[STORY] A Woman of Edo

[NoJo]

I've written six stories in the last three weeks, after a dry spell of over two years. Five of the new stories are strictly humor and satire. Except this one, which is a Romance in three chapters. Sex in chapters 2 & 3.

A Woman of Edo Ch. 1

If you have the time, I'd love to know whether you think I can do romance, or better stick with what comes naturally.

Perdita, Jo, thanks and for your comments/suggestions, which encouraged me to post)

 

[neonlyte]

You struck lucky - today is reading day. Left comments.

 

[carsonshepherd]

I read it, Joe, and I really liked it. I'm interested to see how you work Go into the plot of a short romance. Have you ever read Shibumi by Trevanian? If I'm not mistaken that novel prominently features Go and that's how I got interested in it. It was a really good first chapter.

Congrats on breaking that dry spell.

 

[NoJo]

Thanks for reading, guys. I've played a lot of Go, and seen it in a couple stories and a film, but not as a plot device. It's actually a sexual game, and has an incredible set of dynamics to it.

I'm glad it left you asking questions at plot point 1.

 

[NoJo]

Writing like a woman

Chapter two out of three is up.

I draw on my submissive side and experiences when I want to write from a woman's POV. I'd be interested to know (by PM/anonymous feedback if it's personal) how well I dealt with the rape episode from a woman's POV in the above chapter, or if you felt that it was just more male voyerism.

 

[shereads]

I'll read it...But comments are too easy to get wrong. I compliment your subtle use of symbolism in the sequence with the black swan; it turns out that the swan was just a decorative bird, and it was black because the extra word eliminated a line-break that looked funny in your Word document. Then you tell me that the murder/suicide at the end wasn't meant to be bittersweet, and I feel like a fool.

Already I'm surprised to learn that satire and romance are different concepts.

But I'll be delighted to read it. That's what I'm here for.

 

[NoJo]

Actually I wanted anyone except you to read it. You're too smart to be reading crap. And besides, you're not anonymous.

(time for the exteremely perspicacious use of the wink smiley: )

 

[shereads]

Actually I wanted anyone except you to read it. You're too smart to be reading crap. And besides, you're not anonymous.

(time for the exteremely perspicacious use of the wink smiley: )

Perspicacous.

I bet nobody has been willing to play the Dictionary Game with you since you won with "elver: a baby eel."

 

[NoJo]

Perspicacous.

I bet nobody has been willing to play the Dictionary Game with you since you won with "elver: a baby eel."

http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=perspicacious

Time for the obstreperous use of

Fill in the blanks, logophile:

*ABC****

 

[carsonshepherd]

I'll read it tonight when I get home, I'm looking forward to it.

 

[NoJo]

The Final Chapter is up. Includes a bit of historical background to the story.