The Author series or Novellla

[SavannahMann]

OK, I've been reworking some of the sections, trying to make it better before posting. Part's one was posted, parts two and three are now posted, and I've got part four (the first with sex other than the opening scene) in progress. Five is awaiting the successful post of four. I'm doing them in order, would hate to try and post two sections at once, and fine the first pending is rejected, while the second pending is accepted.

If you like any of it, hate any of it, I'm happy and sad respectively. LOL.

EDIT: I stupidly hit the post button before I mentioned the private responses that I've been getting so far.

No, I don't see Jennifer turning into a generic cum slut, or a sex slave to her family. I don't have an issue with Taboo type work, I can read it no problem, I just don't feel this story going that way. Part six ends with a threeway MFF.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

You might want to post a link.

 

[SavannahMann]

Sorry I didn't mention that.

The links are in my sig line. Each part is linked, and I hope you like them.

In case you don't have your sig lines enabled. Part two Discovery http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=323413

Part 3 Searching the Soul http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=324371

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Some of us have the signatures disabled, me being one of them.

 

[sr71plt]

I've gone to not submitting a subsequent part at all until the one before it posts, because I've had a couple of parts posted out of order even though I spaced the submissions at least two days apart and in proper order.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

I just read Chapter 2. Again I must preface my comments by saying that I don't subscribe to the BDSM lifestyle or its beliefs.

As in your first story, you start too many paragraphs with the same word, Jennifer.

Overall, I just didn't find the story very interesting. The first part just seemed to drag. Normally, you would have lost me after about the fourth paragraph. After opening the door the story seemed to rush too much. Again, not believable.

Chapter 2 wasn't enough to make me want to read Chapter 3.

 

[SavannahMann]

I appreciate the comments

I really do appreciate them. I understand that lifestyles are often individual. Darkside finds no appeal in the BDSM lifestyle, and I completely respect his choices, because that is what life is about.

Thanks for your comments all of them are really gratefully accepted.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

I really do appreciate them. I understand that lifestyles are often individual. Darkside finds no appeal in the BDSM lifestyle, and I completely respect his choices, because that is what life is about.

Thanks for your comments all of them are really gratefully accepted.

I would highly encourage you to enlist the support of a good editor. Your writing does show some promise.