Stones of Incienda, Ch1. pt. 5 up

[Zodia195]

Recap-

It is the Annual Incienda Festival and it ends with a Mask ball. During the ball, the main guys (who are all princes of each of the 7 kingdoms) have met the main girls. All of the them have seen the stone fragments and the girls have had visions, having seen them for the first time. These fragments are part of the Stones that represent the stability of the planet. There are a few people at the ball who feel something big is about to happen. The last part ends with a lone figure outside the ball proclaiming that everything changes . . . . now.

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Someone recommended I do a recap of the story, so I hope this helps. I would prefer if feedback was left in my comment section since I don't always remember to check back at this thread. Thanks.

https://www.literotica.com/s/stones-of-incienda-ch-01-pt-05

 

[8letters]

I'm not a Fantasy LitE reader (though I read non-LitE fantasy), so take my thoughts with a grain of a salt:
* I'm jumping in the middle of the story, but it strikes me as having far too big a list of characters
* Lots of repetition. During the earthquake, we checked in on all seven girls and they all seemed to have similar experiences. Then the seven stone fragments were all similar experience for each girl. Then the six princes declare themselves protectors in similar experiences
* The prophecy is so trite. "We created the stones and know all about them, but we're only going to leave you some vague instructions because we don't want to make things too easy for you. It's not like the fate of the planet depends on figuring out what to do. Oh, wait!"
* The stones picking the girls makes sort of sense, but the princes declaring themselves protectors seems to be for no reason at all. Why not have the stones drag the girls to their protectors?