The new #1OO

[Savage Kitten]

HEY!!!!!!! Look who made it to the tops list!!!

Let's try something different, ok? Maybe the #100 spot changes a lil bit more regular than the #1 spot? So, in this thread will take a look at the new #100 poem. Put it in the spotlight and give it a chance to move up the list, or be kicked off.

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Our first #100 poem is by pleasureu! (Why are we not surpised? *wink*)

Have I Fallen For A Daydream?
by pleasureu ©

Have I fallen for a daydream
As my heart goes running free
Sat lonely at a keyboard
Shedding tears
No one can see

Maybe its all just fantasy
Can never be life real
Yet, when I see that name appear
Is love
That then I feel

To see the words before me
To feel the passion rise
As love light now be shining
In four
Delighted eyes

To see the kiss, and soft caress
To feel the nipple grow,
Pussy lips around a shaft
That moves
Now gentle slow

A calculated climax
Orgasmic ecstasy
Deep spasms that surround us
For you
And then for me

Have I fallen for a day dream
Is this a love so true
And what will be the answer
When I say
I
Love
You



Can this man possibly get any more romantic? I think what I like most about his poetry is that he is not afraid to let the world know how he feels. Someone once told me that when they got emotional they didn't write because it muddled their poetry. I don't think anyone will ever be able to say this about pleasureu!

Feel free to comment on this poem, the style, and the grammatical correctness. While you are at it, don't forget to vote!

Sk~

 

[Blue Dolphin]

stunned

Wow.
Savage kitten, I am stunned.
Yes I wear my heart on my sleeve, and I have no pretensions about what I write.
i would like to thank you dear lady, for your comments on the romanticism.
I, and, I hope, the lady I wrote this for,truly appreciate your words

 

[KatPurrs]

Re: stunned

Wow.

I, and, I hope, the lady I wrote this for,truly appreciate your words

Oh I DO pleasureu! I DO!

Wha? Huh? Oh...hehe....that was that other Kat again, eh? Damn!

*scampering off, blushing, calling myself a damn fool!*

Kat~ oh wait! (Great idea SK!)

P.S. Lovely poem, pleasureu. Very lyrical and very sexy. I can hear this poem, as if set to music. Thanks for the read. I already voted on this one when it came out.

 

[Blue Dolphin]

Katpurrs

Aaawwwwwwww Kat, ty, maybe I should write something for you, *s*

Amused to see you thought it was for my other friend called Kat,not so, she is just one of my many friends here.
The lady the poem was for, I have never mentioned her name here, although it is intricately woven into my work.
Unfortunately there is a sad end to it.
We were torn apart on St, Valentines Day, and my work since then reflects this.
Still hurting badly,
P

 

[KatPurrs]

Re: Katpurrs

We were torn apart on St, Valentines Day, and my work since then reflects this.
Still hurting badly,
P

pleasureu,

Well, that was piss poor timing if I've ever heard of it! So sorry to hear that you're hurting. I hope you heal quickly.

Kat~

 

[Savage Kitten]

2/18/02

Snag a glimpse of 'Snatch'!

Quickie...
by *Snatch ©

Feverish and flushed...
we quickly discard the clothing we wore.
Hands reach to touch, to stroke, to caress.
Lips part for tongues to explore.
Feelings flood..
and eventually overflow.
I feel you stiffen,
between us..your hard and ready.
but you wait...
bringing me to the peak.
Like thunder on the mountian.
To explode,
a shower of sweet lust.
that runs down my thighs.
Oh baby...

The title is great! The authors nick in enticing! Too bad the poem can't follow up. What's up with that? I guess I had my expectations way too high! The term "Quickie" makes me think of something hot, heavy, out of control. I wanted to read of animalistic passion, sweat, grunts, & groans.

This poem leaves me with images of my ex that I thought I had long since buried, and my own voice echoing in my head; "Is that it?!?!"

I am inspired though, to go write me own version of "Quickie".

What do you think of this poem? Remember to comment and vote!

Sk~

 

[Blue Dolphin]

Quickie

Thank you SK.
I have never commented on anothers work before, but, I do agree with you,something was lacking. Passion for me, seemed a little cold.
but then, I am a romantic arent I?
Look forward to your offering dear lady

 

[KatPurrs]

A different kind of "quickie"

Oh I don't know, SK, I kinda liked it! I was expecting the couple to have intercourse like a quickie usually is but instead, got a nice surprise hand job from the guy. He put himself on "hold" while he masturbated her to orgasm. I thought it was sexy as hell that she came so quickly. Personally, I love sessions like that where there is no penetration. But then, masturbation IS a fetish of mine.

