Vampy's Poetry

[VampyOne]

I hope to post some of my poems and wonder if anyone wants to see them-this is my first.

Passion

I want your hands on me-
carressing me, stroking me, loving me.
I need you-
with me, near me, in me.
I want to feel you-
kissing me, biting me, writhing deep inside me.
I want to be your all,
and you to be mine.

Bite Me. Take Me. Love Me.

 

[Jennifer C]

I hope to post some of my poems and wonder if anyone wants to see them.

We always want to see poems here!...lol

Just state wether you would like feedback or if there just for fun ~ if you would like honest friendly feedback then this is the place to post them.

Or if it's just for fun thats cool too, I would love to read them... :

Welcome

 

[VampyOne]

Thanks

Honest criticism is always welcome-I want to know what people really think!!

 

[Jennifer C]

Honest criticism is always welcome-I want to know what people really think!!

Well then post away my friend...i'm looking forward to reading your work...

 

[VampyOne]

Blood Ties

Then here is another one!
Blood Ties
March 10, 2005

I want to see it gliding down my lover's chest,
it is all I desire.
Sanguine, thick, and hot,
it sets my blood afire.
He knows what is coming-
it's the danger he craves.
On his knees he worships me,
ever my willing slave.
I reach out to him,
carressing his face.
He closes his eyes,
longing for each dark embrace.
Should I make him mine,
join him to me?
Or make him forget,
and then set him free?
I need a companion,
to share all my nights.
I know it is time,
to give up this fight.
I take him down,
plunge my fangs in his vein.
He grips me tightly,
pleasure and pain.
I feel his heart slow,
mine beats so fast.
I force him to rouse-
"Do you want this at last?"
He nods his head yes, and begs "Please..."
I give him my blood.
He drinks long and hard,
his emotions a flood.
Now we are one, as never before,
Two souls are merged, alone nevermore.

 

[VampyOne]

Nirvana-yet another poem

Nirvana
April 22, 2005

Peace-I found it lying in your arms.
You have shattered my defenses, I can't resist your charms.
Feelings are coming back again,
You worked your way into my heart, taking all my pain.
I had no direction. I felt so very alone.
Your soul reached out and touched my own, I know that I am home.
Your voice, your touch,-they soothe me, keep me safe from pain,
Thanks to you, my dearest, I am becoming whole again.

 

[Jennifer C]

Nirvana
April 22, 2005

Peace-I found it lying in your arms.
You have shattered my defenses, I can't resist your charms.
Feelings are coming back again,
You worked your way into my heart, taking all my pain.
I had no direction. I felt so very alone.
Your soul reached out and touched my own, I know that I am home.
Your voice, your touch,-they soothe me, keep me safe from pain,
Thanks to you, my dearest, I am becoming whole again.

I really like this...It's something I could see myself writing!

Thanks for sharing...

 

[VampyOne]

Thanks

Thanks! I have a few more I may be posting soon.

 

[Jennifer C]

Thanks! I have a few more I may be posting soon.

You're welcome and I look forward to reading them...

 

[WickedEve]

I hope to post some of my poems and wonder if anyone wants to see them-this is my first.

Passion

I want your hands on me-
carressing me, stroking me, loving me.
I need you-
with me, near me, in me.
I want to feel you-
kissing me, biting me, writhing deep inside me.
I want to be your all,
and you to be mine.

Bite Me. Take Me. Love Me.

Everyone has a poem called Passion.
Rhyme caresses and someone confesses
those same old needs:
"I want your hands on me."'

Vampy, you're writing what most novice poets write about and in the same cookie cutter kind of way. But that's okay. It's a phase most of us go through. So, keep writing. Definitely hang out on the poetry board. It's a great learning experience, and your poetry will grow.

 

[Jennifer C]

Everyone has a poem called Passion.
Rhyme caresses and someone confesses
those same old needs:
"I want your hands on me."'

Vampy, you're writing what most novice poets write about and in the same cookie cutter kind of way. But that's okay. It's a phase most of us go through. So, keep writing. Definitely hang out on the poetry board. It's a great learning experience, and your poetry will grow.

I have to agree with Eve here, the threads really are a great place to learn and grow so stick around and write and read.

 

[Liar]

Everyone has a poem called Passion.

Damn. I don't. Better go write one.




Anyway... Hi Vampy, and welcome to the forum. Stick around and have fun.

 

[WickedEve]

Damn. I don't. Better go write one.




Anyway... Hi Vampy, and welcome to the forum. Stick around and have fun.

I meant to say that everyone except Liar has a poem called Passion. Liar has a poem called Slick Desire in the Pits of Orange Lust. He just had to be different.

 

[Liar]

I meant to say that everyone except Liar has a poem called Passion. Liar has a poem called Slick Desire in the Pits of Orange Lust. He just had to be different.

Actually, I do have kinky poems about blood. Does that qualify?

 

[VampyOne]

Thanks

Thanks for the criticism-it was meant to be simple, but you are right-it is probably too simple. Well, what the hell. I will post the rest later and see what I get lol

 

[WickedEve]

Thanks for the criticism-it was meant to be simple, but you are right-it is probably too simple. Well, what the hell. I will post the rest later and see what I get lol

Yeah, keeping posting. You have to jump in and start somewhere. I've been writing for a long time, and some of my poems simply don't work. But the process of writing and editing and learning is great. This is my pep talk and it's taking valuable energy from me. It's almost 11 and no coffee yet! I need sex, coffee, and inspiration--Now! And another thing, if you're crazy and hyper, half the poetry writing battle is won.

 

[Jennifer C]

Thanks for the criticism-it was meant to be simple, but you are right-it is probably too simple. Well, what the hell. I will post the rest later and see what I get lol

Looking forward to it...

 

[VampyOne]

Broken

Ok, here is another one lol. I was going through a major heartbreak and this is what came out.
April 22, 2005

Agony-like a knife through the heart.
Since I met you, my world's been torn apart.
Ecstacy, pain, happiness, despair,
All of these emotions I have had to bear.
You took me to such highs, and brought me to such lows,
You've opened up a gaping wound, I know not how to close.
You were once my everything, now its gone to hell.
I am not who I once was, a broken soul within a shell.
I have forgotten how to feel, my heart is cold and dark.
Your constant torture wounds me, your words have left their mark.
My constant anger frightens me, sometimes I wish you'd die.
Something soon will have to give, I will not live this lie.

 

[Jennifer C]

Ok, here is another one lol. I was going through a major heartbreak and this is what came out.
April 22, 2005

Agony-like a knife through the heart.
Since I met you, my world's been torn apart.
Ecstacy, pain, happiness, despair,
All of these emotions I have had to bear.
You took me to such highs, and brought me to such lows,
You've opened up a gaping wound, I know not how to close.
You were once my everything, now its gone to hell.
I am not who I once was, a broken soul within a shell.
I have forgotten how to feel, my heart is cold and dark.
Your constant torture wounds me, your words have left their mark.
My constant anger frightens me, sometimes I wish you'd die.
Something soon will have to give, I will not live this lie.

Oh hun, I hear ya with this one! lol... been there, written this and shed a million tears ~ then came out the other end!

Sometimes poetry doesn't have to be about form or meter or all the technical stuff, sometimes it's just a good way of getting your emotions out! And thats what this is ~ pure emotion, it's well written though in my opinion and I really enjoyed the read!

Keep writing ~ you will learn and grow and your poetry will take many shapes and forms!

Stick around, this really is a great place to learn...