Story Idea

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Hello I just love reading these stories, and I was wondering if you would fulfill a story request for me. I really don’t know the proper way to ask so I will just give you what I am thinking and let you decided what you can do with it.

There are four main characters. Iris, Jennifer (or Jennie for short), Dave, and Dan (or Dug as a nickname)

Iris and Jennie are sisters, where Iris is 2 years older. Iris is engaged to Dave and they have been together for 5 years. Jennie and Dug are dating and have been together for two years.


Iris and Jennie are both blond, where Iris has shoulder blade striate hair, and Jennie has more curly heir. Iris is about 5’7 and Jennie is about 5’5 and they are both relatively skinny. Dave is Italian and has dark hair and eyes, is a little overweight and a real bear of a guy. Dug is Jewish but does not look it, his mother is Moroccan and he has many of her fetchers. He is tall and skinny for a muscular guy.

Iris and Jennie are real close sisters and do a lot of things together. They even live together in a one-bedroom basement apartment. They are the type of girls that tell each other every thing, and during one of there conversations (prier to the story) they where talking about the dick size of their men (Dave and Dug). Iris tells Jennie that Dave has an average size dick (about 6 inch) while Jennie revels that her boyfriend Dug has a 9-inch dick (the biggest one she has seen in real life).

The story should go something like this:

Iris, Jennie and Dug go out one night a get really drunk, and afterward come back to Iris and Jennie’s apartment. Once their they continue to drink and start acting relay silly, to which the conversation some how turns to dick size.

Trying to be funny Iris states something like “So Dug someone told me you have a big dick, let me see it” in a tone not really expecting him to show it.

Jennie protest acting jealous but being drunk it’s only an act and tells her sister she can’t see it.

Then Iris proclaims it must be a lie and that he must have a really small dick because they don’t want to show her. Acting really silly drunk Jennie decides to shut her sister up and proceeds to pull Millhouses dick out of his pants. Dug doesn’t protest because hey why would he.

When Jennie finishes pulling it out, Iris can see that it is much bigger then her fiancés even though it is not fully hard. She is she is fascinated and instantly turned on by it, she is also guilty of these feeling as she loves her Fiancé Dave, But she is drunk and cant help her self. She grabs Dug’s dick and starts to pay with it, and it starts to get hard. Jennie who is also still drink finds it funny while it also turns her on, and she begins to join in the play. This leads to whiled passionate three some between them.

During this threesome Iris’s love for Dave subsides as she realizes that she will need to have this big dick all the time, and she decides that she will keep Dave around for the money but her pussy will belong to Dug. Some commentary about this fact should be weaved through out the story, and the three of them should take amusement in bad mouthing Dave. Jennie is having a lot of fun and doesn’t mind sharing with her sister.

The rest of the story will go to fuck scenes between the three of them, with Dave being none the wiser of the situation. One Hot thing to incorporate could be that during one sex scene Dave and Iris are talking on the phone while Dug is fucking her. Iris does her best not to let on and maybe hands the phone off to her sister why she goes and gives Dug a blow job.

At the end, Dave walks in on the three fucking by accident, and is astonished at what he sees. Iris doesn’t carry that she was caught as she is having to much fun playing with her sister and her sisters boy friend, so she just keeps on fucking. While they are fucking Iris explains the Situation to Dave who is humiliated and walks out. They all laugh about it.

I think that would make for a real hot story, but you are the expert, let me know what you think.
 
:confused: That is not a story idea, that is a story.

You are looking for someone to fill in the blanks so you don't have to.

An idea gives a basic plot or thought and allows the author to work around that.

You have given the characters, the looks, the age, the where, the when, the How, the why, and what the out come is going to be.

Filling in the blanks does not sound like the fun of the story any more.

It is your fantasy. If you have gone this far, why don't you just finish it and have it edited, and then post it?
 
A7inchPhildo said:
:confused: That is not a story idea, that is a story. ... An idea gives a basic plot or thought and allows the author to work around that. ...
I think it is a perfectly reasonable story idea. It is more detailed than most of the one-liners posted on here, but there is nothing wrong with writing a piece for someone from a more detailed outline. Most of the one-liners are elaborated by lots of people adding their ideas until we get to this sort of level.

A7inchPhildo said:
... It is your fantasy. If you have gone this far, why don't you just finish it and have it edited, and then post it?
Now that's a good thought.
 
Hi snoop,


Just want to restate, it is a cool story. Just a bit more than I would want to work with. Still it is a cool story, and not likely to be finished if fanfanfat does not do it .
 
why is it asking for a post subject - when I hit reply

hello, sorry for being to detailed. Like I said I wasnt sure how to put forth an idea.

I would write it my self, but I am not a good writer.
 
FAnfan,

Not a good writer???? You have seemingly done better than many posted stories, with what you want in your story.

Literotica is full of not good writers. Trust me some are really not good at all. No one is asking you to be Nora Roberts or Amanda Quick. In fact we don't want to read that stuff any ways.

Really you are killing me! I don't have the time to say I will do it/finish it. I have over commited my self. (still writing last years Holloween story, along with a nude beach story, a rewrite, and about ten other stories waiting)

Why don't you just try, take it slow, think of each segment. How did the characters get from point "a" to point "b". If you become stuck ask for some help, or try to mimick another story. (Not copy). You can PM me or I will give you my email if you need help.

Then just ask a willing Editor to help fine tune it a bit. We can get you a great Editor for free and all.

It is not that you had too much detail, as much as you have almost completed the story on your own. You don't need someone to finish it at this point. You have already done the hard part. Really all you need to do is add the filler stuff.

We need more twisted mined people like you writing the good stuff. Come on what do ya say? Give it a try, if it really flops. Well, you still have not lost anything you can always throw it out again as an idea. But you might be surprised at the feedback and support on such a good idea/story.
 
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