The Temp 1-4

[#1derfulGuy]

I liked the concept of the story because ebony woman/white man stories are a complete turn on for me. But the author took too long to get to the plot of the story. Maybe keeping the reader in suspense was his goal but, in some cases, some readers will get bored and go on to another story. It shouldn't have to take 4 parts for the couple to finally "knock boots". What's worse, she just screwed him and left him alone. Damn, what's up with that?

 

[*Eve*]

I am sorry that you didn't enjoy the story but I do appeciate the feedback. I guess my point was to built up to the climax rather than them just going at it. I will keep what you said in mind when I write another story.
Eve

 

[Laurel]

I really enjoyed the story for just that reason - you took your time getting to it, so when it happened it was incredibly exciting. And when she left him - well, it couldn't have happened to a better guy, eh? A handsome, cocky young lawyer who thinks he can have can't get what he really wants, and that makes him want it more. And Yvette... she's got her own emotional baggage. The characters are complex, and the story is very sexy... Excellent stuff!

 

[#1derfulGuy]

EVE........Don't get me wrong. Quite frankly, I liked the story. Maybe I am just a quick and concise type of a writer and don't often "prolong" the event of a story. I do, however, admire how well you included another character (his golf friend) in the story and that person had previously been in the same predictament. What the hell, I have my opinion but, all n all, it was a great story. Hey, I'm only one person. Laurel also made an interesting point in her reply.