The last thing...

[TheEarl]

Bloody hell! I keep using the phrase 'the last thing she/he wanted to do was...' in this story. I can't seem to stop!

Sorry, no point to this thread. Just a general "Arrrrggghhh!"

The Earl

 

[carsonshepherd]

I find myself using the phrases "All the sudden" and "For a moment" way too much. Stop it! Stop it!

Is it "all the sudden" or "all of a sudden"? Is that a regional thing?

 

[TheEarl]

'All of a sudden' in Southern England.

The Earl

 

[CrimsonMaiden]

It's "all of the sudden" in Tennessee.

 

[BlackShanglan]

I keep doing "not unlike." For an Orwell fan, that's heresy. I wince every time I catch myself.

Shanglan

 

[Bridget69]

I'm pretty sure I repeat myself as well. Just can't remember how exactly.

 

[rikaaim]

I know I repeat myself. I have to smack myself everytime to try and cut it out.

 

[BlackShanglan]

I have to smack myself ...

Need any help there?

Shanglan

 

[Guest]

Need any help there?

Shanglan

LOL!

I find I use many of the same phrases over and over as well.

The man is often "growling" as he orgasms-

The woman is often "whimpering" as she is taken roughly -






No, wait. That's me.

 

[rikaaim]

Need any help there?

Shanglan

'Twas said merely to coax you out of hiding, or is that hideing? As in tanning a hide? Screw it, when you have to explain the joke, it's already dead. It didn't hurt that I just happened to have shot it also. Then stabbed it and burried it. Say bye bye to the dead joke everybody. Bye Bye. Wait, it has to be funny first to die, doesn't it?

 

[Virtual_Burlesque]

. . . Is . . . "all of a sudden". . . a regional thing?

I don't know, but Oliver Sudden has been a recurring character in all too many of my stories, as well.

Even some Non Fiction

 

[BlackShanglan]

'Twas said merely to coax you out of hiding, or is that hideing? As in tanning a hide? Screw it, when you have to explain the joke, it's already dead. It didn't hurt that I just happened to have shot it also. Then stabbed it and burried it. Say bye bye to the dead joke everybody. Bye Bye. Wait, it has to be funny first to die, doesn't it?

Don't know about the first joke, but this one had me howling. Nice one, Rika.

SSS - I have the same problem. Certain words must be closely controlled, even counted to keep track of their usage. "Shudder" comes to mind, as do "hot," "hungry/hunger," "fierce," and "wild," and converse "gently/gently," "soft," "slow."

I suppose I'm just conflicted

Shanglan

 

[Guest]

SSS - I have the same problem. Certain words must be closely controlled, even counted to keep track of their usage. "Shudder" comes to mind, as do "hot," "hungry/hunger," "fierce," and "wild," and converse "gently/gently," "soft," "slow."

I suppose I'm just conflicted

Shanglan

Or just horny.

 

[Guest]

Need any help there?

Shanglan

****purrrr****

id just love to watch that!
v~

 

[Guest]

****purrrr****

id just love to watch that!
v~

Are you kidding? You're next!

~lucky

 

[Evil Alpaca]

I have a lot of things I probably repeat throughout and across stories, but I don't think you can really avoid that. Try thinking of it as your "style" rather than a bad thing.

 

[BlackShanglan]

Or just horny.

Also a possibility

Originally posted by Evil Alpaca
I have a lot of things I probably repeat throughout and across stories, but I don't think you can really avoid that. Try thinking of it as your "style" rather than a bad thing. [/B]

Well ... as long as I don't go all Joseph Conrad with the "indescribable" and "incomprehensible" and "unutterable" business. If it's so damned unutterable, what're you doing uttering?

Shanglan

 

[carsonshepherd]

Well ... as long as I don't go all Joseph Conrad with the "indescribable" and "incomprehensible" and "unutterable" business. If it's so damned unutterable, what're you doing uttering?

Shanglan

Repeating themes as well as words, anyone? I know Shang enjoys master/servant relations; my characters usually have physical imperfections like scars, and tattoos (probably because I have major ones of both myself).

 

[cantdog]

I find myself using the phrases "All the sudden" and "For a moment" way too much. Stop it! Stop it!

Is it "all the sudden" or "all of a sudden"? Is that a regional thing?

Yep. "All the sudden" is the less common, worldwide. "All of a sudden" is standard usage.

 

[cantdog]

Try "abruptly" and the words you get looking "abruptly" up in a thesaurus, with an eye to variety.

 

[BlackShanglan]

Repeating themes as well as words, anyone? I know Shang enjoys master/servant relations; my characters usually have physical imperfections like scars, and tattoos (probably because I have major ones of both myself).

Indeed. Can't get away from the damned things. That and the nonhuman thing, but I've finished fewer of those so it's not yet obvious in Lit.

Shanglan

 

[Quiet_Cool]

Bloody hell! I keep using the phrase 'the last thing she/he wanted to do was...' in this story. I can't seem to stop!

Sorry, no point to this thread. Just a general "Arrrrggghhh!"

The Earl

I use the same phrases (and often similar ideas) in many different stories. Seems like mostly that's just style. but to use it repeatedly in one story... Gets repetitive.
I know you didn't ask advice, but I'd finish it however it comes out and change some fo them in the re-write instead of clamping down on your brain and risking "the flow" as I put it down the first time.

Q_C

 

[rgraham666]

His asshole. The last thing that goes through a bug's mind when he hits a windshield.

It was the first thing that came to mind when I saw the thread title.

 

[Quiet_Cool]

His asshole. The last thing that goes through a bug's mind when he hits a windshield.

It was the first thing that came to mind when I saw the thread title.

I mistook it for the "if you had one day to live" (or however it was written) thread that Sub Joe (?) started.

Q_C

 

[gauchecritic]

I was looking through one of my first attempts here on Lit. and noticed for the first time that I'd used the word floccinocinhilipillification 6 times... in the same sentence.