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I posted this poem in the main forum a week ago but it was rejected with the following explanation. I don't understand it. Usually I post all my poems with tags and arrows between them which to me represent hierarchical degrees important for longer constructions, and they get accepted. Something changed, does anyone know?
thanks for any help.
SOUTHALL
Saturday
18/4/2020
MYTHOLOGY >> CELTIC >> ISOLDE
BRANGAINE
Brangaine, a fanciful young maid,
egger and lusting to be laid,
knew of love potion number nine,
watching her mistress in full sway,
she used this trick in a shrewd way,
Isolde and Tristan to entwine:
"Isolde must not remain chaste,
marrying to Mark seems such a waste,
Tristan must do her here and now,
a virgin-not tomorrow night,
Mark will find out and in his spite
will scold her compromised vow.
Therefore I’ll give them this love potion,
now that this ship is still in motion,
and drive them to eternal lust,
but more than that, I'll deputise
for her, with Mark between my thighs,
tomorrow night I'll have my blast!"
The night was dark, the sailors sleeping,
no one took notice of her creeping,
a single man was in the stern,
the potion mixed into the chalice,
she gave to them without malice,
saying, "drink some wine for a good turn!"
*****
Simple but effective this design,
they drunk love potion number nine,
and they stood by the gunwale,
without a word her skirt was raised,
touching his dick she was all crazed,
her first cognition of a male.
He pierced her in an upwards thrusting,
her legs wide open re-adjusting,
she grabbed his bum and pulled him in,
her broken maidenhead still bleeding,
did not impede her joyful speeding,
he matched her pace with a broad grin.
So up and down this vessel sailed,
upon his pecker deep impaled,
till she was flooded with his cum,
chortling she muttered, "What a quickie!
But now let's do something more tricky,
just put me down and whack my bum".
_________________________________________________________
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thanks for any help.
SOUTHALL
Saturday
18/4/2020
MYTHOLOGY >> CELTIC >> ISOLDE
BRANGAINE
Brangaine, a fanciful young maid,
egger and lusting to be laid,
knew of love potion number nine,
watching her mistress in full sway,
she used this trick in a shrewd way,
Isolde and Tristan to entwine:
"Isolde must not remain chaste,
marrying to Mark seems such a waste,
Tristan must do her here and now,
a virgin-not tomorrow night,
Mark will find out and in his spite
will scold her compromised vow.
Therefore I’ll give them this love potion,
now that this ship is still in motion,
and drive them to eternal lust,
but more than that, I'll deputise
for her, with Mark between my thighs,
tomorrow night I'll have my blast!"
The night was dark, the sailors sleeping,
no one took notice of her creeping,
a single man was in the stern,
the potion mixed into the chalice,
she gave to them without malice,
saying, "drink some wine for a good turn!"
*****
Simple but effective this design,
they drunk love potion number nine,
and they stood by the gunwale,
without a word her skirt was raised,
touching his dick she was all crazed,
her first cognition of a male.
He pierced her in an upwards thrusting,
her legs wide open re-adjusting,
she grabbed his bum and pulled him in,
her broken maidenhead still bleeding,
did not impede her joyful speeding,
he matched her pace with a broad grin.
So up and down this vessel sailed,
upon his pecker deep impaled,
till she was flooded with his cum,
chortling she muttered, "What a quickie!
But now let's do something more tricky,
just put me down and whack my bum".
_________________________________________________________
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Dear Writer,
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• Please do not use the characters < or > in your text unless you are using HTML. These characters are reserved by HTML--which runs the web pages--and neither they or anything between them will appear in the posted story. If you must have these characters in your story, then replace every "<" with "<" (without the quotes) and ">" with ">" (also without the quotes).
Please feel free to re-submit the story after a Volunteer Editor has examined it, or after you've made revisions. You can find a list of Volunteer Editors here.
Please consult our Writer's Resources section and make sure you read our submission guidelines:
If you have any questions on these, please let us know.
Thanks for your time, and look forward to reading you again!
Laurel & Manu
Literotica.Com