Trimming Down the Ass of My Poetry Collection

[WickedEve]

In the past, I've deleted large volumes of my poetry--and be glad I did. My earlier work is horrendous. Now I have over 250 poems. I hate to submit any new poems until I clean this mess up. There are some poems that simply need to go. I want to keep the better ones, which are difficult to find at the moment since they're buried under all the mediocre poetry. I've been seriously contemplating deleting the entire lot. Instead, I'm going to try deleting sections of it. I'm starting with the As. Here is a group of A poetry that I'm considering giving the axe to. I'd appreciate it if anyone would be kind enough to assist me. Just give me an idea of which ones need to say bye bye.

Amenity Afterwards I think this is an obvious one to cut.

Alien In The Dark Another one that should be deleted.

ashante porch Average poem.

Amorous Widow I think this one is only interesting because of the form. Without the form, it's no better than mediocre. At least, that's my opinion.

Always A Way To Make A Living Parts I like. Parts I don't. I think I'll keep the first strophe for scrap parts. lol

and sometimes i drive it This may just need an edit. I'm still iffy about the pine and pussy.

after he swung it around the room ???

Ann's Anxiety Like the illustration. The poem is weird.

Autistic Slumber Not sure about this one.

After the Fall Needs a good edit but I'll probably never get to it.

A Widow At Last It's kind of silly.


So, let me know which ones deserve to be buried. If you see anything else in the A section that's mediocre, let me know. Thanks!

 

[WickedEveII]

Remember that movie with Richard Harris. I think that it was Richard Harris. A man called horse? All men should be called horse. Remember the scene where he is hanging by hooks and he has visions? Well, I was in the shower, exfoliating, and I had a thought. Wicked Eve II. If I can't get my poetry problem under control, then I'll submit poetry under the wicked eve sequel.
Um... does my name look like wicked eve 2 or wicked evil?

 

[Angeline]

In the past, I've deleted large volumes of my poetry--and be glad I did. My earlier work is horrendous. Now I have over 250 poems. I hate to submit any new poems until I clean this mess up. There are some poems that simply need to go. I want to keep the better ones, which are difficult to find at the moment since they're buried under all the mediocre poetry. I've been seriously contemplating deleting the entire lot. Instead, I'm going to try deleting sections of it. I'm starting with the As. Here is a group of A poetry that I'm considering giving the axe to. I'd appreciate it if anyone would be kind enough to assist me. Just give me an idea of which ones need to say bye bye.

Amenity Afterwards I think this is an obvious one to cut.

I agree. It didn't move me

Alien In The Dark Another one that should be deleted.

don't throw it away. it has possibilities

ashante porch Average poem.

this is not average. it's excellent. what are you taking about?

Amorous Widow I think this one is only interesting because of the form. Without the form, it's no better than mediocre. At least, that's my opinion.

this is the one where we each wrote a terzanelle and said they sounded like bad romance novels. remember? i still wince thinking about mine and that's the only part of it i recall, lol, the wince

Always A Way To Make A Living Parts I like. Parts I don't. I think I'll keep the first strophe for scrap parts. lol

yes, keep. mine for good parts

and sometimes i drive it This may just need an edit. I'm still iffy about the pine and pussy.

end it before you get to the sex memory part and it's a pretty damn good poem

after he swung it around the room ???

Ann's Anxiety Like the illustration. The poem is weird.

i like the poem. it is wierd, but it's good. i can't figure out how to read the last three words and i like that mrs picasso head

Autistic Slumber Not sure about this one.

keep and think about again in a few months lol

After the Fall Needs a good edit but I'll probably never get to it.

see my comment on previous poem

A Widow At Last It's kind of silly.

this is my favorite after the porch one. don't lose it


So, let me know which ones deserve to be buried. If you see anything else in the A section that's mediocre, let me know. Thanks!

Do you think my poem in the progress thread is foppish? darkmaas called it foppish.

 

[WickedEve]

No. Not foppish. I'm trying to think of the right word for it. It won't be a pleasant word. lol It's just too... too... it's not foppish but it's something. I don't know. I'm still recovering from all that exfoliating.

 

[Angeline]

No. Not foppish. I'm trying to think of the right word for it. It won't be a pleasant word. lol It's just too... too... it's not foppish but it's something. I don't know. I'm still recovering from all that exfoliating.

Did I tell you it's really hot here? I bet you have no sympathy for me because you're south of me. But it is and I feel like I need to exfoliate and take a shower ever 20 minutes. Then I think back a few months to all the snow, which sounds pretty good at the moment but really it was terrible, lol, so now I'm confused. And I'm trying to write a cellar door poem. It's all too much for me...

 

[WickedEve]

Did I tell you it's really hot here? I bet you have no sympathy for me because you're south of me. But it is and I feel like I need to exfoliate and take a shower ever 20 minutes. Then I think back a few months to all the snow, which sounds pretty good at the moment but really it was terrible, lol, so now I'm confused. And I'm trying to write a cellar door poem. It's all too much for me...

I know what the foppish poem needs. It needs to be diluted.
So, should I give the axe to some of the crappy poems, delete the whole mess of them, leave it alone? I am prepared to do something drastic. PMS again. AGAIN! I was hoping for a bitchy pms but it's a freaking weepy pms. Someone just slap me!

 

[tungtied2u]

I know what the foppish poem needs. It needs to be diluted.
So, should I give the axe to some of the crappy poems, delete the whole mess of them, leave it alone? I am prepared to do something drastic. PMS again. AGAIN! I was hoping for a bitchy pms but it's a freaking weepy pms. Someone just slap me!

As if your poems aren't already difficult to fathom sometimes, now you want me to put up with 2 of you? If you want to dump your dross, just send it my way, and I'll put new titles on them and use my tag line. Heaven knows your crap makes my perfume smell like sewage by comparison.

 

[tungtied2u]

Did I tell you it's really hot here? I bet you have no sympathy for me because you're south of me. But it is and I feel like I need to exfoliate and take a shower ever 20 minutes. Then I think back a few months to all the snow, which sounds pretty good at the moment but really it was terrible, lol, so now I'm confused. And I'm trying to write a cellar door poem. It's all too much for me...

When it's hot in Maine,
don't complain-
think o' that sweet sax refrain
how it remains
hangin' in the air
soft and sultry
on a New Orleans night
sweat drippin'
hips slippin'
as you strain to be one
with the music inside you.
__________________

 

[Angeline]

I know what the foppish poem needs. It needs to be diluted.
So, should I give the axe to some of the crappy poems, delete the whole mess of them, leave it alone? I am prepared to do something drastic. PMS again. AGAIN! I was hoping for a bitchy pms but it's a freaking weepy pms. Someone just slap me!

I already said.

Keep the porch poem and the widow one for sure; they're both excellent. Rip the wallpaper off the others and save what you can.

How come we don't have pms at the same time anymore? I don't like it when we're out of sync.

 

[Angeline]

When it's hot in Maine,
don't complain-
think o' that sweet sax refrain
how it remains
hangin' in the air
soft and sultry
on a New Orleans night
sweat drippin'
hips slippin'
as you strain to be one
with the music inside you.
__________________

Baby, I'm from New Joisey
we love to complain
about the heat, hadda
stand on line. That coulda
been a contender refrain
fits loud in my mouth.

I can snap my gum,
whistle a cab and bitch
out the meter and more
in a single breath till
death do my cities
and I part ways. Heat
is just a bead of sweat
on my chin. This place
is slow as tar and twice
as sticky. I wish I were
on 52nd Street beyond
the Famous Door, cooled
for comfort, blues chilled.

 

[WickedEve]

I already said.

Keep the porch poem and the widow one for sure; they're both excellent. Rip the wallpaper off the others and save what you can.

How come we don't have pms at the same time anymore? I don't like it when we're out of sync.

Out of sync. Ah. The reasons for cramps. Rip the wall paper off? lol Okay. Now to start on group B.

 

[WickedEve]

Well, jeez. I just now noticed your comments in red! I must be color blind.

