Story I'm wiritng stuck need help...

[Ldy_Sea]

I already wrote and uploadeed the first two chapters of a CFNM story I'm writing.

The Main Characters are
Tom Kelley
a 14 month veteran of the local PD, and a US Navy Sailor discharged during a downsizing. He has a BA in criminal Justice. He is just learning about his enjoyment of being nude in semi public places.

April
a 22 year old gorgeous red headed bartender who has a thing for voyuerism. Works at a bar close to the college. All the college guys want her, but she likes older men.

Cindy
sexy petite (5'0" 95 lbs) blond undergrad at a small local liberal arts college, and Aprils roommate. Interested in politics and government. A bit insecure due to the fact several guys pretended to want to date her so they could hit on April.

Other Characters I've introduced...
An unnamed Sargent that has a strong dislike for Tom and the feeling is mutual.

Sgt Lopez, a older patrol Sgt close to retirement age who prefers leering at drunk coeds to doing his job

Sgt Kolton Internal Affairs Administrrative Sargent. He Works directly for Capt. Wood as a driver, and aide.

Capt. Wood. Navy Veteran officer. Was hired by the PD as a LT. and was assigned to Command IA. Quickly promoted to Capt. and now commands IA, community relations (dealing with the general public), public affairs office (dealing with the 4th estate), and special Investigations (High profile crimes and politically sensitive cases).

In chapter one we meet Tom who is working a night job patroling a small condo property where nothing ever happens. He decides to go for an early morning swim one night while working. Eventually he gets more daring and starts to swim naked, eventually walking naked from his patrol car on one side of the property to the pool on the other.

Some of these antics are witnessed by April, from her kitchen window, who lives across the street. One night she joins Tom at the pool, but remains dressed. She admits to having been watching him since before he began swimming naked. At the end of their encounter she gives Tom her number and tells him to texty her when he plans on going for an early morning swin again. When they meet the second time, April gives Tom a handjob and leaves the pool still wearing her bikini.

In Chapter two Tom goes out on the town to try and get laid. He meets Cindy, who it turns out is Aprils roommate. She is a bit insecure because guys keep befriending her just to meet April.

Tom takes her into an ally and they consumate their lust in an animalistic manner. Tom ends up naked, and fucking Cindy, who is completly dressed. HHer pantiew were just pulled aside to allow him access to her pussy, which he fills with cum. After they climax Cindy leaves him in the ally after declining to continue their party at his place. It ends with Tom enjoying being naked outside as Cindy walks away from him.

Chapter 3 starts witth Tom being ordered to report to the office of the Internal affairs CO. We learn a bit about Toms backstory and how he has numerous cops in his family. We also learn he is a Navy veteran and it turns out that the CO of IA is his former Officer in Command from his early military training.

This is where I'm stuck. I don't know why my muse had Tom called into IA to meet with the CO, or why Capt Wood and Tom knew each other from the Navy.

I was thinking the meeting could be a sneaky way to have him meet with the Chief of Polce or a Fed to get an UC assignment, but that would take him away from the complex and pool which are central to the story. Without the pool, and his naked swimming April has no interest in him as she has already declined to date him.

I don't believe that a police capt would call a patrol officer off the streets just because they knew each other 10 years ago serving in the navy. They weren't close friends, Tom was a young enlisted sailor fresh out of boot camp, The IA capt was a new Ensign just out of the academy.

My ultimate goal is for April to get Tom to agree to help her out with an event she is planning. Could be a birthday party or hen night or bachorlerette party, where he acts as a waiter for the evening. He starts out wearing a Tuxedo, but instead of the seams being stitched together, its all held together by velcro. None of the ladies, except April and Cindy know this, and once they find out, they delight is slowly stripping him.

Of course the ladies get aroused and use him to get off, and a few are generous enough to lend a hand or mouth or other orifce to get him off.

How to get from IA to CFNM party is not coming to me right now. All suggestions are welcome, and anything that is used in the story will be acknowledged. \

 

[DarkestLore]

Well perhaps he was called in because there is some high profile investigation going on within the area that the patrols and they want him to look further into it, or be another set of eyes on the ground while they do their investigation.

 

[CeasarBoobage]

Sorry, I couldn't figure out a place for *all* of these characters, but here is where my mind was going with what you have. Feel free to use some/all/none of this. Maybe what I have will strike some inspiration elsewhere?
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Capt Wood and Tom know each other because they were assigned to the same ship a few years before. Tom was let go early because of the downsizing, which included decommissioning their ship, and Capt Wood stayed on longer to oversee the mothballing of said ship. They were so-so friends since staff officers and petty officers don't intermingle much, but they became better friends after they met up at a department party.

