Two new erotic poems. Feedback please

[Sissy Adele Howells]

Hi,
Just written two more erotic poems "Ginger Georgina" and Diane Bennett Dish Of The Day. Hope you enjoy. Would love feedback. Aso congradulations on how quick this sight is dealing with submissions. Very impressed.

http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=245459
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=245510


LOVE AND KISSES
SISSY ADELE HOWELLS

 

[Manjaro_Eve]

I only read Ginger Georgina since both links go to that one poem. Cute poem.

typo: Georgina begs (me)be to shaft her

"tongue snogging his Georgina" What is snogging? Really doesn't matter though. Snogging isn't very poetic.

 

[Sissy Adele Howells]

have repaired link

Hi
thanks for comment.Thought everyone knew what snogging was. Links now go to both poems. Would love feedback on both
SISSY ADELE

 

[Manjaro_Eve]

I still don't know.
Licking? lol

 

[champagne1982]

Hi there sissy. I've been reading your poems and I find they're not exactly to my taste, I can't speak for everyone, but that's one reason you may not be getting a lot of input. Primarily, though, I notice that you build a thread and ask for feedback but how much have you offered the other members of the forum?

Maybe you could bounce into the "Under Construction" thread and look at some of what is offered there. The posters appreciate feedback on the pieces they put up for review and sometimes, if moved to offer it, they return the favour.

I guess what I'm saying is that everyone loves getting feedback on their stuff, but not everyone understands the effort it takes to give quality critique.

You gotta give a little to get a little.

 

[Sissy Adele Howells]

have answered other threads

Hi,
Have answered other peoples threads and read a lot of poems,giving good votes when needed. Still taking your advice. Where is this under constuction forum? I will find it. Have started to write non erotic now as well. Thanks for your read anyway. I'm only learning on here and starting to realise what to do
tHANKS
ADELE

 

[WickedEve]

Hi,
Have answered other peoples threads and read a lot of poems,giving good votes when needed. Still taking your advice. Where is this under constuction forum? I will find it. Have started to write non erotic now as well. Thanks for your read anyway. I'm only learning on here and starting to realise what to do
tHANKS
ADELE

It takes time to get into the swing of things. Champ gave you good advice. The more you interact with others, the more feedback you'll get.
The two manjaro_eve posts are mine. So, I did read the poem, and I still don't know what snogging is.

 

[My Erotic Trail]

Manjaro_Eve

I read them both and enjoyed them immensely...
more please.

 

[champagne1982]

It takes time to get into the swing of things. Champ gave you good advice. The more you interact with others, the more feedback you'll get.
The two manjaro_eve posts are mine. So, I did read the poem, and I still don't know what snogging is.

Tonguey kisses.

 

[WickedEve]

Tonguey kisses.

No. I think it would be best if we didn't tongu... Oh, that's what it means? I thought you were trying to snog me. Snog. It's such an ugly word! Snog

So, like, I was out with my man, and we snogged in the porta-john.

I am a member of PASOUW (Poets Against Snog and Other Ugly Words)

 

[beetrootjesuit]

Snogging is so vewwy bwitish. Prolly why the fwench get all the glory as gweat lubbers.

 

[beetrootjesuit]

Sorry, I am remiss!

I forgot to welcome Miss Howells to this charming corner of the literary universe.

 

[Sissy Adele Howells]

Thanks for enjoyable comments

Hi,
Thany you all very much for your comments. Have enjoyed reading them all.Keep them coming and that applies to others as well. Really enjoy coming on here. When in work, it gives me something to look forward to.

LOVE
ADELE