Taking it out.Putting it in....

[English Lady]

Have you ever tried extracting the sex from one of your erotic stories? I have and I found it pretty difficault.


I write for an online opinions site and after writing an opinion about my erotica/porn writing I was asked to write a story for the accompanying online magazine.


So I thought it would be easier to adapt one of my stories (and quicker too) than to write a whole new one.

Well I took a story that I thought was pretty low on explicit sex (not what you see,what you feel) and began the adaptation process.


I didn't realise how much sex was wound into the whole story and plot line until I had to get rid of all naughty words and explicit sex stuff!

I've done it,but it took alot more rewriting thanI anticipated that it would and i do not think the finished article is anywhere near as good as the original.

Anyway,has anyone else de-sexed a story for any reason?


Do you think loosing the explicit sex scenes from your stories would make that much of a difference?


I'd love to hear others thoughts on this subject

 

[raphy]

I guess it depends why it was written.. You could write a story like you'd shoot a movie - With the sex scenes separate so you could 'fade to black' if you were showing it on network TV, and leave them in if you were after that X-rated certificate.

 

[English Lady]

insertible sex scenes


*giggles at the mental image*


You'd better make sure they got put back in the right places though!!!

 

[oggbashan]

Yes

I took my National Nude Day story "Bastille Day", removed the sex, cut its length and submitted it for a local competition.

It has been shortlisted. Result will be revealed tomorrow afternoon.

Removing the sex was so easy to do that I started a thread on it. It demonstrated to me at least that the sex in my stories was not always essential. That was depressing.

Since then I have tried to split my writing between Literotica where I am now trying to make the sex an important and essential part of the stories, and stories without overt sex for my creative writing class. Unfortunately I cannot avoid writing about the interaction between men and women. Whether the sex is explicit or not the stories almost always have a sexual edge to them.

The writing exercises for the creative writing course are causing me real problems. Sex keeps rearing its head so I have to abandon that draft and start another. The first week I had four abandoned drafts before I managed to complete my homework.

I am the only male in the class. Even the stories I do complete are producing interesting reactions from the other class members. I think they have realised that I, in their opinions, am a dirty-minded old man.

Og

 

[raphy]

Re: Yes

I, in their opinions, am a dirty-minded old man.

Og

Yay Og!

 

[English Lady]

I think i'd have a nightmare of a time writing a non-sexual story!
I found it difficault enough to take out explicit sex from a story..I have however left in the nipple bits*L*

 

[Guest]

I have however left in the nipple bits*L*

Good on you!

Anyway, in my opinion, a story isn't worth diddly-squat without a few flashes of bare nipple.

Lou, grinning.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Re: Yes

The writing exercises for the creative writing course are causing me real problems. Sex keeps rearing its head so I have to abandon that draft and start another. The first week I had four abandoned drafts before I managed to complete my homework.

So when you want to write about it you don't, and when you don't want to write about it you do? *L* I think we've found your problem: you're a contrarian.

I remember Og's thread about the story with the modular sex scene that could just be excised without bothering the rest of the story, and I thought about that a lot. To me, that's not good. It means that the sex is essentially gratuitous and not integral to the story.

Everything I've posted here is about sex; sex is the theme of the story, so in that sense no, I couldn't elimate the sex from the story.

What I could do, in some stories at least, would be to make the sex less explicit and pornographic, but then it would be a pretty weak story.

---dr.M.

 

[English Lady]

@tatelou...well exactly..who could take offence at a few flashes of nipple huh?



"What I could do, in some stories at least, would be to make the sex less explicit and pornographic, but then it would be a pretty weak story."

Dr M..that is what I have done and i think it makes the tale pretty insipid....but it works...it's not to my 100% liking but it does still work. I deleted alot. I didn't realise the sheer volume of cocks,cunts and fucks i use till I had to take them all out!

 

[Guest]

@tatelou...well exactly..who could take offence at a few flashes of nipple huh?

I didn't realise the sheer volume of cocks,cunts and fucks i use till I had to take them all out!

As the actress said to the bishop.

Oooer! Room for one more?

Lou, getting too silly now.

 

[oggbashan]

I have to agree with Dr M. Disposable sex is not good either in stories or in real life.

Now I know that I have a problem I'm working at it.

I hope that my writing will improve as erotica and also my non-erotic stories will gain.

I know that I have difficulty in writing my sex scenes but I can be erotic without being explicit. Sometimes the plot detracts from the sex.

This is one of the things to appreciate about Literotica and the AH; we learn from each other even if our problems are not the same.

Og

 

[English Lady]

you're very right Ogg...we all have problems in our writing and one of the good things about the AH is it helps us realise these problems and to do something about them!

 

[English Lady]

you're very right Ogg...we all have problems in our writing and one of the good things about the AH is it helps us realise these problems and to do something about them!

 

[Colleen Thomas]

I have never tried to de-sex one of my stories. I can think of a few off hand where it would be possible, but a few where I would be left with practically zilch.

As much as I like to develop characters and plotlines most of that development is driving the story towards the sex scenes. I think it would be far easier to add sex to my non erotic works than it would be to delete sex from my erotic ones.

-Colly

 

[cahab]

Re: Yes

Whether the sex is explicit or not the stories almost always have a sexual edge to them.

Well, of course they do. Everything is about sex, ultimately, if it's about people. Didn't you ever read any Freud?

 

[oggbashan]

Re: Re: Yes

[BDidn't you ever read any Freud? [/B]

Freud's too Jung for me.

Og

 

[English Lady]

*wondering how long Og's been waiting to use that line*



Colleen..I think most of my stories would collapse without the sex scenes,alot of them are nothing but sex! I think you are right it must be easier to add erotic scenes to a non erotic story than vice versa. Is that how the add gratuitous sex to movies I wonder?

 

[MathGirl]

Put it out ... Let it in ... Put it out... let .......

I do that several times a day with my cat.
MG
Ps. Og, You should be ashamed of yourself.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Well, since I write only F/F I suppose it's a little harder to handle the romantic scenes in mine Some of my stories would do just fine with a little of the torn bodice kissy-woo instead of the explicit scens, but I think it would kill others.

On the other hand, our erotic works are meant to be erotic, and thus the focus is usually on getting to the "good parts". My regular stories are focused elsewhere, but as Lou noted a few flashes of bare nipple improve any story

-Colly

 

[Icingsugar]

Og, Og, Og...

Anyway, I'm just in the middle of toning down the sex and adding more character development and background story to a Lit story. It's going remarkably well.

That probably means that there wasn't enough of a sex theme to begin with. Not that I give a toss.

 

[gauchecritic]

I deleted alot. I didn't realise the sheer volume of cocks,cunts and fucks i use till I had to take them all out! [/B]

Well English I hope you did a bit more re-writing because "I slid my 7" .... up her tight .... and ...... the .... off her" won't fool anyone.

Gauche

 

[English Lady]

*LMAO*

thanks gauche! I deleted paragraph after paragraph actually...it was painful!!!

 

[oggbashan]

Re: Yes

Duplicate post - which didn't appear until a long time after I had posted it.

Og

 

[oggbashan]

Result

I took my National Nude Day story "Bastille Day", removed the sex, cut its length and submitted it for a local competition.

It has been shortlisted. Result will be revealed tomorrow afternoon.

Result: Og came third. The two others were well written but I think the judge chose mine because she liked the humour. She thought it had been written by an American.

I don't think my writing is remotely American.

Og

 

[Guest]

Re: Result

I don't think my writing is remotely American.

Og

No, neither do I. Congrats on third place, though, that's brilliant!

Lou