When Tom and April were fooling around in the pool, they were also noticed by Tina, who is the mayor's daughter. She is attending the same college and is staying in the apartments because she wanted freedom from her parents. After she sees the action between Cindy and Tom at the pool as well as when they were bumping uglies in the alley behind the club, she isn't sure if she's upset at what this cop is doing, of if she is excited and wants to see more.

Instead of going to the PD to complain, she tells daddy, who then gets upset and directly contacts the chief of police. Capt Wood meets with the mayor, but the mayor can't be bothered by the small details, referring Capt Wood to talk directly to Tina. This of course has to involve Lopez and Kolton, who all three girls recognize, especially Lopez because he's a creeper.

Lopez gets drunk at this party where Tom is wearing his velcro suit, and he starts leering at the ladies. Tom is still fully dressed while this happens, a fight ensues, and Lopez is fired on the spot. After he leaves, Tina is irate and threatens Capt Wood with telling daddy what happened. In order to save his job, he has a quick chat with Tina, then puts everyone into a private room, locking the door behind him as Tom and Kolton look at him in confusion and fear. Tom stays by Cindy's side while Tina corners Kolton to keep as her own, then April takes the role of ring-leader. She has Cindy and Tina strip down to bra/panties while she stays dressed, then has the men strip and dance to keep their jobs.

Tom and Cindy are happy together, but Kolton isn't impressed by the homely but decently built Tina. In order to have her own fun, April bounces between both couples to play with the guys as they do their show, occasionally telling the guys to switch between girls, or both of them hovering around each girl in turn.

In order to keep TIna occupied April has her sit on a tall stool with her hand down her panties jilling off. April posisions the guys in front of Tina, with April stroking Kolton and Cindy stroking Tom. They both cum down the front of her panties, making her get off. Tina composes herself and gets dressed, knocking on the door for Capt Wood to let her out. She tells him that she has almost changed her mind about being upset at the open display of nudity at her apt pool. If Kolton and Tom come over to her apartment the next night for another show, she will tell her mayor daddy that all is done and they should drop the case.

TBD: Do Kolton and April get together? Are Tom and Cindy now a 'thing'? Maybe April is upset that someone chose Cindy over her, so she sets up a FMF at her apartment before they visit Tina so she can try to steal Tom from Cindy. Does Tina invite friends to this party? Does Capt Wood need to be involved as well? Does this CFNM party at Tina's evolve into group sex, private dances, or just stay fairly tame?

 

[CeasarBoobage]

I just read through the original post again, and something else came to me.

How to get from IA to a party? Maybe the mayor has to give the chief an award, so everyone must attend, so that is how my party started. During the meet-n-greet before the award is given out, Tina (mayor's daughter) is wandering around and notices Tom. She bugs the chief about it, who quickly pulls Capt Wood into the situation, telling him to diffuse it immediately, that he doesn't want a scene while all the cameras are watching.

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I know ENF is popular with a lot of folks, but how about Embarrased Nude Male? Since Lopez is nearing retirement, instead of having him fired after his latest fight (was he groping someone too?), he could be one of the stars at one of Tina's smaller CFNM parties, and if he does well, he is forced into early retirement at a lower pay grade. This could feed Tina's need to be petty and hurtful, and it will help Capt Wood and Tom have more fun later.

Lopez hates that too many years of sitting down eating donuts has caught up with him, which makes his "short man syndrome" even worse. CFNM is about the most embarrassing thing he could think of doing, and doing it in front of the picture window of the apartment's living room makes it ten times worse. He keeps telling himself that he has to do this or he gets fired instead of getting his retirement.

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Maybe after my previous post, that could segway into how you wanted Tom to help out with a party that April is planning. Maybe that party *is* the one going on at Tina's house.

Since I wasn't sure how to tie Tom and Capt Wood together after training 10 years ago, I thought maybe more recent shipmates would work. Senior staff and junior staff don't mix very well, but there's still enough there for them to remember each other. From what I understand, people that serve on ship together, even in non-war times, treat it as a "fraternity for life" kind of thing. WIth a senior rank in the Navy, he wouldn't joing the PD as a LT, but maybe he would get a senior spot in IA right away. I'm not sure how long he and Tom have worked together there.

Hope this helps some!

 

[Ldy_Sea]

Well perhaps he was called in because there is some high profile investigation going on within the area that the patrols and they want him to look further into it, or be another set of eyes on the ground while they do their investigation.

I thought this was a good idea and tried to write this but it just wouldn't gel. I tried to edit it to the fact that IA cops were dirty so Capt. Woods needed someone outside IA to set up a sting on the dirty IA cops. JUst couldn't get it to go anywhere. Thanks for the idea though.

