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[ShamelessFlirt]

OK, this is more of a curosity to me than anything.

What's your favorite use of terminology when writing a story? Do you prefer Clinical or crude?

Do you feel one conveys a particular mood over the other?

Do you think it takes more talent to use clinical over crude?

 

[lovetoread]

I cant vote...I would choose other.

I prefer to convey or read about sensations than the hard stuff.

For example:

"Feeling him slide slowly into me..."

Is what I like.

Rather than-

"His dick rammed my pussy."

Not that I think crude is bad. Love some of it,just dont want it to be the whole story.

But your choice of clinical. Do you mean like using the proper words to describe things,instead of street terms?

 

[ShamelessFlirt]

Should have said ...

Lovetoread,

I understand what you mean, but I guess I could have said when describing a scene involving body parts.


When I say clinical, I mean textbook.

I guess crude is too general.

If you wanted to be more specific, expound on him sliding into you. How would you describe your reaction? Would your pussy convulse? Or I guess from your response, you would go with "he fit into me as a hand would a glove"?

Or the next possible sensation, his testicals touching your ass, or his balls, or his heavy sacs? Or would you leave that out to keep the tone more sensual?

Am I clear yet? ...lol

 

[lovetoread]

Clear as...well that wall next to me.

Or the next possible sensation, his testicals touching your ass, or his balls, or his heavy sacs? Or would you leave that out to keep the tone more sensual?

I understand what you mean,and yes I would use those words with the sensations.

 

[ShamelessFlirt]

there's a window on that wall

Clear as...well that wall next to me.





I understand what you mean,and yes I would use those words with the sensations.

I guess what I was getting at, in my stories (always good to speak from experience) I am descriptive in the way you mentioned. Describing sensations without getting graphical. Invariably, I end up expounding on the thought and when it comes time to describe what's happening in more detial I find it unavoidable not to include a body part. When I do, I hear echos of things I've read, and I'm not always sure if I want to describe the scene in a way that sometimes feels "outdated".

"He explored the folds of her sex" can seem like it came from a bad romance novel. Terms like "her man in the boat" seem unwieldy. Comming out and saying "his fingers traced her labia" works for me. But if I want to describe penetration I guess I don't think it's detailed enough to say "he penetrated her with his finger" because he could be sticking it up her butt ...lol

Need windex for that window??

 

[lovetoread]

Nope dont need any windex unless you are coming over to do my windows...

The need to explain where you are is needed,but it should also show what you feel. Okay let me say phrases that are other than the "Man that was good" "God it was hot" types.

BTW-I have read your writing and enjoyed it very much.

 

[REDWAVE]

More options!

I'd be happy to do your windows anytime, lovetoread.


I voted for "crude," but I really think there should be more options. Some other ways of describing sex I can think of are romantic, and sensuous. I would also like a category for "Other." I think a clinical description of sex would be quite boring, although I suppose it could be used for humerous effect-- i.e., "The male inserted his penis within the vaginal orifice and proceeded with a series of rapid thrusting movements, accompanied by grinding of the hips and the production of rather primal-sounding vocalisms by the female subject of said penetration."