Kip, what on God's green earth were you thinking when you wrote this story? Is this a joke? We already have one of the most violent rape stories on this site featuring a "big black man." Now, you have chosen to push the envelope by writing a story featuring a bunch of African tribesmen with oversized penises whose only purpose in life is to "fuckee, fuckee" with white women. You've chosen, by your imagery in this story, to imply that black women in tribal Africa all walk around topless. I'm sure you debated over whether to have them know any of the English language in this story. I am disappointed with your effort this time, Kip. I've read some of your other work, and none of it has reflected the ignorance apparant in this story. If this is your fantasy, that is a terrible shame. The idea itself-- getting lost on a safari, and being seduced by a group of African residents-- is far fetched, but a writer with your skills should have been able to make it work without incorporating these anachronistic, stereotypical, and inaccurate themes that downplay what otherwise could have been a good story.
Try again, Kip. There may still be hope for you.
[This message has been edited by Cairo (edited 11-06-1999).]
Try again, Kip. There may still be hope for you.
[This message has been edited by Cairo (edited 11-06-1999).]