Would it be possible to get some feedback on my first story (http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=94136) I posted it a while ago, expecting the feedback to come flooding into my inbox, and it hasn't happened, I've been thinking of writing a "Part 2" but I was wondering if my original was any good. It could be better, I know but I didn't think it was bad for a first shot... any comments would be welcome.