Valentines Spirit

[williamesquire]

Love At First Inspection

With enough space for every tool in his shed
his surfing and fishing and camping equipment
and the right port for his music device.

Her engine defied the worlds logic and sense;
she was powerful strong, yet quiet and mellow;
thrumming along to a tune of her own.

Each panel of paintwork was flawlessly smooth
and layered so deeply it resembled pearl jelly
shimmering beneath his reverent sight.

Considering such a crafty creation,
such power and space; her magnificent detail.
Will he hear all the terms of the dealer?

Its supposed to be about Pandora and the motor car, comments welcome.

 

[HarryHill]

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Juicy, last stanza needs some work (imo) consider carrying the descriptive terms there and drop dealer. enjoyed it.

 

[williamesquire]

Thanks Harry, I'll think on it.

Posting this here because I got it in too late for the Valentines Day challenge.

My encounter with three naughty Bar Girls and an Angel

The three surrounded me with hungry eyes and smiles
Then politely asked to join me at my fries.
With low cut tops and high heeled styles
They massaged and pinched me hard with horny wiles.
I asked “what charge for desert applies”,
They replied a price that satisfies.
Then they lead me to the place that amplifies
Our building lust within our bodies tingling.
In bliss’ grasp the angel had me gasping; while it was asking
“What is thy guilt for such flesh indulging,
What is the black hole that thou art filling?
A murder foul without comprehending,
thy foolish service without dignifying?”
“Nay good angel, an education I’m receiving”