South Pacific

[YourCaptor]

You are welcome

now you have to read mine too...

whenever it may be that I happen to write something to completion.

 

[Keroin]

Yes. I was obviously thinking, "Okay dammit, I wanna know what happens next...And curse you for stopping the punishment scene right then." But of course I'm very anxious for the next installment. I do hope you'll post it *cough*tomorrow*cough*...err...soon.

LOL. Next installment coming soon.

You are welcome

now you have to read mine too...

whenever it may be that I happen to write something to completion.

Deal.

 

[DVS]

Its on my Netflix list. I love old musicals.

"Bali Hai" is one of my favorite songs from the show.

I'm confused now.

LOL. I love old musicals. The cornier the better.

And Keroin, I think the lyrics of that song might strike your fancy. You being torn between living on an island and and civilization.

As for corny...I'd say it is, but it has its moments just the same. I've got friends that will tell you EVERY musical is corny. Being a musician, I can see the musical style and separate the songs from the dialogue, when necessary. But, I have a friend, also a musician and he seems to want to take the macho route, saying all musicals suck.

Now, I know that has to be a flippant statement, because of my two favorites "The Sound of Music" and "West Side Story". Who could ever say those two suck? But he, being uneducated in the nuances of the musical style, can't understand why people will talk for a while, then all of the sudden break into a song, for no apparent reason.

Like I said...he's uneducated. I think he's also a bit embarrassed to admit he likes musicals. And that macho part of him is a mental block to some of the most inspiring show tunes in the history of music.

God, did I say show tunes? A manly Dom like me saying...show tunes?

 

[ZRT]

I don't have anything against the genre, but musicals do nothing for me. It just kills my suspension of disbelief when somebody breaks from dialogue to song.

Different strokes and all that.

 

[DVS]

I don't have anything against the genre, but musicals do nothing for me. It just kills my suspension of disbelief when somebody breaks from dialogue to song.

Different strokes and all that.

I understand and respect your opinion. And, you are not alone in that opinion. Maybe it's my more feminine side coming out, but hey, I've also gotta say I think you're missin' out.

 

[ZRT]

I understand and respect your opinion. And, you are not alone in that opinion. Maybe it's my more feminine side coming out, but hey, I've also gotta say I think you're missin' out.

Chicks dig sensitive sadists.

 

[graceanne]

Ok, I can't resist another minute.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WM3QNXaERjE

 

[WriterDom]

Part two is long enough but needs one more scene. So I'll have two if I can get them edited. Maybe post one two days after the first one.

http://storiesonline.net Another place to post your stories. Anything goes there and they got mine up in a hour yesterday.

 

[Keroin]

Part Two on sale now. Just in time for Xmas!

Sommer Storms - Part II

 

[WriterDom]

Part Two on sale now. Just in time for Xmas!

Sommer Storms - Part II

I haven't read part one yet. But I plan to. Too cold right now to read much of anything.

 

[sinnocence]

Part Two on sale now. Just in time for Xmas!

Sommer Storms - Part II

*zooooom*

 

[Keroin]

I haven't read part one yet. But I plan to. Too cold right now to read much of anything.

Dude, I know cold. Yesterday, however, it warmed up to -8. I was out shoveling snow for a friend and I thought my eyes were going to freeze open, lol.

 

[Keroin]

*zooooom*

*Snort*

 

[sinnocence]

I love it.

 

[Dreamliner]

Hmmm, nice shoulder's K!

 

[graceanne]

I don't have anything against the genre, but musicals do nothing for me. It just kills my suspension of disbelief when somebody breaks from dialogue to song.

Different strokes and all that.

I love musicals. We used to watch them with my mom and then sing the songs whenever we were moving (that happened quite often and normally to other states). I know all the songs from Oklahoma, Mary Poppins, Sounds of Music, Little Mermaid, Cinderella (both Disney and Roger and Hammerstein), and several songs from Annie, The Lion King, Beauty and the Beast, and Sleeping Beauty.

 

[YourCaptor]

I like part 1 better.

This ones kind of par for a lit story. Also what happened to sommers personality.

You should have stuck with weird, weird makes it fun.

 

[Keroin]

I like part 1 better.

This ones kind of par for a lit story. Also what happened to sommers personality.

You should have stuck with weird, weird makes it fun.

You'll see more of Sommer's personality in Part III.

Meh, can't please everyone

 

[Keroin]

I like part 1 better.

This ones kind of par for a lit story. Also what happened to sommers personality.

You should have stuck with weird, weird makes it fun.

You'll see more of Sommer's personality in Part III.

Meh, can't please everyone

I just realized my response to your very valid feedback was quite dismissive. Not the nicest way to reply, especially since you are one of the few people to take the time to read and offer critique on my work. So, my apologies, YC!

As I was explaining to someone else this morning, I think the mistake I made in the second part was to write to reader expectation and not stay true to my own way of thinking. You noted, correctly, that I’m a bit weird and comical and I should try to hide that, that’s who I am. I originally started writing this story as a contest entry and figured, about a third of the way through, that readers would demand to see more “smut” of the typical variety, so I added it.

I don’t think part two is terrible, I just don’t think it’s authentically me.

Part three will be different and I hope you’ll still have a read!

Thanks again for reading YC, (and anyone else who takes the time to read my scribbles).

Smiles - K

 

[Keroin]

Hmmm, nice shoulder's K!

Thanks, DL!

 

[graceanne]

I just realized my response to your very valid feedback was quite dismissive. Not the nicest way to reply, especially since you are one of the few people to take the time to read and offer critique on my work. So, my apologies, YC!

As I was explaining to someone else this morning, I think the mistake I made in the second part was to write to reader expectation and not stay true to my own way of thinking. You noted, correctly, that I’m a bit weird and comical and I should try to hide that, that’s who I am. I originally started writing this story as a contest entry and figured, about a third of the way through, that readers would demand to see more “smut” of the typical variety, so I added it.

I don’t think part two is terrible, I just don’t think it’s authentically me.

Part three will be different and I hope you’ll still have a read!

Thanks again for reading YC, (and anyone else who takes the time to read my scribbles).

Smiles - K

I know that some of the stories I've written that other people loved I hate because I was writing for them.

I'm going to read your stories next time I'm in the mood for smut. Just haven't been, yet.

 

[YourCaptor]

I just realized my response to your very valid feedback was quite dismissive. Not the nicest way to reply, especially since you are one of the few people to take the time to read and offer critique on my work. So, my apologies, YC!

As I was explaining to someone else this morning, I think the mistake I made in the second part was to write to reader expectation and not stay true to my own way of thinking. You noted, correctly, that I’m a bit weird and comical and I should try to hide that, that’s who I am. I originally started writing this story as a contest entry and figured, about a third of the way through, that readers would demand to see more “smut” of the typical variety, so I added it.

I don’t think part two is terrible, I just don’t think it’s authentically me.

Part three will be different and I hope you’ll still have a read!

Thanks again for reading YC, (and anyone else who takes the time to read my scribbles).

Smiles - K

Don't worry about it.

Theirs lit stories, which are all basically the same, only so many ways you can describe round peg and hole, and then those that are interesting cause somethings different about them. Part one was different.

 

[ZRT]

Don't worry about it.

Theirs lit stories, which are all basically the same, only so many ways you can describe round peg and hole, and then those that are interesting cause somethings different about them. Part one was different.

Agreed.

I did like the balls in the face bit, though.