Sound and Smell Neglected

[Marxist]

Let's say that there are about 13,000 stories on this site. Assume too that there are about 3 sex acts per story.

39,000 carnal acts and how many describe the sensations beyond the visual or tactile (not including the audio stories)? My guess is very few. The reason I bring it up is that it was brought up to me that my stories aren't aural enough.

Beyond the "oooh, ahhh," and "his cum tasted sweet" cliches, what sounds, smells, and tastes work in erotica?

MARXIST

 

[Blayde]

That's a very good point

Not sure what "works" but I'll try to keep this in mind... wouldn't want to lose those readers that desire a multisensory story

 

[Mickie]

Think about --

What does skin taste like?
What did they have to eat or drink? The remnants of the taste would still be in thier mouth, and the smell, too.
The surroundings have a smell -- cig smoke, incense, cooking smells, or outside smells. (rich dark earth smell. Cold bitter snow smell. Decomposing leaf smell. Rain smell...etc.)

Use your imagination. Use your perceptions next time you have sex. Description uses all five (and sometimes that sixth!) senses. Taste, touch, smell, visual, and auditory. Use them all. Sex is a sensory experience. If you leave out some of it, the sex scene is incomplete.

Good point, Marxist!

Mickie

 

[Marxist]

Very very Good Mick

To think with our eyes is a very male centered way of writing, but how many times during have you thought about the way things sound or smell?

It reminds me of the Seinfeld episode when Elaine records an anonymous sexy message as a joke. Everyone is so turned on by Elaine yet they've seen her every day for the million years, Jerry has even seen her naked. Yet at the end of the episode when the truth is revealed the three amigos are about to tear Elaine apart (sounds like bad porn or a story for CELEBRITIES).

Men, we do have ears, how else can we account for that strange question of mid-stroke pause caused by the quiff? Was that a fart? Or was it just air trapped by the suction and wet swellings of two horndogs inserting tab a into slot b too enthusiastically? Oh fuck it, why quit now!

MARXIST

 

[tigerjen]

tastes........

Speaking of tastes.....one can find them in many of my poems
posted! Take "Strawberry Blindfold".......and "You're The Cream
in My Mocha".....also "Creamsicle"...for examples.......strawberries and whipped cream...and champagne work in erotic scenes.....
Another one of my poems that involves chocolate.....well, chocolate is a strong aspect of many a erotic writing.....

Tigerjen


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[Marxist]

.....sure....how about posting promotional material somewhere else. like i said people will read your poetry without prompting.....or you can create a thread that deals with it.....but geez....are you an only child or the last child?

Much love to the most exalted POETESS TIGRESS
MARXIST

 

[Rrrosyn]

It's there...

Look in the poetry. I have been trying to use my "Sensations Alive" to remind me to put all the senses into the story.

BTW, the bean Sidhe tastes like sweet cream. Everywhere.

 

[Marxist]

excuse me....i'm going to go get some kleenex....it seems i've made a mess............

 

[tigerjen]

Dear Marxist........

Thank you for the "much love".......
I think you ought to take a chill pill and relax.....
I see nothing wrong w/ self promotion......but in
regards to the original thread you posted here I was
only mentioning examples of poems....sheesh!

til then.....

Tigerjen

 

[Mickie]

Tigerjen -- I'm as much a 'self-promoter' as anyone, but there's comes a time when people start to get irritated with the 'insurance salesman' style. A time and a place, you know.

Just a friendly warning. I hate to see you get flamed for doing something to help yourself along.

Mickie

 

[tigerjen]

It's how I am

If I sound like a bossy salesperson, I apologize, but I am
big on promotion and if my style bothers anybody I will
try to "tone it down"......but getting the word out
is my style.......and has been in many aspects of my life.

Just my 2 cents, that's all.

 

[KillerMuffin]

There's such a thing as intelligent marketing. You don't advertise beer at an AA meeting, you don't advertise the local porn theater in a church bulletin, you don't advertise War and Peace in a school that teaches reading skills to illiterate adults. Likewise, you don't hijack perfectly good threads about other topics for the express purpose of advertising yourself. There is such a thing as discussion, and that is what Marxist was trying to do. Marketing does not foster a good atmosphere for discussion, it merely irritates people and ruins what starts out as an interesting thread.

