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I have found no set standard for differentiating mental communication.
I am getting into chapters that have mental communication. I am using the following standards; fantasy so mental communication with a person vs an object are slightly different.
~~~Eldar...Say What?
~~~Annette...The sky is falling can you not feel it?
With an item
~~~Eldar...Can you fly around the room on your own?
~~~[No. I do not have that power.]
The discussion I am having with an editor on this is the use of '...' After the name. They want me to switch it to colons because '...' represents an incomplete thought. My thinking is '...' Is perfect because it shows the transition from subconscious thought to conscious thought. The mental activity the reader cannot see vs what is being sent.
I am using [comment] for items as it is like talking to a computer, they just spit out the answer with no real underlying thought once the item has accepted the owner. This issue has not been brought up by the editor.
The change the editor is proposing is changing the '...' to ':::' and I prefer the '...'
I am getting into chapters that have mental communication. I am using the following standards; fantasy so mental communication with a person vs an object are slightly different.
~~~Eldar...Say What?
~~~Annette...The sky is falling can you not feel it?
With an item
~~~Eldar...Can you fly around the room on your own?
~~~[No. I do not have that power.]
The discussion I am having with an editor on this is the use of '...' After the name. They want me to switch it to colons because '...' represents an incomplete thought. My thinking is '...' Is perfect because it shows the transition from subconscious thought to conscious thought. The mental activity the reader cannot see vs what is being sent.
I am using [comment] for items as it is like talking to a computer, they just spit out the answer with no real underlying thought once the item has accepted the owner. This issue has not been brought up by the editor.
The change the editor is proposing is changing the '...' to ':::' and I prefer the '...'
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