That's My Poetry

[Softlead]

I cry, I laugh, I groan, I sing --
that's my poetry
I fear, I stammer, I struggle --
that's my poetry
I do not think
but feel --
and that's my poetry.

I am not a rope that ties down ideas
nor am I a vat of emotions
I am not thin in contours
nor am I fat in meaning
god, the sun, and love
-- these spherical systems --
could not be further away

my poetry is direct
it is more like time than like life
my poetry has direction
it is more like the wind than time

do you know the wind's biography?
the wind eats fantasies
the wind has no home
doors and windows are always built
so it can escape

the wind was naturally born of fire
when I close my eyes
I see a streak of flame
but that fire is too remote

my poetry however is
no bouquet delicated to eternity
it is a pale steel rod
among the pliant stalks
that sway in life's flowerbed
aimed quietly at you
my poetry is negation.

uh-oh, I got careless and said "You"
it's a bad habit of mine
it's not good to be so vague about someone's name
I am a hunter but
my shooting is masturbation for me
it is my profession to kill

locating, chasing, and making decisions
a hunter pursues himself
together with his game
four eyes confront each other
and call each other "you"

my word goes straight to you
my word does not descend like a parachute
floating down through death

my poems are not hymns
my poetry is question and answer
my poetry is not music rising beautifully through the air
my poetry is a storm that soon will swirl and rage

a gentle song of love
a rugged wind that carries fire
my prairie where the hunter and his game
frantically mate with each other
o cloud that rises
o radiant charmed

but wait that holy celestrial nimbus--
that in not my poetry, after all.

Softlead

 

[Rybka]

Rather interesting Softlead.
You explain your poetry with some interesting imagery, but I have one question. I am not certain if you are being creative or have missed a mistake when I read something like "no bouquet delicated to eternity". I am seriously confused. Did you mean to create a new verb or did you mean "delegated"?

Regards, Rybka

PS: I have never taught English.

 

[Angeline]

Rather interesting Softlead.
You explain your poetry with some interesting imagery, but I have one question. I am not certain if you are being creative or have missed a mistake when I read something like "no bouquet delicated to eternity". I am seriously confused. Did you mean to create a new verb or did you mean "delegated"?

Regards, Rybka

PS: I have never taught English.

I think "dedicated." It's a good one, Softlead--and you make your point so well that I'm moved to tell you to fix the darn typos and try to publish it!

And Rybby, you could have.

 

[Rybka]

I think "dedicated." It's a good one, Softlead--and you make your point so well that I'm moved to tell you to fix the darn typos and try to publish it!

And Rybby, you could have.

Thank you for that Angeline (I think).

Mine was a serious question because "bouquet delicated" is such an appropriate creation. If "delicate" has not be used as a verb before than perhaps it should be now. I only queried Softlead because her approach to language structure can make it difficult at times to determine the poet's intentions.

Regards, Rybka

 

[Softlead]

Sorry for the typos, I just type what i feel then move on... sorry. I'm looking for a good English Teacher, who can teach me how to spell. A very strict English teacher, maybe someone who will ~s p a n k~ me if i misspell or is it mispell?

Softlead

PS "no bouquet delicated to eternity" is correct.
I not only spell words the way i want to spell them but i also make up words too as long as they fit. People make up words everyday. It's the American way or else we wouldn't have ANY words.

 

[Icingsugar]

I am not certain if you are being creative or have missed a mistake when I read something like "no bouquet delicated to eternity". I am seriously confused. Did you mean to create a new verb or did you mean "delegated"?

I thought "delicated" was just delicious, and I hope that's exactly what was intended.

/Ice - 1 and ½ hour left of the year. At home and bored.

 

[HomerPindar]

Sorry for the typos, I just type what i feel then move on... sorry.

Either take the time to care, or don't apologize. The way you have it now it appears that are sorry you don't care, which I rather doubt.

I'm looking for a good English Teacher, who can teach me how to spell. A very strict English teacher, maybe someone who will ~s p a n k~ me if i misspell or is it mispell?

An odd request seeing how harshly you've responded to critiques, but ask and perhaps you'll recieve. Then again, careful what you ask for.

Softlead

PS "no bouquet delicated to eternity" is correct.
I not only spell words the way i want to spell them but i also make up words too as long as they fit. People make up words everyday. It's the American way or else we wouldn't have ANY words.

Of course, it's the "American way" that really jabbed me here. Sorry, but as we are discussing English we should attribute it to the English imperialism that led them to conquer the languages around the world long before us "Americans" (a term as applicable to Chilians and Brazlians as it is to Canadians, no?) were a force to be delt with. I loath the taking up of nationalist pride to excuse an act, or in this case, lack of an act (editing).

You might consider skill along with your talent, it's the difference between a diamond and a diamond in the rough.

HomerPindar