Something 'nicer' than my usual stuff

[manyeyedhydra]

I thought I'd try and write a story where somebody didn't get killed for a change, just to see if I could

Too sickly sweet? Still too ghastly?

Feedback gratefully accepted.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=374818

 

[ellynei]

It was not too anything, it was great. I'd say mis-categorized though. You put it under erotic horror, but it is not scary, I'd say this sweet tale belongs in non-human

Loved it.

I read your "Slayer vs. succubus" sometime long ago, really liked that one too. Musta been late at night since I apparently made no comment on it back then.

"Just to see if I could," you wrote.

Yeps, you definitely can write it sweet too, very nice. Just don't forget your "horrifying" stories are great too

 

[tickledkitty]

I thought this was really good. The only problem I had with it was the number of times you used the term "abyss" when describing Nicole's eyes. I kept thinking, "OK, I geddit already!"

 

[manyeyedhydra]

Thanks. I was on unfamiliar ground with this one.

I thought this was really good. The only problem I had with it was the number of times you used the term "abyss" when describing Nicole's eyes. I kept thinking, "OK, I geddit already!"

Yeah, I need to find an alternative to 'black pools' or 'windows onto the abyss'. I use both too frequently