Two new stories

Jake's Tales Episode 01

Great story, you're a lucky guy. One criticism, you use the word "and" too much it messes with the flow of the story. :kiss:
 
oh man that is real luckey one...the episode one..and also gives some lessons tooooo:p :p
 
Thanks

Thanks for the feedback, glad you all liked the stories. Writing them helped me relive the experiences again, which was great.

Thanks again,

Jake
 
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