This my first story

[xrobbie]

Sleeping with sisters boyfriend

The story needed a lot of work done to it and I don;t have the time to fix it.

 

[neonlyte]

xrobbie

I'm sure you feel better for unloading that. There are some interesting ideas and relationships in the story but if you post it in that form, on this site, you will be slaughtered in the voting.

This is not the place to review, or provide detailed feedback.

My suggestion to you is to read a few stories in the Ecotic Coupling and Loving Wives catagories and some of the Help Threads in the editors section before re-writing this story. Take it to the best level you feel capable of, then ask for an Editor, on the Editors Forum, to help you polish the story before posting.

Best of luck and keep writing.

 

[xrobbie]

xrobbie

I'm sure you feel better for unloading that. There are some interesting ideas and relationships in the story but if you post it in that form, on this site, you will be slaughtered in the voting.

This is not the place to review, or provide detailed feedback.

My suggestion to you is to read a few stories in the Ecotic Coupling and Loving Wives catagories and some of the Help Threads in the editors section before re-writing this story. Take it to the best level you feel capable of, then ask for an Editor, on the Editors Forum, to help you polish the story before posting.

Best of luck and keep writing.

Thanks for that i was unsure where to submit it and have a habit of just rushing in.