I have two questions for the hive mind.
Background:
I am writing a three part story right now. I was expecting about 20K per chapter, but as I am finishing the first chapter, it will probably be closer to 30. My original intent was to write an ethical Mind Control story, somewhat inspired by the thread a month or two ago.
Chapter 1: the MMC, a nice kid, but largely inexperienced (obviously because he is nice
) college student, gains mind reading ability at the same time he meets the girl of his dreams, using his extra knowledge to help in his courting. He has some qualms about what he is doing. Things do not get as far as penetrative sex; FMC is prudish, kissing him 18K in was her first kiss*
Chapter 2: MMC learns that he can insert ideas when he inadvertently gives FMC a dream that she wants to show her body off to him. He is horrified/intrigued that he can do this, but does it a few more times (not to her) for "Good" FMC and MMC have sex, willingly.
Chapter 3: MMC discovers that when he is really intense, he can perform classic mind control, discovering this when he makes FMC start giving him oral. As soon as he realized what he is doing, he stops it. He then uses in anger against someone bullying FMC. He is terrified of what he might do when he suddenly loses his powers altogether. And then happily ever after.
My plan is to finish drafts of all three first and then publish each chapter as I finish the editing on it.
Questions:
1) *FMC kissing him is not actually her first kiss. Summer before tenth grade, so under age, her best friend (female) convinces her that they should practice kissing so they will know what it's like. Friend actually was hoping for more than kisses and came out of the closet a few years later. How far into discussing that incident can I go without incurring the wrath of underage rule? It is a notable character development moment for FMC. But I don't want the story bounced because of it. I f I have to, I have thought about giving a minimal reference, including a comment, "but that's a story for another time and another site." someone as a poke, but I might be poking the bear with that one. If I go the full route and it bounces, I don't think I would have the guts to include the jab.
Am I over worrying about this? Advice from anyone who pushes the boundaries at all?
2) I am kind of thinking chapter 1 will get shredded in MC, having no full on sex (the hottest part it is him telepathically eaves dropping on her masturbating) and lacking true mind control, just telepathyl. I am starting to winder if I should edge this one more towards Romance and then put chapters 2 and 3 in MC. I know 2 and 3 may also get trashed in MC because I am raising the ethical questions in it, but that is as it is. It will have two different kinds of mind control and actual sex, so maybe people will be happy with it.
I know the standard answer is to wait until it's done and see where it fits, but I can tune this chapter towards either direction. I don't have to make my mind up until I finish everything, but I don't want to tune it one way and then have to rewrite significant chunks for the other.
Thanks in advance for your thoughts.
Background:
I am writing a three part story right now. I was expecting about 20K per chapter, but as I am finishing the first chapter, it will probably be closer to 30. My original intent was to write an ethical Mind Control story, somewhat inspired by the thread a month or two ago.
Chapter 1: the MMC, a nice kid, but largely inexperienced (obviously because he is nice

Chapter 2: MMC learns that he can insert ideas when he inadvertently gives FMC a dream that she wants to show her body off to him. He is horrified/intrigued that he can do this, but does it a few more times (not to her) for "Good" FMC and MMC have sex, willingly.
Chapter 3: MMC discovers that when he is really intense, he can perform classic mind control, discovering this when he makes FMC start giving him oral. As soon as he realized what he is doing, he stops it. He then uses in anger against someone bullying FMC. He is terrified of what he might do when he suddenly loses his powers altogether. And then happily ever after.
My plan is to finish drafts of all three first and then publish each chapter as I finish the editing on it.
Questions:
1) *FMC kissing him is not actually her first kiss. Summer before tenth grade, so under age, her best friend (female) convinces her that they should practice kissing so they will know what it's like. Friend actually was hoping for more than kisses and came out of the closet a few years later. How far into discussing that incident can I go without incurring the wrath of underage rule? It is a notable character development moment for FMC. But I don't want the story bounced because of it. I f I have to, I have thought about giving a minimal reference, including a comment, "but that's a story for another time and another site." someone as a poke, but I might be poking the bear with that one. If I go the full route and it bounces, I don't think I would have the guts to include the jab.
Am I over worrying about this? Advice from anyone who pushes the boundaries at all?
2) I am kind of thinking chapter 1 will get shredded in MC, having no full on sex (the hottest part it is him telepathically eaves dropping on her masturbating) and lacking true mind control, just telepathyl. I am starting to winder if I should edge this one more towards Romance and then put chapters 2 and 3 in MC. I know 2 and 3 may also get trashed in MC because I am raising the ethical questions in it, but that is as it is. It will have two different kinds of mind control and actual sex, so maybe people will be happy with it.
I know the standard answer is to wait until it's done and see where it fits, but I can tune this chapter towards either direction. I don't have to make my mind up until I finish everything, but I don't want to tune it one way and then have to rewrite significant chunks for the other.
Thanks in advance for your thoughts.