the hot night

[jaacckk_80]

The evening night air was warm, I walk into the apartment only to
see you standing on the balcony wearing a shear black gown which
was moving gently in the night breeze. Hearing me behind you you
turn around watching me as I gaze upon you lovely body, your
nipples hardened by the wind blowing across your breasts. Glancing
down at my crotch you notice the slight bulge in my pants. You
approach me, our arms embracing each other we begin to kiss,
working our tongues into each others mouths. My hands placed on
your ass, gently squeezing the firm cheeks as I pull you tighter
against me, my cock pulsation against your pussy as we kiss. I feel
your hand as its place on my manhood and you start rubbing up and
down, pausing for a moment to squeezing the head with your finger.
Spreading your legs apart slightly I place a hand on your mound,
massaging your pussy, soft moans are begining to leave you mouth,
vibrating on my tongue. I work a finger between your pussy lips
lubricating it with your juices, sliding upward to rub you clit.
Moving my finger up and down then in circular motion, as you hips
start to move back and forth trying to fuck my finger. I meet your
bodies request and begin sliding my finger in and out of your
pussy, working it until I've penetrated your vagina all the way to
my hand. Slowly I begin finger fucking you, your hand tightens on
my cock squeezing it firmly. Reaching up to my waist you unfasten
my pants letting them fall to the floor, not wearing shorts, my
cock jumps out towards you. Taking me in your hand you start to
masturbate me, sliding your hand from the head to the base of my
cock.
Taking my free hand, I untie your gown, if floats gently to the
ground. Your nipples are standing erect and hard as I place my hand
on one and begin fondling it. Massaging your tit as I gently pinch
the nipple causing you to make a soft grunting noise. Faster and
faster I finger your pussy, shoving it deep inside you feeling the
hot swollen walls of your vagina. Your body start trembling, your
hips moving to the rythm of my finger. Your knees buckle slightly
as your legs close on my hand, you groan loudly as your body
releases its orgasm, the juices flow down my finger onto my hand,
our lips pressing tightly together as we kiss.
As you regain composure, I lead you the the lounger, as you lay
down. Spreading your legs apart I kneel down placing my mouth on
your mound, my tongue slides between your pussy lips, licking your
clit, up and down then in circular motion. My tongue lashes at your
clit, your hips thrusting upward into my face. My eyes glance up at
you to find you cupping your tits as you squeeze them together and
roll the nipples between your fingers. I suck hard on your clit
gently pulling outward, my tongue licking faster, pressing against
you. You grab the back of my head, pulling me into your pussy, you
begin to cry out, gasping for air as the taste of your cum starts
flowing between your lips onto my tongue, the orgasm driving you
wild.
I climb between your legs, grasping my throbbing cock I place the
head to your soaked pussy. Gently I start pushing in and out, work
my cock until you've consumed every inch of me. Slowly I withdraw
until the head is almost out then slide back inside you. We fuck
nice and slow, your pussy tightening around me every time I push
inward, drive my cock deep into you, feel the great sensation of
heat deep inside. I place my mouth on one tit, kiss at first then
sucking and nibbling at the nipple, your breathing getting heavier
and heavier. My pace of fuck you becomes quicker, your hips
thrusting upward with my down stroke, fucking you faster and
harder. You warp your legs around my ass, using them to pull me in
to you. You moans turn to loud groans as I fuck you harder. You
hips begin to fuck my cock faster, I feel your pussy squeezing my
cock harder. Suddenly you cry out your hips push up, your legs
pulling my ass to you. I feel your orgasm burst onto my cock, the
warm sensation causes my cock to swell as I explode my cum deep
inside your pussy. We pause for a moment, your pussy milking my
cock for every drop it can get from me...
As we relax, we begin to slowly fuck again, mixing our cum together
in your pussy. We kiss passionately, our tongues swirling each
others, as the cum starts to seep from your pussy, running down the
crack of your lovely ass.......

 

[wanderwonder]

Because I'm bored

I'll tell you flat out that what you've written is nothing new. Read it before and will read it again. If you're going for a quick j/o story you've written what will appeal to plenty of people in terms of the crude vocabulary. That can actually work in this case. Still, your sentences are too long and you have some serious punctuation issues.

I read your other post as well because the title of the post was in the infinitive tense. After reading through both posts I strongly advice proofreading on your own and getting an editor. The folk around here who edit well may be harsh, but it'll help you improve your writing. If you're writing in English you need to sound as native as possible, otherwise people will dismiss your story as soon as they run across those jumbled sentences. You're close, but not there yet.

 

[_Lynn_]

I didn't read a single word. My eyes couldn't handle it.

Use normal font in your posts, not larger, and don't put it in bold.

Leave a line between paragraphs.

 

[wickedredhead]

Hello Jaacckk. The font is in need of a change, advice above should help. As for the writing, you're telling. Give more details of appearance, Watch your word use, repeats you can change to improve the flow. Also you may want to add a plot / point to the story. Just sex is fine but it has to be different. This is mundane compared to the stories created now a days.

Best of luck,
WR