Unprecedented topic: A male character with no penis

[A_Little_Show]

I have had a story in my head for a long time, and it has forced itself onto the page - mostly. It is tentatively titled "We All Have Pieces Missing"

I am curious about your thoughts.

It's been very emotional for me to write. It is long with a lot of deep character development. My gut tells me it isn't suitable for Literotica. It is full of eroticism in my view, but it isn't mainstream. It also isn't written as a fetish piece. It's about people overcoming traumatic identity changing societal concepts of masculinity and femininity and still finding erotic fulfillment - of a sort.

I can't do this "masterpiece" justice with quick excerpts, but ...

There is a woman protagonist who is a nude figure model. Here is an excerpt in her own words: ... MRKH. It stands for Mayer–Rokitansky–Küster–Hauser syndrome. It's also called vaginal agenesis. I was born without a uterus or ovaries, and my vagina is very shallow. I've had hormone replacement since I was 13, and I filled out into a lovely young woman if I do say so myself. Nobody would know from staring at my body that I am empty inside. I'll never have children of my own. It was looking like I'd never keep a boyfriend either. I have felt "less than" for a long time. I sometimes still feel like I'm some kind of fraud. I'm not a "real" woman. When people really focus and study my femininity, it pushes those feelings away. I like the artists (I mean voyeurs), because at least in my head they reaffirm my femininity. They even say I am the IDEAL of femininity."

There is a group of wounded warriors. Several are blind. One lost both hands. And, one lost his penis.

Quoting a from a draft of a pivotal scene in an ad-hoc group therapy about body acceptance:

"I'm like you," I said timidly.

Eddie yelled, "Fuck you too because I sure can't."

I started crying. "You couldn't fuck me even if you had a useless cock you selfish pig." Then I started balling.

"What do you mean?" No-hands asked.

"My pussy is this deep." I indicated two knuckles of one finger. "I'm empty on the inside." I sobbed. I hadn't said those words aloud since right before I refused to see my shrink anymore.

"It's still not the same, God Damnit," Eddie complained. "You're beautiful. You pose naked and remind everyone how fucking perfect you are. Cut off your cliteris and then come talk to me."

Judith slapped Eddie hard. Well, being blind, she only managed a glancing blow.

"They want to take my ball. They want to leave me as a smooth eunuch." Eddie balled incoherently.

"My only boyfriend ever left me because he can't fuck me. He left me because I can't give him babies! He left me because I can't cum!"

"Yah, well I can't fuck you either."

"Bullshit!" I screamed. I was full on hysterical. "Even if you had a cock, it would be wasted on me. Why don't you just poke me in the eye with a stick. That's about what it's like when someone tries to..." I couldn't catch my breath. "You're a useless cock from head to toe!"

"Take that back," Judith warned.

"I'm sorry ," I said. "My boyfriend learned to hate me because I couldn't give him what he wanted. I'd suck him until I was blue, but he couldn't fuck me - so fuck me!" I stopped crying. "He tried to make me feel good. He never believed me when I said things felt good. He just gave up and said I'm too much work."

"Yah! Well I'm a fucking virgin. I never got to shove my cock in anything! It's fucking not fair. Im not a man. I'm not alive. I'll never have an orgasm again. I'll never have a wife. I'll never look at myself in a mirror. I'll never..."

 

[Jing83]

It's not entirely unprecedented if you'd watched the starship episode of Black Mirror...

 

[A_Little_Show]

It's not entirely unprecedented if you'd watched the starship episode of Black Mirror...

The pilot episode of Black Mirror made me so upset that I have avoided all there rest of the episodes. It is great TV. We are living in the Platinum Age of TV for sure. Black Mirror is high art and too powerful for me though.

 

[Boxlicker101]

"Bawl" meaning cry, is spelled bawl.

 

[ElectricBlue]

If you're going to take on a serious topic, which this story concept undoubtedly is, I'd be winding back the hysterical melodrama a whole bunch of notches. These excerpts are a tad over the top, what with all the yelling, screaming and sobbing. I'm not sure you'll keep readers if this is the tone throughout.

 

[AlinaX]

I think there's sufficient narrative tension in overcoming the prejudices of others without mixing in excessive self-loathing. It's one thing to feel broken and alone, but there's no excuse for others to treat you that way.

 

[jaF0]

If you're going to take on a serious topic, which this story concept undoubtedly is, I'd be winding back the hysterical melodrama a whole bunch of notches. These excerpts are a tad over the top, what with all the yelling, screaming and sobbing. I'm not sure you'll keep readers if this is the tone throughout.

