Sweet SouthernBelle from Tex..I need feedback so I can improve my exotic writing!

[MichelleMyBelle]

Hello there all you fantastic writers and readers! My name is Michelle, I'm a 29 yr old female from Texas. I have so much passion that it hurts! You can read my profile under username michellemybelle. I would love for you to post a public comment on the story. I know that I have much to improve, but with so many wonderful readers and writers like you, I just know that you all will inspire me! Thanks to all!!!
MichelleMyBelle ; )
link to story:
http://english.literotica.com/stori...y.php?id=247244

 

[Guest]

Hello there all you fantastic writers and readers! My name is Michelle, I'm a 29 yr old female from Texas. I have so much passion that it hurts! You can read my profile under username michellemybelle. I would love for you to post a public comment on the story. I know that I have much to improve, but with so many wonderful readers and writers like you, I just know that you all will inspire me! Thanks to all!!!
MichelleMyBelle ; )
link to story:
http://english.literotica.com/stori...y.php?id=247244

Just curious, the link you provided takes one absolutely no where. You might want to check it. Good luck with writing.

 

[MichelleMyBelle]

About the wrong link:

Thank you so much! What would I do without all you? LOL ; )
Try this link...maybe it will work now.

http://english.literotica.com/stori...y.php?id=247244

Let me know! Thanks, Michelle

 

[MichelleMyBelle]

It still don't work! Hold on... let me work on it again

Still don't work!! Hold on, let me work on it again... ; )
Thanks for your time.
Michelle

 

[MichelleMyBelle]

Try this link...

This one may work now... sorry for all the trouble. Thanks for your time,
Michelle ; )

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=247244