Angeline
Poet Chick
- Joined
- Mar 11, 2002
- Posts
- 27,185
Senna you fanatic,
I spent a fair portion of my afternoon staring at your villanelle, trying--by osmosis--to get it. Is this any better?
If it is, I'll have to admit the muse-like effect your abuse has on me.
(If it isn't, at least you tried.)
Snow’s heavy silence crushing ground
Beyond the pane her eyes inspect
The empty landscape falling down
To nothing loud as quiet sound
Or cheek on cold glass to reflect
Snow’s heavy silence crushing ground
Where ice and smooth meet clear surround
The twilight of her dark aspect
The empty landscape falling down
On barren tree with branches frowned
In drooping weight its curves direct
Snow’s heavy silence crushing ground
Her palm’s etched glassy shadow found
A frozen still life’s counter effect
The empty landscape falling down
The quietude of winter drowned
A breathless world of deep neglect
Snow’s heavy silence crushing ground
The empty landscape falling down
I spent a fair portion of my afternoon staring at your villanelle, trying--by osmosis--to get it. Is this any better?
If it is, I'll have to admit the muse-like effect your abuse has on me.
(If it isn't, at least you tried.)
Snow’s heavy silence crushing ground
Beyond the pane her eyes inspect
The empty landscape falling down
To nothing loud as quiet sound
Or cheek on cold glass to reflect
Snow’s heavy silence crushing ground
Where ice and smooth meet clear surround
The twilight of her dark aspect
The empty landscape falling down
On barren tree with branches frowned
In drooping weight its curves direct
Snow’s heavy silence crushing ground
Her palm’s etched glassy shadow found
A frozen still life’s counter effect
The empty landscape falling down
The quietude of winter drowned
A breathless world of deep neglect
Snow’s heavy silence crushing ground
The empty landscape falling down
