turning a dream into a story?

[Aionne]

I had a very erotic dream and I am thinking of turning it into a story but I can only remember certain bits of the dream...I know I can use artistic licence to fill in the blanks but this would be my first story and I am not really sure where to start. I have got two of the three parts of the dream I remember wrote down but was wondering if I could have some advise and help off anyone..

Thank you

 

[downunder123]

Where to start

Offer a hint of the parts you remember, and let us help you...

I had a very erotic dream and I am thinking of turning it into a story but I can only remember certain bits of the dream...I know I can use artistic licence to fill in the blanks but this would be my first story and I am not really sure where to start. I have got two of the three parts of the dream I remember wrote down but was wondering if I could have some advise and help off anyone..

Thank you

 

[Aionne]

Okay...

I am on my bed asleep when a cold sensation wakes me up, I open my eyes and it's dark-unnaturally so, I have a blindfold on. I go to remove the blindfold only to realise I am tied down, but strangely I'm not panicking. I can feel the weight of someone straddling my waist, I realise it's a man when he bends down, as I can feel his cock press into my stomach. I can feel the heat radiating from him as he starts to kiss and gently caress my neck sending waves of pleasure through my body.
He kisses me along my neck and jaw up to my ear, his fingers following in their wake, I feel a cold sensation following his fingers and I shudder at the feelings he is creating in me. I can feel his breath on my ear and the side of my face, I tense as I thinking he is going to talk to me, but all he does is blow into my ear, then I feel his tongue playing with my ear lobe. He sits up slightly and I can feel the cold sensation again as it moves from my neck to my jaw, just before it reaches my mouth I feel his fingers tail over my lips which makes me gasp out loud, the cold sensation moves to my lips and I just know it's a ice cube, he trails it over my lips, and as my mouth is open from gasping, and the tip of my tongue. I open my mouth wider as he holds the ice cube in place, I close my mouth over the ice cube capturing his fingers in my mouth and I suck hard, water dripping down my dry throat as I use my tongue and teeth to gently nibble on his fingers. I can feel myself become more aroused and wetter as tingles of pleasure shot through my body, as he suddenly pulls his fingers away from my mouth, with a soft laugh whilst leaving the ice cube to melt on my tongue, I am suddenly jerked back to what is actually happening to me as I can hear him tutting.
As his hands briefly leave me I can feel him kiss down my chest to my boobs, I jerk my back off the bed as I want to feel his lips on my nipples but he just gently blows on them. As he softly chuckles I can feel his hands back, one is kneading my right boob, his thumb playing with my nipple, whilst his other hand is trailing an ice cube over my left boob in a slow circle until the ice cube finally hits my nipple, instantly making it hard, I start to squirm and wriggle on the bed as my breath becomes shallow.

The next bit of my dream I remember is: (I really wish I could remember it all-might actually make this into a story...but it's props not really any good).

I am gasping deeply as I feel him run the ice cube around my clit, moving slowly and deliberately in a wide circle avoiding where I really want him to touch, his fingers and his tongue follow, I start to shake at the feeling coursing through me, panting in frustration as he chuckles softly under his breath. He teasingly runs the ice cube down to the entrance of my vagina, as it goes over my perineum I scream out loud at the mixture of sensations as he places two cold fingers inside me, he moves the ice cube down to my anus and slowly pushes it in side as he thrusts his fingers inside my vagina. The mixture of cold and a slight burning feeling hits me as a feel the ice cube in my bum, at the same time his tongue starts to lick and nibble on my clit. I scream out loud as I start to shake and moan, my back arching off the bed as I feel heat and ecstasy course through my body, my eyes roll to the back of my head as my eye lids close and I fall into darkness.

So tell me, what do you think? honestly? and is it worth filling in the blanks and making it into a story?

 

[Etaski]

Yes, it is.

You can describe physical sensations and your responses very well, and I've read plenty of short stories that are almost nothing more than dream sequences--and it's not a bad thing if done well. Many even begin with exactly what you describe: waking up only to realize one is tied down and/or can't see, then realizing there is someone else present.

From a pure physical-sensation standpoint, there aren't a lot of "blanks" to fill in. If you took your time with it and enjoyed every moment of the description, it's about all you need.

You can begin it with waking up already tied and having no idea who the man is, and you can end it with a kiss to your forehead and him untying the ropes but leaving with you still not knowing who it is. A lot of fantasies are like that; it's part of the thrill.

I say go for it (and I wouldn't mind an erotica dream like that, yes, please, Mr. Sandman.)

If you were looking for a full-blown story....welll, now you've got to define your characters and come up with a lead-up to the ice play. It's a fair bit more work than the erotic scene you've got above. I would only do it if you had some kind of character pair in mind that you've wanted to write about already (i.e. a good opportunity to get them together).

Otherwise...just enjoy the sensuality of that scene.

 

[Amoronaut]

I agree with Etaski.

