Susan one to three

[TabooTeller]

This is a comment about Susan parts one through three by K.K.
I am posting a link only to part one since I am not sure about getting an dposting the othe rtow adderesses.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=***71

Just read “Susan “ for the first time. That story got to me. I was going to work on a couple literotica stories of mine own but I am too keyed up after reading that story. I know what got me. It was Susan having sex with that handsome guy. I know wives do that type of thing in KK’s stories but what got me was the timing of it in this story. It caught me by surprise. I should have been expecting it but it looked like they were going to get through this without that happening. Esp. since I had read the ending already. I guess I was too busy relating to and getting emotionally involved with the Main Character to realize what was going to happen. They were separated but not even headed toward divorce at that time. And she didn’t even fight the seduction that hard. This story I will not be reading again even though I have and probably will read others by him over.
Of course then again that was probably a good piece of story telling. A touch of the ironic. He started this by making it look like she had done that already and by doing so he made it really happen. So you could say he brought it on himself even through the way KK set it up he had to do something, for she would have done at sooner or later.
I am sure KK would love this type of response since he wants people t o get emotional involved with his characters, or I assume so since he likes to write such type of stories. I may be the only one to have such a response around here even though I am surprised by my strong reaction. Its not the first time it has happened while relating to a story character, I mean not just those written by KK or those type on Liteertica, but as I said I wasn’t expecting it as I wasn’t expecting her to actually do that. I thought he would see her resist the temptation and he would see she still wants to be married to him after all and that she could resist sexual temptations. I almost want to say Dang blast you why did you have to put that in? Or bang away at the keyboard shelf saying why did you do that????
I will ask him that by the way since I will be sending him a copy of this. I hope by the time I get this posted I will be calm enough to work.
By the way I found one critisism of KK I should have mentioned last note. He makes it hard to find the name of the Main Character at times, such as in this story.

 

[TabooTeller]

I think I have figured out why that one scene in this story which I mentioned last time, effected me so emotionally, not that there are lots of people curious about but I wanted to express myself and there are some bonifide criticisms mixed in.
First I think I empathizing too much with the Main Character. We are a bit alike. (pardon me for getting a little personal here but then again I don't think I am getting as personal as it may seem) I believe I would have acted, felt and thought much like he did. That probably is a compliment to KK and I realized that I am most probably not alone in feeling that way. However my wife also has some characteristics of his wife. I said some, we don't drink so I would not have to worry about her acting with Bob as his wife did. Even if we did drink I wouldn't have to be concerned about that, however there has been periods of time when it has been difficult living with my wife. He ugly side came out more during those times, Not as bad as the MC's wife but still enough to empathize with him.
Second is that this scene of his wife having sex with the handsome guy was not needed. This is the bonifide criticism. He added that perhaps just because he wanted to add in something that is his other stories of this type. In all those other stories it is a basic part of the plot that the wife has sex with others. Nothing wrong with that it helps to make the story what it is. This one is different. As I said it is not needed and was added other then to make the plot. In otherwords what comes after the sex with the handsome guy would still have been the same even if there had been no sex.
I have come up with two alternative scenes that could fit better, KK could probably come up with even more and better ones. I doubt KK would be interested in writing an alliterative story even though I have seen a couple stories on Liteeritica which did have two versions. One I think even had two or more alternatives.
My first thought was that he still spied on his wife but she would not let the guy go further then sucking on her breasts. She still loved her husband and since been though separated no divorce proceedings had been started it would be too much like cheating. If he found out he would still be hurt. The guy understands and leaves but he still asks her out again. As they go to the front door they kiss a long kiss and he squeezes her breasts which she allows while they are kissing. When they are done she pulls back out of his hand. The MC realizes that if that relationship continues she will have sex with the guy. Maybe not next month maybe even after their divorce but she will. And the guy realizes it also.
If KK insists that the MC feel those feelings of pain etc there is scene two. Everything goes the same as it did in the original intill the handsome guy actually penetrates her. As soon as he pushes in she stops and asks him to pull out. She is sorry but can't go though with it. She thought she could but she still loves her husband too much, its still too much like betraying him. He of course argues but she finally promises him a blow job if he pulls out. He agrees and while she is ucking he makes a comment about how she can blow him but not allow him to fuck her. She says she is only doing it because its her fault he is so aroused and this is a one time thing. He says he understands. Afterwards he surprises her and her husband by asking her out again. She agrees and during that date the MC spies on her again. When he gone though she throws a tantrum. Calls her husbands name, without realizing he is there, and screams "why did you put me in this position? Every thing was going fine in our lives and you had to mess it up by moving out." That anger is why she doesn't call for a while. She cries and he wants nothing more then to comfort her but doesn't dare. For more then one reason. During the next date all they do is talk, dance and drink wine. But as the date leaves they kiss and he squeezes her breast. She allows it during the kiss but pulls back after the kiss and gives him a stern look. But her husband realizes that by her actions and tone of voice she will have sex, with no stopping, with her date if the relationship continues. It maybe after the divorce but it will happen.
Both of the scenes shows him that she does love him and can resist sexual temptations and perhaps even that she has grown to the point of realizes she can hurt him badly. The second scene and the first one to a lesser extent also gives him some emotional grief to have to bare. They also add to the plot by showing her love for him, that she can grow a couple other things along those lines I don't recall right now.
Yes, to anyone who has read this far, this is a pipedream but I felt the need to express myself. I can hear what some may say. "Chill out stop wasting your time, this is a just a story" or "something about sex is sex and this is liteerotica after all" but so be it. A copy will be sent to KK.