories. The first was a true story of mine and the second a fiction.

Both stories are in "Gay Men". The first is entitled "My First Man" and the second is entitled "A Vacation in Mexico".

I think that I got too long winded on the second. But, if you have some time, check them out and let me know what you think.

Thanks, Luv.

 

[NoJo]

My First Man

A Vacation in Mexico

Luv, I liked reading "My First Man". You write well. But I was interested in what you missed out -- namely, did you know or suspect your gay side before the $5 bar? Did you then "come out", or do this again? I know a lot of straight guys who "let themseleves go" once with a guy. Was this what was happening? Did you feel guilty?

You descriibe the EVENTS really well, but not the feelings underneath in that story. They would, for me, add some spice, and make it more erotic.