You have a wonderfully vivid scene right there - I think you wrote it quite well, as I could almost feel your sensations.

But a scene is not story. You can write pages and pages of intense physical description of a sexual encounter, but with no background of character emotions or setting, it will rapidly get boring as the reader has no way to connect with the characters.

Keep in mind...when you write a stand alone erotic scene, all you are doing is expressing a personal sexual fantasy in words. But few people's sexual fantasies are exactly the same. So you need to capture their imagination by getting them interested in your characters, and making the reader think they are somebody different entirely. THAT is how you write a good erotic piece of fiction.

 

[Aionne]

Thank you Etaski and Amoronaut for your advice, it's much appreciated but how can I develop the male character when he doesn't talk? all he is there for is to tease, titillate and excite.. To develop the female character, would I need a bit personal information in the story about her? is that what you mean? Or do you mean more interaction between the man and women?

 

[Etaski]

How to explain succinctly...

I actually disagree that a scene is not a story in and of itself. I could point to hundreds of examples here and elsewhere.

In the case of "this is my fantasy," the man does not need to be developed. He performs a function; that's all. The focus of the enjoyment is on the one "being done unto." It explores the sensations and responses of that individual.

That individual can also be the "every-woman" (if you'll pardon the alteration): the character in which many women could imagine, "This could be me." If such is the case, you also don't have to develop personal quirks for the female character.

It would be a study of erotic sensation and desire. Fluffy, but enjoyable. There are plenty of readers for a short scene like that.

However, yes, as Amoronaut says, you can also go a completely different route and create background, motivation, and interaction for two distinct characters who are *not* "everyman" but "Hector" and "Giselle" (just making that up).

If you decide to go that route, you must go all the way, and in such a case, the ice play by itself may not be ultimate payoff that it would be in a shorter scene. I think that is Amoronaut's point.

My point is that you can write a shorter, first-person stroke scene with what you've got, and it's enough for Literotica.

If you are looking to create characters and some kind of conflict with a payoff from this, then you've got some work to do. That's much harder.

 

[JaxRhapsody]

I agree, that scene with only little added to it would be a great monolog/

 

[Amoronaut]

Yea Etaski you've got a good point.

For general sharing and enjoyment on Literotica, she would not have to go as far as I was talking about.

Aionne...since you're dream is from a first person perspective, it already captivates the readers attention and puts them directly in the scene. But also, since you wrote about a dream...you still do not have any context. But don't worry, that is quite easy to add!!

Who is this strange man? Is he a husband? Or maybe you are married, and someone else is taking advantage of you? Or is it a complete stranger? A few sentences at the beginning could put the scene into some better context.

"I go to remove the blindfold only to realise I am tied down, but strangely I'm not panicking. I can feel the weight of someone straddling my waist, I realise it's a man when he bends down, as I can feel his cock press into my stomach." then maybe add something along the lines ..."I had no idea who the man was, somehow he must have snuck into my hotel room while I was asleep. But I could feel by his touch that he was only interested in giving me pleasure, so I didn't resist."

Or something...

Also don't forget you're story needs a satisfactory end.

"Finally after my orgasm had subsided, the strange man untied my hands and legs, but he did not remove my blindfold. Before I could take it off, I heard the door close, and I realized I would never know who gave me such incredible pleasure."

Just a few ideas, hope that helps!

 

[JaxRhapsody]

Yeah...left a mystery. It's really left up to the reader then.

 

[Aionne]

Thank you both again, I have a clearer understanding of what you both mean now, there is actually another part to the dream that I haven't written yet but will do in the few days. When it's finished would you both read through it for me and tell me what you think?


Aio

Yea Etaski you've got a good point.

For general sharing and enjoyment on Literotica, she would not have to go as far as I was talking about.

Aionne...since you're dream is from a first person perspective, it already captivates the readers attention and puts them directly in the scene. But also, since you wrote about a dream...you still do not have any context. But don't worry, that is quite easy to add!!

Who is this strange man? Is he a husband? Or maybe you are married, and someone else is taking advantage of you? Or is it a complete stranger? A few sentences at the beginning could put the scene into some better context.

"I go to remove the blindfold only to realise I am tied down, but strangely I'm not panicking. I can feel the weight of someone straddling my waist, I realise it's a man when he bends down, as I can feel his cock press into my stomach." then maybe add something along the lines ..."I had no idea who the man was, somehow he must have snuck into my hotel room while I was asleep. But I could feel by his touch that he was only interested in giving me pleasure, so I didn't resist."

Or something...

Also don't forget you're story needs a satisfactory end.

"Finally after my orgasm had subsided, the strange man untied my hands and legs, but he did not remove my blindfold. Before I could take it off, I heard the door close, and I realized I would never know who gave me such incredible pleasure."

Just a few ideas, hope that helps!

 

[Amoronaut]

Sure i'd be happy to. Post it up here or send in a message, whichever works for you.

 

[Etaski]

Ditto. What Amoronaut said.