This is my short story. feedback please!
This is my first time here so I’m not sure if I’m doing this right. I apologize ahead of time if it's not. I made this when I was 17; I’m 18 now, so it may not be great like an expert. Well I hope you enjoy anyway! Feed back please!
Story is right below:
I love it when Quentin makes love. He is so gentle when dealing with me. I get sweet kisses from him. Not just on the lips but everywhere. While lying on my back he follows the curves of my body with his hands; taking the same path a drop of sweat would take trickling down from the top of my breast on a hot afternoon. When he feels me start to shake and the pattern of my breathing speeds up he knows what to do. He knows what I want out of him next and he wants it too.
He stands off the bed and sits me up so that his now harden cock was at the rim of my mouth as he stroked it right in front of me. The scent made me itch for more. I asked him to stop being so mean but he enjoyed it to much to listen. He toyed with me, smearing his precum on my lips; not letting me play even just a little bit. Not quiet yet at least. I licked my lips and the slightly salty taste sent me on fire. I couldn’t take it no more! I was hungry and couldn’t wait to gorge myself on him! I grabbed hold of his rode and before he could say or do anything began to suck on the head of his meat. He then slipped his hand through my hair and had me bob my head up and down his shaft. His cock glistened from my saliva that covered him. The thought of having him all in my mouth aroused me. I needed to have it right then. He moaned when I slipped it down my throat; engulfing every part of his dick. He wanted more.
He pushed me away laid me on the bed and flipped me over. He then positions me with my ass in the air so he could kneel down with me and slowly work his cock into my sex. He took his time; being careful not to hurt me. The warm walls inside me cover him inch by inch. Anticipation filled me up the deeper he went. I moaned loudly when it was all in. My lover started it off slow pulling it out and putting it back in. I could feel the smooth bumps and ridges of his penis moving in and out of me. I couldn’t help myself but let out a little whimper. The faster and deeper he went whimpers turned into screams in the heat of the moment. Quentin gently laid on top of me. The weight of his body made me feel overwhelmed like a virgin school girl that was being taken advantage of. Then he held my body close as he penetrated me over and over again; giving my breast a squeeze whenever I moaned.
I can tell when he is getting close to cumming. His deep blue eyes that were once on me the whole time, rolled back and closed shut all while his head tilts back as he opens his mouth to yell out in pleasure but nothing comes out but a gasp for air. He feels his pulsating cock get harder and harder to the point were he felt like he was going to explode. He then reaches his peak. He longed to cum right then and now but couldn’t due to the plea of …“more!” that trembled out of my lips. He clenches his teeth together, held his breath and tightens his grip on my waist as he bangs me harder. His muscles tenses up and he came to a realization that he could not hold it any longer. By that time I was about to hit my max myself so I pleaded him to finish. He didn’t wait a second longer. His hot cum shoot inside and filled me up till it oozed out of my pussy. He moaned satisfyingly deep as his climax drops slowly.
Afterwards he fell on top of me breathing heavily with his meat still pulsating inside. We laughed a bit at how much we were craving each other just a while ago till heaviness filled our eyes with sleep. He held my hand and gave me soft kisses on my neck, shoulder and back then whispered the words “I love you.” We slept. The next morning I cried to see him go. It wasn’t fair; our night together ended shortly after it began.
This is my first time here so I’m not sure if I’m doing this right. I apologize ahead of time if it's not. I made this when I was 17; I’m 18 now, so it may not be great like an expert. Well I hope you enjoy anyway! Feed back please!
Story is right below:
I love it when Quentin makes love. He is so gentle when dealing with me. I get sweet kisses from him. Not just on the lips but everywhere. While lying on my back he follows the curves of my body with his hands; taking the same path a drop of sweat would take trickling down from the top of my breast on a hot afternoon. When he feels me start to shake and the pattern of my breathing speeds up he knows what to do. He knows what I want out of him next and he wants it too.
He stands off the bed and sits me up so that his now harden cock was at the rim of my mouth as he stroked it right in front of me. The scent made me itch for more. I asked him to stop being so mean but he enjoyed it to much to listen. He toyed with me, smearing his precum on my lips; not letting me play even just a little bit. Not quiet yet at least. I licked my lips and the slightly salty taste sent me on fire. I couldn’t take it no more! I was hungry and couldn’t wait to gorge myself on him! I grabbed hold of his rode and before he could say or do anything began to suck on the head of his meat. He then slipped his hand through my hair and had me bob my head up and down his shaft. His cock glistened from my saliva that covered him. The thought of having him all in my mouth aroused me. I needed to have it right then. He moaned when I slipped it down my throat; engulfing every part of his dick. He wanted more.
He pushed me away laid me on the bed and flipped me over. He then positions me with my ass in the air so he could kneel down with me and slowly work his cock into my sex. He took his time; being careful not to hurt me. The warm walls inside me cover him inch by inch. Anticipation filled me up the deeper he went. I moaned loudly when it was all in. My lover started it off slow pulling it out and putting it back in. I could feel the smooth bumps and ridges of his penis moving in and out of me. I couldn’t help myself but let out a little whimper. The faster and deeper he went whimpers turned into screams in the heat of the moment. Quentin gently laid on top of me. The weight of his body made me feel overwhelmed like a virgin school girl that was being taken advantage of. Then he held my body close as he penetrated me over and over again; giving my breast a squeeze whenever I moaned.
I can tell when he is getting close to cumming. His deep blue eyes that were once on me the whole time, rolled back and closed shut all while his head tilts back as he opens his mouth to yell out in pleasure but nothing comes out but a gasp for air. He feels his pulsating cock get harder and harder to the point were he felt like he was going to explode. He then reaches his peak. He longed to cum right then and now but couldn’t due to the plea of …“more!” that trembled out of my lips. He clenches his teeth together, held his breath and tightens his grip on my waist as he bangs me harder. His muscles tenses up and he came to a realization that he could not hold it any longer. By that time I was about to hit my max myself so I pleaded him to finish. He didn’t wait a second longer. His hot cum shoot inside and filled me up till it oozed out of my pussy. He moaned satisfyingly deep as his climax drops slowly.
Afterwards he fell on top of me breathing heavily with his meat still pulsating inside. We laughed a bit at how much we were craving each other just a while ago till heaviness filled our eyes with sleep. He held my hand and gave me soft kisses on my neck, shoulder and back then whispered the words “I love you.” We slept. The next morning I cried to see him go. It wasn’t fair; our night together ended shortly after it began.
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