Story help please?

tyson52

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I’m a horrible writer, bad speller, poor grammar….but I think the concept and premise of this story is good. I just need a literate person to clean it up, please help!

It all started when my wife came to pick me up from work. Leon a fairly new employee was only person left in the office with me. He is known as a flirt and he lived up to repetition, complimenting my wife on her looks. My wife enjoyed the compliments, she’s attractive but being a married stay at home she’s not use to guys flirting.

Not to mention that’s she’s 35 and Leon is a good looking 24 year old black man. For the next few weeks when I’d run into Leon he’d ask how the misses was doing and ask me to tell her he said hi. My company started giving health insurance discounts to employees who joined a local gym. Leon, myself and 10 others signed up. Leon and I would go 3 days weeks around the same time we started to become friends. One particular evening we started talking about women and past relations.

We started talking about fantasies, Leon said he once had threesome with his college girlfriend and her best friend. He said they had discussed having a threesome with another guy, one of his friends but it never happened. He asked about my wife and I and admitted we were a little boring but I had fantasies but there’s no way my wife would go along with them. We walked back to locker room and headed for the shower. I peeked over and caught a glace of Leon’s penis, it was big and fat and hung half down his thigh.

We got out and got dressed, Leon casually mentioned that if the misses and I ever wanted to add another guy to the fun he would love to help. I just smiled and laughed it off. Like most married white men I had fantasized about watching my wife with a black guy but I knew there was no way she’d ever do anything that exciting. I waited a few days to tell my wife about our locker room conversation. Her first reaction was anger, what pervert Leon was, how I should have hit him. She settled down and we talked more, she ask me what I thought.

After 10 years marriage I finally opened up to her about my fantasy. Surprisingly she didn’t get mad but asked me to explain. I told her how attracted I was to her and there was something about another man a black man, with a big penis being attracted to her that turned me on. That night we had the best sex of our marriage. Over the next few weeks we talked more and more and she said she’d like to do this for me and she admitted the thought of two guys pleasuring her was a turn on.

However she said there is no why she’d feel comfortable with someone I’d work with because things have a way of getting around offices. I said what about a guy online? We could chat and if all goes well meet for dinner and dancing. She liked that idea so we posted an add on Dark Cavern, a site for couples like us. We got lots of responses but one she liked was from a guy named Kevin.

He was a 26 year old, former college basketball who lived about 30 miles from us. Unlike most the others who responded he wasn’t crude he just seemed like a decent guy. He had broken up with girlfriend about a year ago, she was his first and only girlfriend, they’d been together since they were sophomores in collage. He said he had always had thing for married white, cougar, milf types, someone to show him the ropes. We chatted back and forth for months, he was into a lot of same shows as my wife so they hit off.

Finally the kids were heading to her sisters for the weekend. I suggested we should meet Kevin for drinks at this bar that was about 20 miles from both of our houses. She emailed him, he was free and everything was set for that Friday. We both were excited we couldn’t wait for Friday to roll around. On the big day she wore a short black dress and stiletto heels, she looked hot. We were both nervous and didn’t talk much on the way there.

When we walked in the bar was crowded. Kevin spotted us quickly. We set down a had a few drinks, we all rooted for the same NFL team so talked a lot about football, Kevin told us about what it was like to play basketball for a big time program. As the evening progressed the dance floor started filling up. I suggested we should get there and have some. Kevin was a good dancer, the three of danced but eventually I grabbed a seat and watched.

My wife is tall but she looked short dancing with Kevin he was at least 6’6” and pretty built, not your typical basketball player. She looked so sexy with his big black hands on her hips. Every couple of songs I’d head back out but I really enjoyed watching. The night went by quick after last call we all agreed we should meet again, my wife hugged Kevin and we left. As we were driving I told her how sexy she looked and that could tell Kevin thought she was sexy.

She said. “I know he did, when he grinding on me and I could feel him getting hard.”

I reach over and rubbed her leg. She said, honey it felt huge, I slipped my hand up under her dress, her panties were soaked. I pulled off the highway and we jumped in the back seat.

(You need to give a small sex scene here just to pull the reader along, even if it’s just how you pulled her panties to one side because you both couldn’t wait any longer.)

The next morning I told my wife I wanted her to take this as far as she was comfortable with. If that meant just dancing that was ok with me but if was willing to go further I’d be the happiest husband on earth. She said next month when the kids go her mothers we should get a hotel room if Kevin is free. Things moved fast we were both excited. Kevin was free he offered to get the room.

I wanted to reserve a nice room with a hot tub so I made the arrangements. Friday night rolled around and my wife packed a bag and we left. We got there first, we were dressed causal this time, jeans and tee shirts. After an hour Kevin knocked on the door. We sat around and had a few drinks and watched a college football game. My wife suggested we play a game, there were cards in hotels night stand, strip poker, honey.

Kevin and I didn’t argue. My wife lost a lot quickly. A few hands into the game she stood up and slowly removed her jeans, Kevin complimented her on her body, she loved the attention. In no time my wife was down to her bra and panties Kevin and I, just our boxers. Kevin lost the next hand, he stood up and pulled down his boxers. My wife’s jaw dropped, he was huge, probably 10 inches long and as thick as her wrist.

I broke the silence suggesting we jump in the hot tub in the bathroom. My wife and I removed our cloths and headed to the hot tub with Kevin. She set between Kevin and I, I made the first move and slide behind her, rubbing her shoulders. I motioned for Kevin to move to the front, he lifted her leg and messaged it. We rubbed and messaged her body for 10 minutes before I told Kevin he should carry her back to the room. It was pretty hot watching him carry her, his penis was sticking out under her body. He laid her on her stomach on the bed, this time Kevin messaged her back I got her legs.

This lasted till she flipped over on her back. I rubbed her legs and started kissing her thigh. Kevin was still rubbing her arm and shoulders till she slid her hands to her breast. I moved my mouth to her inner thigh and started to kiss her. When I looked up she had Kevin’s penis in her hand, her hand looked so small it didn’t fit around him. In contract his big dark hands squeezed and rubbed her breast. After several minutes she pushed my head away and set up. She told Kevin to go sit in the chair. She looked me in the eyes and asked if I ok with all this?

Smiling , I told her it was the best day of life. She said she was little nervous because she’s tight and Kevin was so big but she wanted to try. I pulled a condom from the bag and handed it to Kevin, somehow he got it to stretch over him. My wife climbed onto the chair all I could she was his huge black penis against my wife butt. She wiggled her butt up and down him a few times before finally trying to put the head of his big penis in her after three tries she got it in. She moved up and down him, she could only get a couple inches in but she was enjoying herself.



It didn’t take her long to cum and let out a couple loud screams and a grunt. She asked us to give her a few minutes to caught her breath. She told us to sit next to each other on the bed. She got up walked over and got on her knees and took a penis in each hand. Kevin still had on the condom as she stroked us. I really enjoyed watching her stroke him it didn’t take me long to cum. Kevin was still hard as rock but now my wife had two free hands.

She leaned forward and squeezed her breast around Kevin’s penis, he really like this because he started groaning and filled up the condom pretty quick. She got in the shower and Kevin got dressed and left. When she got out of the shower I told her about how she looked and how she made my dream come true. She said she enjoyed it. Of course I asked how about next month when get some free time, she just smiled and said we’ll see.
 
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My eyes!!!! My eyes!!!! :eek:

Can you say, "Unreadable?" Two gigantic paragraphs and I can't even make it half way t hrough the first without getting a head ache.
 
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