Tides of Desire - new story, new author looking for feedback!

[SJMonroe]

Hi everyone! I'm brand new here - some may say Virgin, but I think my stories will put that idea to rest

I'm looking for any and all feedback on my first story, posted in the Exhibitionism/Voyeurism category! It's about 3700 words, a bit short to be called a "chapter" I think, but here we are. Feedback I'm looking for include (but not limited to):
- Does the intro hook you in and grab your attention?
- Is the erotica realistic and titillating (I love that word), and is it exhibitionist "enough" for the category?
- is the cliffhanger ending annoying? I intend to make this a series so I want to get readers hooked
- I welcome all comments on length, haha

https://www.literotica.com/s/tides-of-desire-ch-01

Thanks for reading!

S.J.


My stories: https://www.literotica.com/authors/SJMonroe/works/stories

 

[big_cane_sugar]

IMO that's an excellent first work! Much, much better than my first stories here. I don't know about your plans for the future chapters but if the story goes a certain direction it could do well as a romance. Without knowing about the exhibitionist/voyeur readers, I'd guess it'd get more views and votes in romance.