The Sacking of Andrapur

[Trancendent]

New Author here, posted a story on the site, nothing came of it, check it out and lemme know what you think. Sorry about pasting the address in, I'm still pretty new and not sure how to set up a link on the page. Also, I kinda messed up part of the story so that it ends up going in a loop. When you get to the "breaking the walls" bit, just ignore the first toop three as they will send you to a previous page. Feel free to add to them

 

[jakelyon]

Good Idea

I like the idea of the story, but I could use a little more information as to where you see it going. The title makes me think of rape, slavery, sexual blackmail,bondage etc. Is that what you had in mind?

Also you should fix the title. The misspelling of "Saking" is kind of distracting.

Thanks.

 

[Trancendent]

About the title

Yeah, I know, the title glitch is annoying, but there doesn't seem to be any way to change at this point, at least none I can see. As far as what it's meant to be like, well, it about an army sacking a helpless, undefended city. Rape, blackmail and all the rest, they certainly are a part of it. But there is also the equal opportunity for nobility, mercy, and safeguarding the helpless, even romance amidst the chaos. Consider the characters. One is a giant warrior (Durga), another a vicious mercenary (KOrven), another a noble lord looking for revenge but also somewhat conflicted about the cost that might have on his soul, and the last a virtuous, honorable knight here to save his lady love. So basically things can go either way.

Please, feel free to add to it.

 

[jakelyon]

All good stuff. I will see if I can whip up some threads for it. I enjoy fantasy settings, and hopefully I can make up a good thread line or two.

To fix the title go to the first thread of the story and click on the name of the story as it is displayed in the upper right hand of the thread. This will take you to the story summary page. The first line on the is page will say, "About the saking of Andrapur". Click on the word edit you can fix the spelling.

Thanks.

 

[jakelyon]

1st person or 2nd person

I notice that you specified 1st person in the story setup, but the threads you have written are in 2nd person. I am going to add a thread in 2nd person assuming that is what you intended. You can fix the POV the same way that you fix the spelling error in the story title.

Let me know if that is not clear and I will try to be more detailed.

Thanks.

 

[Trancendent]

Sure, no problem

Sure, no problem, I'll check it out later. BTW, I tried that method you siggested to fix the title, but for some reason it won't work. I don't get amn edit button when I reach that page

 

[jakelyon]

Odd

Hmmm, that is odd. The only time that happened to me is when I started logging in as JakeLyon with the capitals, not jakelyon all lower case. The system would log me in, but I would not have editor rights to my stories.

Other than that I have no idea what the issue could be??

 

[Trancendent]

Thansk for adding

Hey, Thanks for adding to the story. I just read the thread, it's pretty good, I hope you keep adding to it. Th first person POV was a bit of a surprise, but I like it, it gives the story a bit of variety. Keep it up!

 

[jakelyon]

Hey, Thanks for adding to the story. I just read the thread, it's pretty good, I hope you keep adding to it. Th first person POV was a bit of a surprise, but I like it, it gives the story a bit of variety. Keep it up!

Actually I wrote the thread in 2nd person POV. You have a couple of different POV's going in that the Paizar thread is written in third person. I guess I would like to continue in 2nd person as I already have four threads written.

Let me know.

 

[Trancendent]

I liked it

I liked what you wrote. Whatever POV you use is all right, so long as it advances the story. So far it's all been very good. I look forward to what you write next. Keep it going!

 

[Bacteriophage68]

If it's not Scottish it's crahp!

If it's not Scottish it's crahp!!!!

 

[Trancendent]

Right

Right......