Songs About Fucking

[nerk]

A new piece I've finally gotten accepted. A vignette about an experiment in Daddy Dom-ing. Any feedback is welcome, but in particular I'm interested in the characters communication with each other, how (and if) it works for the reader.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=487772

 

[Cold_Eyes]

I might not be qualified to say how well it fit into the daddy dom niche because I haven't come across this fetish before. But I think it worked well. The dialogue holds it together, especially toward the end. Even though it's a vignette, you still managed to work in a conflict inside the role-play through the sub's acting out like a teenager.

 

[nerk]

I might not be qualified to say how well it fit into the daddy dom niche because I haven't come across this fetish before. But I think it worked well. The dialogue holds it together, especially toward the end. Even though it's a vignette, you still managed to work in a conflict inside the role-play through the sub's acting out like a teenager.

All the qualification that is required is to know if what you read works.