 

[Ldy_Sea]

Sorry, I couldn't figure out a place for *all* of these characters, but here is where my mind was going with what you have. Feel free to use some/all/none of this. Maybe what I have will strike some inspiration elsewhere?

Thanks for the detailed story line, but it just didn't feel right.

The party scene is going to be only Tom and 5 or 6 girls celebrating something. No other dudes. Think Dancing Bear event.

I don't know ahy my muse has me write certain things in the stories I write. For example in one story I had my character who was a caretaker for a bed ridden athlete turn down the thremostat. Much later in the story she needed to teach hiim a lesson, so she stripped him and the bed leaving him naked on a bare mattress with the AC blowing on him full blast, in the middle of winter.

I also tried to write the party scene but couldn't do it. I write linerly. From start to finish. whenever I try to write out of order, I can't.

I want to write a few more CFNM encounters between April and Tom before she asks him to be the entertainment for the party, after the male stripper she hired bails on her at the last minute.

THat being said, I have no idea why these characters were in the story or what if any role they'll play, but I do want to end ch 3 with the party scene which will be the end of the series.

Any and all ideas will be appreciated.

I even tried to rewrite the opening of Ch3 and after several paragraphs I ended up back in front of Capt. Woods in his office.

I am taking a break from this story to write another story that I hope to upload later tonight.

Ch1 of this story went online today. https://www.literotica.com/s/swimming-at-the-complex-ch-01

 

[wooodyme]

I can't say that I followed all of this so let me just suggest you back up a few steps. Don't make everyone's story so rigid. IA is convenient but who cares and this guy is ex-Navy which sounds to me more like a Vice call if any. I write mysteries and my first requirement is to stay within the boundaries (as I understand them) about police departments. What you see on TV is no wheres nearly helpful, either.

On the other hand, if this is just a jerk story don't bother with too many details and get on with the gettin' on!

Good luck,
Woody

 

[Ldy_Sea]

There was a sculptor. He found this stone, a special stone. He dragged it home and he worked on it for months until he finally finished it. When he was ready he showed it to his friends. They said he had created a great masterpiece, but the sculptor said he hadn't created anything. The statue was always there, he just chipped away the rough edges.

I write like the sculptor. I get an idea for a story. I begin to bang on the keyboard, the words flow, sometimes faster than I can type. I put the words on paper, where the words come from I don't know. I call the source of the words my muse.

This muse is very protective of the stories and characters. I have tried to force stories to go ina certain direction or to make characters do things and somehow they always end up doing what I was trying to avoid. I can no more control a story than a sniper can control a bullet once it leaves the barrel of his gun.

The Muse is being a bit ornery right now and not feeding me the next part of the story, and giving me a different one to write. I was just hoping something would be said that would get the muse back in the mood to share the rest of the story with me.

 

[HonorableRogue]

Google Shellback Ceremony (it's a Navy crossing the equator thing).

LOTS of crazy stuff happens during them. Can be an alternative link between Tom and LT. Depending what your muse decides they shared in their ceremony the LT might have his own kinks.

He could even show up in uniform to "bust up" the noisy party and then join in some how.

Just a thought.

Cheers

 

[hfernandez1983]

Hey there Ldy_Sea.

I like the concept of the story. But alas, the feel that you are getting stuck at a point where the story completely drives off topic.

What I gather is that this is a story about Tom, April & Cindy. Introducing someone else like his former CO just takes everything off topic. Maybe that portion to the story needs to go out completely? You could just keep this between the 3 characters and come up with an interesting way to move it forward.

For E.g. Cindy leaves Tom in the alley. But Cindy can start developing feelings for him. She has a problem with him being nude in public and you can try to work on that angle. And then maybe you can also add that April find out about them and April wants Tom completely to himself. Just spit balling ideas here.

I know why you feel this way because, I did it on one of my stories and it all feels forced. It doesnt seem to connect to the continuity of the CNFM aspect organically.

/H

 

[Zeb_Carter]

Just an FYI...

The first thing that caught my eye, was the discharge reason. I don't think the US military discharges any good soldier or sailor because of downsizing. After all, it's not a corporation that needs to shed employees to save money.

I would have said his hitch was up. Navy is usually a six year at a time hitch.

Sorry to be a pain, but that's what I noticed and it caused me to stop reading right there. Just so you know. And it might not come up in the story, but I but you do have it as a background info dump somewhere in there.

 

[jlorthia]

I think in the early 90s the Military was downsized because the cold war ended.

With that being said, maybe you don't need a reason for these people to know each other. Maybe they just converge in some sort of CFNM party that they all attend for different reasons, kind of make it seperate stories that eventually converge into one event.