untiltled poem needs help please

[Haunted Silence]

drifting falling
swiftly deeper and yet still deeper
into the darkness...
the darkness of
pain..
sorrow...
tears..
abuse...
all that you have imprisoned me with
i will escape it end it now just one swift cut
and i'll continue to fall in this darkness yet
i will never return for it will be the end
i will be imprisoned no more
for it is not possible to be imprisoned in
the darkness of death it is
the end.

 

[Rybka]

A Suggestion

You might try something like this: