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WickedEve
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I guess you could title it My Hero. Sometimes titles come so easily and other times... I've been tempted to call all mine Untitled 1, Untitled 2, and so on.
I am wondering about the cocky/arrogant part. Is he cocky and arrogant in a good way or bad way? Is there a good way? Just wondering.
I am wondering about the cocky/arrogant part. Is he cocky and arrogant in a good way or bad way? Is there a good way? Just wondering.
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WickedEve said:
That was my original title. But I'd like to spice it up a bit. Hmm...
I was thinking of putting the word family in my title. Hmm, again. This is driving me nuts!
Luv2 is great with helping out with this stuff, but he's not home yet, and I'm impatient, LOL! I also would like to know other's opinions- not only on the title but if it needs any work.
Is he arrogant and cocky in a good way? No! Of course, there's no good way. Is there such a thing I don't know about? LOL! That's why I said in the poem (more or less) that we have to take the good with the bad- keeping fists out of it, you know what I mean? Like he's gotta deal with my damn PMS and fickleness. Ha, he diagnosed me with erraticus behavioritis. We love each other through it all.
It's minor. I've had much worse to deal with- yeah yeah, that ex husband who's truly a madman, and use to love with his fists, so boy, do I know! Blah, blah..I'm getting off the subject.
Some words that have come to mind:
shelter
homeless
family
miracle
hero
imprisoned
abuse
I've got to get the word family in the title somehow. Or something close. Ugh! I don't like the word family- has to be something close. Nuts!
Edit: I think I should add another stanza that he took me in. Oh damn! I don't know.
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His Idyllic World
would seem apropo for the content...inho...
would seem apropo for the content...inho...
saldne said:I'm free from abuse and scream "Finally!"
although I share a home with a cocky,
arrogant man, I laugh and say
I love him, anyway.
There's not one who's perfect.
We have to take the good with the bad
making sure no fists are involved
during a spat or conflict.
You've got to agree to disagree,
do your best, and not go to bed mad
for tomorrow may be regrets when you wake
finding you missed your loved one's last breath.
And even though my stay is temporary,
I'll cherish every moment
believing he loves me the same
even through my past heartache and pain,
and it'll continue when I leave
after I've found shelter for myself
and offspring.
He wears his heart on his sleeve,
and it's obvious.
He's my knight in shining armor
also known as my hero.
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I was just about to submit this, but I'm having a hard time with a title. This man is my hero (Luv2), and I'd like to share it. It's a true story put into a poem. Imprisoned...something, something?? I don't know. Instead of putting the abuse in the poem, here's a quickie to explain.
I was living w/ a family member who was abusing my children and myself, and my darling Luv2 took me in. Maybe that'll help more with the title. If you feel there is anything else I need to add, please, please don't be shy. I appreciate all comments and opinions. I don't believe I need to add anything more about the abuse, so I'd like to keep it that way.
This is something I'm not ashamed of. It's a miracle- even more of a miracle that I found love on the net, and plan to spend the rest of my life with this man, living together or not.
I have a filthy mouth, but I'm also a mush.
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Thank you for the suggestions so far. "Blissful Home" is getting VERY close, but I'd like to add something before that because life wasn't so blissful before I got here.
Still thinking...
Still thinking...
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JUDO
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It seems that you are implying that the happiness is an agreed upon, contractual happiness that might be temporary.
So, I did a search in dictionary.com for "temporary happiness." Some very good responses there. I partcularly liked the first one "Abraham's Bosom."
- Judo
So, I did a search in dictionary.com for "temporary happiness." Some very good responses there. I partcularly liked the first one "Abraham's Bosom."
- Judo
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The_Fool said:
You're a sweetheart for helping. Thanks!
blissful home
after-shock (one or two words?)
Hmmm....after-shock just came to me. I like it. I like blissful home, too. We're getting closer!!
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Ugh! Now I'm thinking about doing that other stanza again, but I was thought this would give it away:
And even though my stay is temporary,
I'll cherish every moment
believing he loves me the same
even through my past heartache and pain,
and it'll continue when I leave
after I've found shelter for myself
and offspring.
In other words: it's too soon for us to live together, but we love each other very much, and that'll continue after I leave. Living with him is only temp. until I find another home. He took me in because the kids and I were being abused elsewhere. So, it's not temporary happiness. Living with him or not, he makes me happy.
Am I making sense?
I do appreciate your help. If you think I should add another stanza, please let me know.
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"Hero Made of Clay" -or- "My Hero's just a Man"
indicating thats he's human too, with his faults and foibles, like anyone else... while he still a hero to you and your children.
I was trying to think of a adjective for malleable/fragile/failable to go before Hero.
Hmmmmm, "Imperfect Hero" or "Clay Heroes".
I know there's a better word, but it just isn't coming to me.
indicating thats he's human too, with his faults and foibles, like anyone else... while he still a hero to you and your children.
I was trying to think of a adjective for malleable/fragile/failable to go before Hero.
Hmmmmm, "Imperfect Hero" or "Clay Heroes".
I know there's a better word, but it just isn't coming to me.
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Thanks, Zan- much appreciated. I'm really trying to stay away from the word "hero". I wrote that for another who screwed me over.
more words:
rescue
saves
knight
maiden
damsel
distress
Luv2 is not being very helpful. If he sticks his head any closer to the TV, he'll be inside it. I'm now going to REALLY distract him by sitting on his face and demand he fixes ALL my frustrations.
more words:
rescue
saves
knight
maiden
damsel
distress
Luv2 is not being very helpful. If he sticks his head any closer to the TV, he'll be inside it. I'm now going to REALLY distract him by sitting on his face and demand he fixes ALL my frustrations.
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How about Guardian Angel of the Knight
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violette_starr said:
Thank you for the suggestion.
That IS a VERY nice title, and I was just popping in to say I THINK I've got it.
How about Turmoil To Tranquility?
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saldne said:
i like "Abraham's Bosom" best.
i think your idea above, and most of the others, are a bit too direct.
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PatCarrington said:i like "Abraham's Bosom" best.
i think your idea above, and most of the others, are a bit too direct.
Thank you for your opinion. A
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I like it, I'm probably the worse at titles, I've noticed the power of finally getting a good one. A good title got me ten times my average number of readers, but I'll put in my thought anyway. I like the idea of something with blissful in it or something similar, peaceful maybe. Why not just call it 'finally!'saldne said:I'm free from abuse and scream "Finally!"
although I share a home with a cocky,
arrogant man, I laugh and say
I love him, anyway.
There's not one who's perfect.
We have to take the good with the bad
making sure no fists are involved
during a spat or conflict.
You've got to agree to disagree,
do your best, and not go to bed mad
for tomorrow may be regrets when you wake
finding you missed your loved one's last breath.
And even though my stay is temporary,
I'll cherish every moment
believing he loves me the same
even through my past heartache and pain,
and it'll continue when I leave
after I've found shelter for myself
and offspring.
He wears his heart on his sleeve,
and it's obvious.
He's my knight in shining armor
also known as my hero.
___________________________
I was just about to submit this, but I'm having a hard time with a title. This man is my hero (Luv2), and I'd like to share it. It's a true story put into a poem. Imprisoned...something, something?? I don't know. Instead of putting the abuse in the poem, here's a quickie to explain.
I was living w/ a family member who was abusing my children and myself, and my darling Luv2 took me in. Maybe that'll help more with the title. If you feel there is anything else I need to add, please, please don't be shy. I appreciate all comments and opinions. I don't believe I need to add anything more about the abuse, so I'd like to keep it that way.
This is something I'm not ashamed of. It's a miracle- even more of a miracle that I found love on the net, and plan to spend the rest of my life with this man, living together or not.
I have a filthy mouth, but I'm also a mush.
(Remember, I did say my titles totally suck)
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I think it was either Fly or Neon (sorry I've got a lousy short term memory) who told me one idea is to use the second to last line as the title...
Maybe a derivation of that. 'My knight' or 'He's my knight'
Maybe a derivation of that. 'My knight' or 'He's my knight'
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That's good. Thanks for the line idea, too!wildsweetone said:
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Bacteriophage68 said:
Another with O.C.D.
Anyway....
I think I'm going to take Eve's idea and set the poem aside for a while. Thank you all for your help.
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