Unique "editor/reader" request

[TitanTits]

Hello all,

I am not really looking for just an editor (or three) per se but rather kind of a look-over and direction suggestion.

I have written a ~3,000 word introduction/prologue to a story that will be focused primary on incest, romance, some body transformation, some mind control, and possible impregnation.

The part I've written however has no sex or eroticism.. I just want someone to look over it and tell me if it is reasonable as an opening to what I'm hoping will be a 4-8 part epic story with a number of possible offshoots and other stories taking place in the same environment I'm creating. I'm trying to introduce the characters and now I'm ready to start actually moving the plot in a definite development arc but I'm afraid the introductory part is either too long and will lose the reader's interest or too shallow that people won't find any use for it. (Yeah.. super confident writer, huh?)

I want a few people's help to edit and comment on the piece I've written to help me out.

Please PM me with your response and if it works out I'll email you. Thank you all for reading and considering this.

 

[_Lynn_]

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[chimpers767]

Hello all,

I am not really looking for just an editor (or three) per se but rather kind of a look-over and direction suggestion.

I have written a ~3,000 word introduction/prologue to a story that will be focused primary on incest, romance, some body transformation, some mind control, and possible impregnation.

The part I've written however has no sex or eroticism.. I just want someone to look over it and tell me if it is reasonable as an opening to what I'm hoping will be a 4-8 part epic story with a number of possible offshoots and other stories taking place in the same environment I'm creating. I'm trying to introduce the characters and now I'm ready to start actually moving the plot in a definite development arc but I'm afraid the introductory part is either too long and will lose the reader's interest or too shallow that people won't find any use for it. (Yeah.. super confident writer, huh?)

I want a few people's help to edit and comment on the piece I've written to help me out.

Please PM me with your response and if it works out I'll email you. Thank you all for reading and considering this.

in a nutshell, what type(s) of incest?

 

[TitanTits]

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[TitanTits]

in a nutshell, what type(s) of incest?

Well.. although there is none in the part that I've written, I am starting with some Mom/son.... then I want to move on to some Father/daughter, and end with the whole family enjoying one another.. although these F/d and orgy ideas are still thousands and thousands of words away.

 

[TitanTits]

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Thank You.