I could have done without the lines,
"Feelings flood...
and eventually overflow" I didn't really get any sense of "feelings" here. Just raw sex.

And the most common mistake made on this site and EVERYWHERE that drives me right up the wall is the constant misuse of the word "your" instead of the contraction "you're" and vice versa.

between us..your hard and ready. NO!
between us..you're hard and ready YES!

I voted! Thank you, Snatch! (oooh, that sounds sooo naughty!)

Kat~

 

[JUDO]

pester

There ya go, KP, talkin' to your snatch again! (Doesn't that get you into trouble at parties? It does me.)

Speaking of little grammatical mispellings that drive others crazy like your & you're. How about: its & it's, their & there & they're, right & write, comma splices (no, it wasn't an adverbial clause) and semi-colon abuse (please make one clause explain the previous or at least be independant).

I know I should be able to think of more, but I'm not in the middle of a re-write, right now.

(Hey, Whisper. Don't you have a complete list of these faux pas somewheres?)

 

[JUDO]

Closet Romantic

Closet Romantic
by RisiaSkye ©

Behind closed doors
I may burn candles and incense
and draw pictures of flowers.

When convinced that I am alone
I have been known to daydream
of springtime and firesides.

In the company of strangers
I will argue the value of love songs
and flirt shamelessly with a shy guest.

Sitting by myself in the sun
I will get up to play with children
I have never seen before.

Sometiems at night
I secretly wish upon the early star
and send the sky my dreams.

And even though I won't admit it
I sometimes write poetry for you
and quietly kiss you goodnight.


Oh, it's unfair how RS manages to get a bit of her clever voice in every stanza...a twist of new phrase or thought. The gentle caress her words bring to me is almost palpable. (Would that I could be one of the 'never before seen children' that this deep soul plays with).

Kudos. How can such a sweet piece of art languish so often off the list? (sigh).


- Judo

 

[KatPurrs]

Re: pester

There ya go, KP, talkin' to your snatch again! (Doesn't that get you into trouble at parties? It does me.)

LOL...No, Judo. What gets me into trouble at parties is when it talks back.

Kat~

 

[Savage Kitten]

Re: A different kind of "quickie"

Oh I don't know, SK, I kinda liked it! I was expecting the couple to have intercourse like a quickie usually is but instead, got a nice surprise hand job from the guy. He put himself on "hold" while he masturbated her to orgasm.

ohhhhhhhhhhhh I get it now! Gee, I guess I missed the implied! I was wondering why one moment they were in foreplay and the next moment there was orgasms every where!! haha Thanx for the enlightenment KP hehe

Judo! I am pleased that you joined in the thread and kept it progressing for me! Risia is most definitely a talented writer.

~edited to add~

Please remember to vote and send feedback to the author!

Closet Romantic by RisiaSkye ©

 

[KatPurrs]

Re: Re: A different kind of "quickie"

ohhhhhhhhhhhh I get it now! Gee, I guess I missed the implied! I was wondering why one moment they were in foreplay and the next moment there was orgasms every where!! haha Thanx for the enlightenment KP hehe

SK,
Enlightenment is yours anytime. Climb that mountain! Your little sex guru will be waiting with open arms!

And about that ex of yours...LOL Yeah, at first I had flashbacks to my ex too. Until I realized that at least THIS guy held back and satisfied her first! And they wonder why we leave!

Kat~

 

[Whispersecret]

Hey, Whisper. Don't you have a complete list of these faux pas somewheres?

I don't have a complete list. That would be impossible. Plus, who would ever access it? Certainly not the people who need it most.

Even so, last week I attempted to help the situation just a little with this:

It's or Its? What's the Difference?
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=38049

 

[JUDO]

I'd read it!

Plus, who would ever access it? Certainly not the people who need it most.

Yeah, you're probably right. I also noticed KM's contribution to the 'How To' stories the other day (in a similar light): A Crash Course in Grammar

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=39018

(Funny...I never knew they had WalMart's down in Kiwi-ville. Go figure.)


- Judo

 

[Savage Kitten]

WOW! Look who made it! 2/20/02

Commands From A Dom
by KatPurrs ©

Get over here boy
Get down on your knees
Or I'll haul on your choke-chain
Til you froth and you wheeze.

