AG31
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Hey, @electricblue66, terrific story. Here are a few thoughts.
"I knelt down to take my shoes off, and while I was there I undid Antony's laces."
It's important not to skip over these awkwardnesses. They bring the action home. Thanks.
"Or too much whiskey on a southbound train." Is this a literary allusion I don't know about? Or some Aussie colloquialism?
"sensation dropping to my cock, that good, deep weight inside which anchors me, gives my heart some place to go."
I'm constantly trying to describe this. I wish I'd thought of this way!
"rigid right up the centre of his gut." Another description I wish I'd thought of.
"I knelt down to take my shoes off, and while I was there I undid Antony's laces."
It's important not to skip over these awkwardnesses. They bring the action home. Thanks.
"Or too much whiskey on a southbound train." Is this a literary allusion I don't know about? Or some Aussie colloquialism?
"sensation dropping to my cock, that good, deep weight inside which anchors me, gives my heart some place to go."
I'm constantly trying to describe this. I wish I'd thought of this way!
"rigid right up the centre of his gut." Another description I wish I'd thought of.