I quit reading after Eddie yelled. Ain't no way I'd read a whole story like that.

 

[jsmiam]

This (the subject heading) is where Ogg will come in and (of course) tell us he’s written one already, and he’ll provide a link.

 

[oggbashan]

This (the subject heading) is where Ogg will come in and (of course) tell us he’s written one already, and he’ll provide a link.

Of course I will:

https://www.literotica.com/s/christmas-truce

 

[Bramblethorn]

This (the subject heading) is where Ogg will come in and (of course) tell us he’s written one already, and he’ll provide a link.

As well as Ogg's, there are several stories here about trans men - not quite the same as what OP is writing about, but many of those would fit under the heading of "male character with no penis".

 

[oggbashan]

And I've written one about a woman who doesn't feel female after a hysterectomy:

https://www.literotica.com/s/flawed-red-silk-ch-10

 

[Handley_Page]

If you're going to take on a serious topic, which this story concept undoubtedly is, I'd be winding back the hysterical melodrama a whole bunch of notches. These excerpts are a tad over the top, what with all the yelling, screaming and sobbing. I'm not sure you'll keep readers if this is the tone throughout.

I quite agree

 

[A_Little_Show]

"Bawl" meaning cry, is spelled bawl.

Thank you. Would you like editor credit?

 

[A_Little_Show]

I quite agree

Of course it isn't the tone throughout. It is a long tender story. I probably shouldn't hav excepted the peak of emotion. I should have used a more cathartic moment.

 

[SimonDoom]

It seems to me it would be as suitable for Literotica as for any other place. It isn't going to be everybody's cup of tea, but nothing is, and that's not a good reason to avoid publishing here, anyway.

I agree with those who say that the excerpt you cited borders on the melodramatic, but that might simply be because it's not offset by a quieter and more contemplative (and more erotic) passage.

Some care should be given to the category in which you publish it, because the story is not likely to fit neatly within existing Literotica categories.

The story seems to be important to you, so I'd recommend finishing it and publishing it here. You might want to find an editor to get editing advice. I caught the balling-bawling thing as well.

 

[jaF0]

It could be done without the whole 'blown off' bit too. There are people born with various deformities. That might be a better angle as they struggle in a world of erotic mages everywhere.

 

[BelleCanzuto]

I'm with Simon. I think it's an interesting concept for a story. And I'll second his advice about getting an editor. My only other thought it maybe to make it long enough for the novellas category. I think this story would take a great deal of character development, especially navigating the trauma aspect, the "born different" aspect, and the aspect of overcoming one's on self-loathing well enough to develop a relationship. That's before you even try to get into any of the alternative kinds of sexual gratification.

If it's important to you, write it, finish it, and then set it aside a while. If the story is still asking to be published, do it. The one thing that's true about Literotica is that it's very low stakes, so it might be as good a place as any to experiment.

 

[SimonDoom]

Recommendation to A Little Show:

Look for examples of stories written here previously about characters with disabilities, and see how the subject has been treated. As far as I know it's not a common subject, but for my money that's a reason you SHOULD write and publish the story, not a reason NOT to. You may break some new ground.

Take a look, for instance, at ElectricBlue's Rope and Veil, which is a sensitive treatment of an erotic encounter with a woman in a wheel chair. It's not fetishy. It's not over the top. You may take your concept in a completely different direction but you may find it helpful to see how others have dealt with this subject area.

 

[Hypoxia]

Plutarch said Egyptian god Osiris was murdered by his evil brother Set, who dismembered the body and tossed the pieces in the Nile where they were discovered and reassembled by faithful wife Isis -- except for the penis, which was eaten by fish and restored only by black magic.

Our tale: Ozzie Nillsen awakens in Memphis Tennessee, a contemporary reincarnation of Osiris, minus penis. He recalls his Egyptian and divine history, and is magically aware of here-and-now, and of his disfigurement. He embarks on a long, patient quest to find a replacement. Hilarity ensues. What does Ozzie do?

* Commission talented artists and body sculptors to build new cocks.
* Surgically steal cocks from men, porpoises, burros, to see what fits best.
* Magically grow cocks modeled on men and beasts.
* Bewail his cruel fate and create a podcast.
* Something else entirely, like go TG.
* Become god of the incels.

 

[A_Little_Show]

Recommendation to A Little Show:

Look for examples of stories written here previously about characters with disabilities, and see how the subject has been treated. As far as I know it's not a common subject, but for my money that's a reason you SHOULD write and publish the story, not a reason NOT to. You may break some new ground.

