South Pacific

[Keroin]

Don't start singing Bali Hai yet. Just dropping a blurb to let those who may be interested know I have a new story up on Lit.

This one's a three-parter, (ooo, a trilogy). It's not as hardcore as my others...well, part one isn't...but I hope it's still fun. Here it is...

Sommer Storms - Part I

Always happy to hear feedback. Good, bad or ugly!

Smiles - K

 

[BiBunny]

Brava!

I have no suggestions for you. I just wanted you to know that I enjoyed this one thoroughly.

 

[Keroin]

Brava!

I have no suggestions for you. I just wanted you to know that I enjoyed this one thoroughly.

Thanks BB!

(It's gets smuttier in part II, BTW)

 

[BiBunny]

Thanks BB!

(It's gets smuttier in part II, BTW)

I look forward to it!

I wish I could motivate myself to start writing again, but I think grad school may have killed my soul....

 

[00Syd]

I thought that this was going to be about the Musical.

 

[Keroin]

I thought that this was going to be about the Musical.

We can make it about the musical, if you want.

Anything for you, Syd.


(I was tired, and uninspired when I started the thread, sorry.)

 

[Keroin]

I look forward to it!

I wish I could motivate myself to start writing again, but I think grad school may have killed my soul....

Mmm, I know the feeling. It took me about five years after uni to even want to pick up a book again, let alone write.

 

[WriterDom]

I have a new one waiting on the weekend for my editor. About a professor who seduces his student. I've already started on the second part. I like it. The sexual tension builds up for a while before he takes her in his office, spanks her butt over the desk, gets a blow job, then fucks her over the desk.

In the second part he starts training her at his home. I think it will go to many parts before I'm done. I like to write about real people and this girl really makes me hot.

 

[Keroin]

I have a new one waiting on the weekend for my editor. About a professor who seduces his student. I've already started on the second part. I like it. The sexual tension builds up for a while before he takes her in his office, spanks her butt over the desk, gets a blow job, then fucks her over the desk.

In the second part he starts training her at his home. I think it will go to many parts before I'm done. I like to write about real people and this girl really makes me hot.

But is there a penguin in it?

LOL.

Good for you, WD, keep scribbling!

 

[00Syd]

We can make it about the musical, if you want.

Anything for you, Syd.

YES! MAKE it about the musical for ME! I have the power to change a thread's subjects at will! Mwahahahahahahahaaa

 

[Keroin]

***WARNING!!***THREAD TOPIC CHANGE!!***

This thread is now, officially about the musical South Pacific.



Um, I've actually only lived South Pacific, I've never seen the musical, so feel free to fill me in on what is so good, or bad, about it.





p.s. You can still read my story if you want but there's no singing or dancing in it. Sorry.

 

[00Syd]

***WARNING!!***THREAD TOPIC CHANGE!!***

This thread is now, officially about the musical South Pacific.



Um, I've actually only lived South Pacific, I've never seen the musical, so feel free to fill me in on what is so good, or bad, about it.





p.s. You can still read my story if you want but there's no singing or dancing in it. Sorry.

I've never actually seen the musical, either

 

[Keroin]

I've never actually seen the musical, either

And I changed my whole thread for you???

Why I oughta...*shakes fist*

 

[WriterDom]

But is there a penguin in it?

LOL.

Good for you, WD, keep scribbling!

I could make the buttplug a penguin buttplug. They are somewhat shaped like one. Don't tell your friend I called him a buttplug.

 

[Keroin]

I could make the buttplug a penguin buttplug. They are somewhat shaped like one. Don't tell your friend I called him a buttplug.

No worries, I've called him worse.

 

[Keroin]

Hm, as I suspected, this new story is getting a low score and few votes. That's what happens when you don't put enough smut in.

 

[sinnocence]

I've read the first page and I really like it so far. I'm gonna keep reading now. *scurries off*


eta: All done. Love it.

 

[WriterDom]

Hm, as I suspected, this new story is getting a low score and few votes. That's what happens when you don't put enough smut in.

Same thing happens if you overdo the smut. I plan on reading it and giving you a 5.

 

[DVS]

I've never actually seen the musical, either

I've seen the movie. I know...not the same as the actual musical, but still not too bad. But, you must like musicals.

It's a good one, but an old one. Great music, if you like Rodgers & Hammerstein. Good, wholesome, family entertainment. I know...I know...I'm not helping my reputation a whole lot, talking about this.

The sex? It's one of those older movies where the sex scenes are just a lot of kissing, then the camera pans to the ocean waves crashing against the shore. Ah...symbolism.

And by using symbolism, maybe you can maybe bring the thread back to the original theme.

