Tense, has ruined my orgasm.

[johonnaN]

Howdy

I have written my first story in first person. but after reading everything here that i could possibly find. story circle and story discussion, i can see where i have probably gone wrong.

The problem is I am now in information overload and am quite confuzzled, about it all.

Does anyone know of a consice article or something to help me wrap my wee little brain around the subject!



JN

 

[Weird Harold]

...i can see where i have probably gone wrong.

The problem is I am now in information overload and am quite confuzzled, about it all.

Approximately where have you gone wrong? First person is a Point of View rather than a "tense." If you can narrow down where your problem lies, perhaps a concise article on tht aspect of writing would help.

I suspect that your problem with a "ruined orgasm" is a problem with Passive Voice -- Both of the following sites have a good explanation of passive voice and why it should be avoided:

http://www.tc.cc.va.us/writcent/

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/

The Trinity College link article on passive voice is shorter and more concise, but I think the one at Purdue explains things better. It includes the statement, "... overuse of passive voice throughout an essay can make your essay seem flat and uninteresting."