Wanted...

[destinie21]

I was hoping that I would be able to get some feedback on my first attempt at an erotic couplings story. The story in question is entitled Sanctuary This is actually only the first chapter of a story that I know will become yet another one of my series. Please let me know what you think and why, thanks.

Preview​

Know this, there is no such thing as sanctuary. Not in this life. When I fled, on that icy dawn just a few days after the Christmas holiday I had no idea where I was going, but somehow I knew in my bones where I'd end up. It hadn't been a full twenty four hours since I'd signed the papers that would officially signal the legal dissolution of the union that had been dissolving for years. I locked the doors of the home that had for so many years been ours, but had suddenly become just mine. Taking only the barest essentials I took a taxi to the airport....

 

[destinie21]

great no responses.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Good story, girl. I liked the way you put it together. There are a few grammar errors, but what the hell. Those don't detract from the story. I especially liked the way you drew it out with the backward jump in time. Good one

Stank old bitch you know as Jenny _S

 

[destinie21]

Good story, girl. I liked the way you put it together. There are a few grammar errors, but what the hell. Those don't detract from the story. I especially liked the way you drew it out with the backward jump in time. Good one

Stank old bitch you know as Jenny _S

Thank you so much for the review.