 

[00Syd]

I've seen the movie. I know...not the same as the actual musical, but still not too bad. But, you must like musicals.

It's a good one, but an old one. Great music, if you like Rodgers & Hammerstein. Good, wholesome, family entertainment. I know...I know...I'm not helping my reputation a whole lot, talking about this.

The sex? It's one of those older movies where the sex scenes are just a lot of kissing, then the camera pans to the ocean waves crashing against the shore. Ah...symbolism.

And by using symbolism, maybe you can maybe bring the thread back to the original theme.

Its on my Netflix list. I love old musicals.

 

[Keroin]

I've read the first page and I really like it so far. I'm gonna keep reading now. *scurries off*


eta: All done. Love it.

Gracias amiga! Question: Did the cliffhanger ending work for you?

Same thing happens if you overdo the smut. I plan on reading it and giving you a 5.

WD, if I ever need a fan club, you're my pick for president.

I've seen the movie. I know...not the same as the actual musical, but still not too bad. But, you must like musicals.

It's a good one, but an old one. Great music, if you like Rodgers & Hammerstein. Good, wholesome, family entertainment. I know...I know...I'm not helping my reputation a whole lot, talking about this.

The sex? It's one of those older movies where the sex scenes are just a lot of kissing, then the camera pans to the ocean waves crashing against the shore. Ah...symbolism.

And by using symbolism, maybe you can maybe bring the thread back to the original theme.

I'm confused now.

LOL. I love old musicals. The cornier the better.

Its on my Netflix list. I love old musicals.

*See above.

 

[WriterDom]

WD, if I ever need a fan club, you're my pick for president.


.

Good. I might put that in my sig line. President of the Keroin fan club.

 

[YourCaptor]

Fun and cute.

I started out thinking it was you first person, like, “yea!! K go wreak that chick”.

Once realizing it’s a dude, it lost a lot of novelty for me, and seemed kind of cliché. But I got over that soon.

I like the playfulness, keeps it carefree, removed from crappy reality, which makes it a refreshing read.

And I can’t help but wonder how much is fiction.

For laypersons, those that don’t know you, I think it may have a small audience. Not too many appreciate the weird and comical.

Did the cliffhanger ending work… well if the point was to piss me off, yes. I think it would been more cliffhangerish if it was more smutty… like big island dude is a jackass and feels he is owed an apology for bitch stepping out of line. But then that would be cliché.

I think the whole, will the newly introduce characters be able to save our girl while the hero watches on, didn’t work for me. But then I don’t know where its going, maybe its all part of the plan?

Yes, but overall, fun and cute. I'd read more.

PS, Are we gonna see some face slapping, I think sommer is a perfect candidate for some face slapping. You know, to slap her out of it.

 

[Keroin]

Fun and cute.

I started out thinking it was you first person, like, “yea!! K go wreak that chick”.

Once realizing it’s a dude, it lost a lot of novelty for me, and seemed kind of cliché. But I got over that soon.

I like the playfulness, keeps it carefree, removed from crappy reality, which makes it a refreshing read.

And I can’t help but wonder how much is fiction.

For laypersons, those that don’t know you, I think it may have a small audience. Not too many appreciate the weird and comical.

Did the cliffhanger ending work… well if the point was to piss me off, yes. I think it would been more cliffhangerish if it was more smutty… like big island dude is a jackass and feels he is owed an apology for bitch stepping out of line. But then that would be cliché.

I think the whole, will the newly introduce characters be able to save our girl while the hero watches on, didn’t work for me. But then I don’t know where its going, maybe its all part of the plan?

Yes, but overall, fun and cute. I'd read more.

PS, Are we gonna see some face slapping, I think sommer is a perfect candidate for some face slapping. You know, to slap her out of it.

Thanks for the read YC! I won't spoil any potential fantasies by telling you how much is reality and how much is fiction.

Sommer will get some rougher treatment in Part II, not to worry.

l wanted to write a story that captures, somewhat, my version of BDSM. That is to say, something that can be both dark and playful, as well as organic, free from the usual stereotypes and such. No idea how successful I was but it was fun trying to put it into words.

You're probably correct in that those who don't "know" me might not get as much out of it.

Again, many, many thanks!!!

Oh and sorry I didn't clarify that it wasn't written from my POV! Oops.


(Weird and comical...yeah, that's me)

 

[sinnocence]

Gracias amiga! Question: Did the cliffhanger ending work for you?

Yes. I was obviously thinking, "Okay dammit, I wanna know what happens next...And curse you for stopping the punishment scene right then." But of course I'm very anxious for the next installment. I do hope you'll post it *cough*tomorrow*cough*...err...soon.