 

[postobitum]

Might I add keep the swinging it around the room poem, please. I guess you can play with it more if you want to but just the idea of what transpired before the burial is fascinating.
It reminds me of the time my brother got into his old ghetto sled (1984 caprice classic) to go to high school a few years back and was attacked by a feral cat that had slept in the back seat the night before. (Bad habit, leaving your windows rolled down.) My brother, being the redneck that he is, stayed in the car in an attempt to punch the cat to death while the cat was racing around the interior, spraying everything with urine. End result: scratched up brother and car stank to high heaven, untouched wild kitty got away, and another family legend was born.

You just don't throw away this kind of stuff!

 

[Liar]

after he swung it around the room needs to stay, so that I can keep trying to figure out what the hell the title, albeit über cool, has to do with anything.

 

[postobitum]

I figured the cat got swung around the room, resulting in both the death of swinger and swingee, hence the strange funeral. (Maybe the cat and the uncle were both wanted men, or aliens, therefore explaining the burial's local.)

At any rate, the possibilities for what went on and why are enough of a reason for me to really like this one and for keeping it.

 

[WickedEve]

I figured the cat got swung around the room, resulting in both the death of swinger and swingee, hence the strange funeral.

Of course.

 

[Reltne]

Re the thread title: I am still trying to figure out to whom you are referring. (Not that he doesn't need it!)

 

[WickedEve]

Re the thread title: I am still trying to figure out to whom you are referring. (Not that he doesn't need it!)

I'm not sure. I know many asses. And of course, with my ass fixation, I like to picture my poetry as a body. And at the moment, it has a huge ass.

 

[PatCarrington]

In the past, I've deleted large volumes of my poetry--and be glad I did. My earlier work is horrendous. Now I have over 250 poems. I hate to submit any new poems until I clean this mess up. There are some poems that simply need to go. I want to keep the better ones, which are difficult to find at the moment since they're buried under all the mediocre poetry. I've been seriously contemplating deleting the entire lot. Instead, I'm going to try deleting sections of it. I'm starting with the As. Here is a group of A poetry that I'm considering giving the axe to. I'd appreciate it if anyone would be kind enough to assist me. Just give me an idea of which ones need to say bye bye.

Amenity Afterwards I think this is an obvious one to cut.

Alien In The Dark Another one that should be deleted.

ashante porch Average poem.

Amorous Widow I think this one is only interesting because of the form. Without the form, it's no better than mediocre. At least, that's my opinion.

Always A Way To Make A Living Parts I like. Parts I don't. I think I'll keep the first strophe for scrap parts. lol

and sometimes i drive it This may just need an edit. I'm still iffy about the pine and pussy.

after he swung it around the room ???

Ann's Anxiety Like the illustration. The poem is weird.

Autistic Slumber Not sure about this one.

After the Fall Needs a good edit but I'll probably never get to it.

A Widow At Last It's kind of silly.


So, let me know which ones deserve to be buried. If you see anything else in the A section that's mediocre, let me know. Thanks!

i think 'Amenity Afterwards' and 'Alien in the Dark' are cuts, too.

i don't think 'ashante porch' is a throwaway, but i do think it is unnecessarily obscure.

i think 'Amorous Widow' is quite assonant and reads well, but i have a bias against form poetry and because of that (which is my fault) the poem didn't thrill me.

in my opinion, there is plenty to mine in 'Always A Way To Make A Living.'

'and sometimes i drive it' sure seems like a keeper to me.

'after he swung it around the room' seems like a throwaway to me.

i can't make heads or tails out of 'Ann's Anxiety.' i think it's poorly formatted.

i like 'Autistic Slumber' and 'After the Fall' very much. they seem full of fine possibilities if you choose to edit and rewrite.

'A Widow at Last' is terrific, far better than you think it is. you never give this poem any credit. i think it's great.


hope these thoughts help a bit, evie.

 

[annaswirls]

Why are you cutting them again? I know this may seem strange for me to say, but lit just seems like a nice place to store poems to you know where to find them. Even the ones that you do not feel are your best do serve as a historical record. On your author page, you might consider listing your favorites, so that if someone is coming to check out your work, they know where to start.

I totally understand that it is difficult to keep track of though, when there are so many. I know you have had other ID's here. You might consider submitting different categories to different ID's. For a while I gave Seattle all of my trashy slut trashy trash trash poetry.