Get over here boy
And give me some tongue
This seasoned sex goddess
Loves the old and the young.

Get over here boy
Give my cunt two fingers
One for each of us to lick
While the nectar still lingers.

Get over here boy
Now lick my ass
Don't hesitate boy
There's no option to "pass".

Get over here boy
I want a finger in each hole
Now stroke me you bastard
You wanted this role.

Get over here boy
Squeeze my tits together
Now bite them and suck them
As they poke through the leather.

Get over here boy
Best learn to behave
Or I just may do something
To make you wish for the grave.

First, Congrats to our very own Ms. Katpurrs! I want you to know that it is with love that I critique your poem.... (ack! please don't let what I say hurt your feelings... k?)

I like the idea behind this poem, D/s has always intrigued me in that special way. But, the rhyming pattern really takes away from the impact of the poem. Also, the first line of each stanza, Get over here boy, is redundant and lessens the severity which the writer is trying to obtain. A real Domme would never tell her sub more than once to come to her.

What do you guys think? Remember to vote and send our Ms. Kitty feedback!

Sk~

 

[KatPurrs]

Oh Spare Me The Pain!

SK,

I thought this thread a good idea until now! LOL
Ok, this was one of my very first poems. Hell, I didn't even know the difference between "Dom" and "Domme" for chrissakes!

*Moral of this story...Write what you KNOW!*

I've had such mixed feedback on this poem, it never ceases to amaze (and confuse) me. There were those that said the "redundancy" had impact, others hated it. That's when I decided, the hell with it. Poetry is too subjective to worry about it. One person's trash is another persons treasure. It has managed to stay on the top 100 list for most of it's life. Why? I haven't the slightest idea other than there are those who would love to hear a woman say that to them. At least that's what I've been hearing.

Your candor is a treasured gift. Please don't worry about hurting my feelings. I love hearing all of the different opinions! I have to admit when I read it now, I am amazed at myself. Who is that woman anyway?

Oh, and btw, SK, I love you too!

Kat~

 

[RisiaSkye]

Re: Closet Romantic

Oh, it's unfair how RS manages to get a bit of her clever voice in every stanza...a twist of new phrase or thought. The gentle caress her words bring to me is almost palpable. (Would that I could be one of the 'never before seen children' that this deep soul plays with).

Kudos. How can such a sweet piece of art languish so often off the list? (sigh).


- Judo

*faints*

Wow. Thanks JUDO & Savage Kitten for the kind words. Much appreciated. And Kudos to Kitten for the good idea this thread represents.

 

[KatPurrs]

I'll 3rd that

*picking Risia up, fanning her*

Risia, what can I say that Judo hasn't already said about Closet Romantic? She really nailed it. It is such a delight to read over and over again.

*And Judo, the way you worded your comment was a poem in itself.

Kat~

 

[JUDO]

Arf! Arf!

(Sniffing RS & KP) Every dog has her day!

 

[Savage Kitten]

hey everyone!

i apologise for not putting the #100 poem yesterday. I was having a real hell of a time trying to get into Lit! I'll be back this evening with today's #100 poem, if someone doesn't beat me to it during the day.

Sk~

 

[mayi]

Savage Kitten,

I would like to thank you for this thread. Keep up the good work.

mayi

 

[Savage Kitten]

How can I pick a #100 when there are 4 tied for the spot????

OK ok .. so I need your help!! You all vote on these so the all won't have the same score and be tied... ok???

Making Honey by Kat Purrs

Use Me..... by *Snatch

My Dancing Tongue by DaLovePoet

Naked by *Snatch

As of this posting they each had 17 votes for a total score of 4.12! You guys pleaseeeeeeeeeee read these poem and vote accordingly. We are STUCK I tell you, STUCK!!

Sk~

 

[RisiaSkye]

Re: How can I pick a #100 when there are 4 tied for the spot????

OK ok .. so I need your help!! You all vote on these so the all won't have the same score and be tied... ok???


As of this posting they each had 17 votes for a total score of 4.12! You guys pleaseeeeeeeeeee read these poem and vote accordingly. We are STUCK I tell you, STUCK!!

Sk~

I went and voted, hope it helps...thanks for the kick in the pants.

 

[Blue Dolphin]

voted

Hi SK,
Voted for all four my love.
mayi,
agree wholeheartedy with comments, please call back love