Two new stories needs badly to be edited

LrseFauc

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I haven't wrote some stories for literotica for almost 3 years, but know I continued my Karen series.

The stories don't depend so much on each other, but it is no mistake to know former stories.

These are the stories, that need to be edited:

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8. Karen - Homewrecking the Fishers
76471 characters, 14456 words
Non consent/reluctant, blackmail, fdom, msub, hypnosis, hands free orgasm, rape (female on male)

Karen tricks Mr. Fisher into hypnosis. She installed some triggers, she could use on him and blackmailed him with his triggers to change his bad behaviour. The plot sounds extreme, I guess. The story needs it length to makes it believable. I'm not sure, if I managed it for many others.

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9. Karen, Beth and John
17258 characters, 3242 words
Non consent/reluctant, teasing, fdom, fsub, msub, footjob, handjob

Beth and John meets Karen in a canteen. Beth is mad with Karen, Karen seduces Beth, Beth dominates both (Karen and John). Despite the personality of Karen, I build up in former stories, I think it's funny and it works well. A sequal of this story is possible in the future.

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I'm thankful for every kind of editing: Grammar, spelling, logical. I'm open to discuss the story plots too.
 
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