I don't regret deleting all my poems, I know I had to, but I do miss having all my poems at one spot. Now they are all over the place on my hard drive, I don't remember when they were written, what else I wrote that day, what was going on in my life at that time... I know last year you re-submitted a bunch that you had taken down before. Isn't that a pain?

I dunno, just my thoughts.

Where is the bored cow?

Jennifer

 

[flyguy69]

Why are you cutting them again? I know this may seem strange for me to say, but lit just seems like a nice place to store poems to you know where to find them. Even the ones that you do not feel are your best do serve as a historical record. On your author page, you might consider listing your favorites, so that if someone is coming to check out your work, they know where to start.

I totally understand that it is difficult to keep track of though, when there are so many. I know you have had other ID's here. You might consider submitting different categories to different ID's. For a while I gave Seattle all of my trashy slut trashy trash trash poetry.

I don't regret deleting all my poems, I know I had to, but I do miss having all my poems at one spot. Now they are all over the place on my hard drive, I don't remember when they were written, what else I wrote that day, what was going on in my life at that time... I know last year you re-submitted a bunch that you had taken down before. Isn't that a pain?

I dunno, just my thoughts.

Where is the bored cow?

Jennifer

Yes, I too am looking forward to the product of the Bored Cow. The sweet-smelling product....



And don't you dare delete Match Strike, which remains a favorite of mine.

 

[WickedEve]

i think 'Amenity Afterwards' and 'Alien in the Dark' are cuts, too.

i don't think 'ashante porch' is a throwaway, but i do think it is unnecessarily obscure.

i think 'Amorous Widow' is quite assonant and reads well, but i have a bias against form poetry and because of that (which is my fault) the poem didn't thrill me.

in my opinion, there is plenty to mine in 'Always A Way To Make A Living.'

'and sometimes i drive it' sure seems like a keeper to me.

'after he swung it around the room' seems like a throwaway to me.

i can't make heads or tails out of 'Ann's Anxiety.' i think it's poorly formatted.

i like 'Autistic Slumber' and 'After the Fall' very much. they seem full of fine possibilities if you choose to edit and rewrite.

'A Widow at Last' is terrific, far better than you think it is. you never give this poem any credit. i think it's great.


hope these thoughts help a bit, evie.

Thank you darkness. Well, just going through the A poems is a big job. I'd rather be lazy and delete them all and start over. I'm extreme that way. lol

 

[WickedEve]

Why are you cutting them again? I know this may seem strange for me to say, but lit just seems like a nice place to store poems to you know where to find them. Even the ones that you do not feel are your best do serve as a historical record. On your author page, you might consider listing your favorites, so that if someone is coming to check out your work, they know where to start.

I totally understand that it is difficult to keep track of though, when there are so many. I know you have had other ID's here. You might consider submitting different categories to different ID's. For a while I gave Seattle all of my trashy slut trashy trash trash poetry.

I don't regret deleting all my poems, I know I had to, but I do miss having all my poems at one spot. Now they are all over the place on my hard drive, I don't remember when they were written, what else I wrote that day, what was going on in my life at that time... I know last year you re-submitted a bunch that you had taken down before. Isn't that a pain?

I dunno, just my thoughts.

Where is the bored cow?

Jennifer

I think about the storage space too. That's why I haven't gone on a deleting frenzy, yet. I think I just get pissy about my poetry and other things that have to do with the lit poetry world.
The cow is still on hold until I have time. I just worked 13 hours today. This self-employed thing is time consuming.

 

[WickedEve]

Yes, I too am looking forward to the product of the Bored Cow. The sweet-smelling product....



And don't you dare delete Match Strike, which remains a favorite of mine.

I'm still on the As. Far from the Ms and I probably won't make it that far. I'll get distracted and forget all about this or something... I don't know! This is what happens when someone doesn't tell me what to do. Though, I never listen to anyone.

 

[flyguy69]

I'm still on the As. Far from the Ms and I probably won't make it that far. I'll get distracted and forget all about this or something... I don't know! This is what happens when someone doesn't tell me what to do. Though, I never listen to anyone.

Forget about what? Did you say something?