Story feedback, please.

[SweetFuckBunny]

Let me know what you think, would ya?

I Think of You

 

[damppanties]

This was more of a glimpse into a personal communication between two people than a real story. The second person killed it. Actually, there wasn't much to kill. I'm sorry but I stopped reading half-way into it. There was nothing to set it apart from most of the stories here. Try writing something longer and drop the "I-you" format.

-DP.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

I have to agree with DP. There was no story, just a second person description of a heterosexual couple making love. Within that rather limited boundary, it wasn't bad. But the boundary was so very limited, there just wasn't much to it.

Rumple Foreskin