This thread is not about you, it's about sensory perceptions in stories. You actually have something relevant to add without sounding like a cheesy commercial. You should try it sometime.

All in all, you're a very off-putting kind of person. I don't know you well enough to care about you one way or the other, you don't have much to say beyond the fact that you have posted poetry or that you've made the top lists again. You aren't a person, you're a commercial and people don't respond to that. This isn't just a bulletin board where you advertise things, it's a community where you meet and make friends with real people who all have something in common, all of us came here to read erotic stuff, a lot of us have written it. It's the common thread that ties us together.

Market if you like, but try and participate in the discussion that go on around here, not just advertising yourself. No one, I don't care how information oriented they are, is nothing but a commerical.

 

[Dixon Carter Lee]

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I've always been big on odor.

Uh, let me explain that...

Smell is a powerful sense, and I use it in all my writings.

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The moment I realize a story is ONLY going to describe how loudly a girl screams I lose interest. A reader doesn't want to be in any bedroom, he (she) wants to be in this bedroom at this particular time. Reading erotic is like voyeurism, and voyeurism isn't just about watching people get nekkid, it's about observing them as they wash, do a crossword, cut their toenails. We all want that "Being John Malkovich" experience of (safely) invading another person's intimate world. And that involves knowing what they're smelling, what sounds surround them, what their clothes feel like, etc. That's voyeurism. That's sexy. That's erotica.

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[Debbie]

When I first started writing erotic stories I was so involved in the character development that I neglected the sensory side of it.

I think that I am getting better at writing and am now trying to include all the five senses.

I think it brings realism to the story, encouraging the reader to feel, smell, understand the taste, texture

DCL said it well. Quote "We all want that "Being John Malkovich" experience of (safely) invading another person's intimate world. And that involves knowing what they're smelling, what sounds surround them, what their clothes feel like, etc. That's voyeurism. That's sexy. That's erotica."

IMHO, as a woman tasting your partners skin is sexy, their smell also, all our senses can heighten the sexual experience.

I think this is a very good thread, it has made me think more about how the sensory content of a story can make the reader feel more involved.

 

[tigerjen]

senses......

i just thought of something....I know here we're talking
about senses....about taste, smell, etc.....but here is
another sense....the "6th sense"....known as intuition
and/or psychic ability.
What are opinions on this particular sense in general,
and is it possible to incorporate this one into an
erotic story?

 

[stormygal]

hello ,

new here, just posted first story in the new section.

i think that description in erotica, (bearing in mind i am new and this is the first story have posted)...is very important... i try to describe as often as i can, what i would feel, what my senses would pick up to increase my excitement... a story for me personally is very basic, but its filling in the details which are important, trying to get the reader to feel like they are there... transport them straight into the story.

(as well as spelling correctly and puncuation which i am dreadful at lol..but am working on it)


smiles


stormygal

 

[Rrrosyn]

This is just a clip from one of my stories. It doesn't matter which. My point is how little time it takes to put in the information of one sense.

**
I felt his mouth on mine, firm and urgent. Never having kissed in such a way, I was afraid to open my mouth to his inquisitive tongue. A muscular hand begun to knead my breast, his thumb roughly flicking my nipple.

Pleasure coursed through me. Moisture pooled between my thighs. I opened my mouth in a silent gasp, only to find it being probed by his hot tongue. He tasted of spiced wine, hot and exhilarating.
**

Just the last sentence. Eight little words. And "taste" was covered.

All senses can be done so they don't overwhelm a story. Add to the senses not subtracting from the story.

Sexuality with sensuality. Sensuality means the senses.

One thing though, most people haven't had spiced wine. I have. It was appropraite for the story, where lemonade wouldn't have been.

Last point... is it just me or are we all agreeing on this in different ways?

 

[Mickie]

Last point... is it just me or are we all agreeing on this in different ways?

*chuckles* Great minds think alike?

Mickie

 

[Rrrosyn]

Mickie,

Is that a compliment? Or, should I be worried?

 

[Mickie]

It certainly wasn't a criticism Some things are obvious. When we read about something, we like to 'enter the picture'. Of course we agree. It's a sort of universal concept. The best writers enable the reader to walk into an entirely different world from their own -- to 'live' the lives of the characters. The stories that affect us are those that weave all our senses into that world.

Mickie