Take a look, for instance, at ElectricBlue's Rope and Veil, which is a sensitive treatment of an erotic encounter with a woman in a wheel chair. It's not fetishy. It's not over the top. You may take your concept in a completely different direction but you may find it helpful to see how others have dealt with this subject area.

I already have two stories that each include a disabled character participating in scenes I find erotic:

- https://www.literotica.com/s/a-third-valentine
- https://www.literotica.com/s/gentle-touch

If I keep going with "We All Have Pieces Missing", I have no doubt it will be a Novella. It is already 26,000 words, and the only "sex" that has happened so far consists of frustrating and ultimately fruitless attempts at masturbation. There are some remembered/flashback scenes of soft core eroticism too, though. (Hand under shirt while parked in the car kinds of things.)

The overarching theme of the story is that the personal connectedness and bonding most commonly achieved through sexual intercourse are not forever foreclosed to people facing sexuality and identity challenging situations. Love will find a way.

Finding a Literotica category for this kind of thing is challenging as several people have mentioned. My heart wants it to be in "Romance", but I have grave doubts that readers in that category will respond well to the subject matter. Now, if I throw in a couple of Billionaires competing for the protagonist's affection, then we'd have something - just kidding.

Disclaimer: We all have cliché fantasies I'm sure. Wanting a Billionaire to discover your true beauty and sweep you off your feet is no different than Cinderella. I suppose the young male equivalent would be "Ravished by all the sorority members at once" or something like that.

Interesting: An academic paper with a small sample size of self-reporting subjects makes the following conclusion: "The results obtained indicate that total amputation of the penis significantly affects one's sex life and overall quality of life. However, this does not have negative implications in terms of partnership relations, self-assessment or the evaluation of masculinity." Another interesting quote: "In 5/6 of these patients, partnership relationships did not deteriorate, including one patient for whom the relationship actually improved." "2/10 patients established new partnerships."

 

[jaF0]

Look what just showed up on Courthouse News:

VA to Pay Up to $3.75 Million After Removing Most of Man’s Penis

A federal judge awarded a man $3.75 million after ruling a Veterans Administration hospital was negligent in failing to treat the man’s penis cancer that result in a partial loss of the organ.



Weird timing.

 

[Hypoxia]

Look what just showed up on Courthouse News:

VA to Pay Up to $3.75 Million After Removing Most of Man’s Penis

A federal judge awarded a man $3.75 million after ruling a Veterans Administration hospital was negligent in failing to treat the man’s penis cancer that result in a partial loss of the organ.



Weird timing.

Did the court establish a per-inch valuation?

 

[Handley_Page]

This (the subject heading) is where Ogg will come in and (of course) tell us he’s written one already, and he’ll provide a link.

Of course I will:
https://www.literotica.com/s/christmas-truce

And a damned good story it is, too.

Did the court establish a per-inch valuation?

I suspect there's a bit more to that story. . . .

It maybe worthy of note that some soldiers going to sandy parts have arranged for a semen sample to be kept for the purposes of later Fatherhood in the event they have a problem (and there have been several, apparently).

 

[Grillytilly]

Having a good idea for a story and it making sense in the author's head is a first step. Many Hollywood movies don't even get that far but if the OP has gotten to the 'makes sense in my own head' stage then that's great.

The next step is research and depth. Not everyone will allow themselves to be defined by what they don't have or do have. Sure, some will but also some won't. Some people have good days and bad days where they go a long time not thinking about the fact that some 'normal' part of life for other people is not available to them. They have a whole string of good days but then something happens that reminds them of their situation and in a sudden rush it all comes back to them.

Man who lost his middle fingers doesn't go around thinking about that fact all the time but then one day he wants to flip someone off but not just with one hand, he wants to give double birds but ... Oh no. Oh the humanity! He has no middle fingers.

Other people, even if they are reminded they just cope cause they're well adjusted.

I imagine that someone dealing with something they were born with is going to be much more resilient about it than someone who just lost something or lost something because of an injustice. It's one thing if you don't have something because that's just the lucky roll of the dice and you not having something because some bad guy did something to you. In the latter case you'll be a lot more bitter where as in the former it's much easier to learn to live and cope.

Also, I might add that if you plan to post it maybe send an email to the admins to give them a heads up. I posted a story with an adjacent theme just this month and it stayed in pending over a week and I couldn't get it posted to in the end I had to just delete it.